Abridged Life
A problem solver.17 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, what a sad story, and so believable -- we seem to be in a sorry state worldwide anymore. One can only hope that your protagonist kept driving... Best of luck in the contest with this gem.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
  |
Oh, what a sad story, and so believable -- we seem to be in a sorry state worldwide anymore. One can only hope that your protagonist kept driving... Best of luck in the contest with this gem.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
-
Thanks for the review, Dawn. It came third in the contest.
-
Congrats! You've very welcome. :)
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I think your hitchhiking friend has other plans. You probably won't see him again. If his problems were that severe, he should have continued talking to you and maybe worked some things out.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
 |
I think your hitchhiking friend has other plans. You probably won't see him again. If his problems were that severe, he should have continued talking to you and maybe worked some things out.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
-
Thanks for the review, Gary. I probably should not have let him get out of the car.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 50 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest. Oh no...did he jump to his death? That's sad.
Good words count and story line. A great presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid. Atticus
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
|
Excellent entry for the 50 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest. Oh no...did he jump to his death? That's sad.
Good words count and story line. A great presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid. Atticus
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, Gypsy. Is that Atticus Finch? LOL
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word flash fiction story, Abridged Life, has the required word count and seems to be the preamble to either a suicide or a rescue. I guess we'll need another fifty words to find out.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
|
This fifty-word flash fiction story, Abridged Life, has the required word count and seems to be the preamble to either a suicide or a rescue. I guess we'll need another fifty words to find out.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
-
Thanks for the review, Bill. The title gives it away.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is certainly a life cut short, by the hitchhiker's own choice. Quite an interesting and complete story for only 50 words. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
|
This is certainly a life cut short, by the hitchhiker's own choice. Quite an interesting and complete story for only 50 words. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, Carol. I should have never let him out of the car.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What a horrible ending. Not your penned words herein but to think of the desperation someone must have to take his own life. Did they regret it for the remaining seconds as they fell into the New River?
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
|
What a horrible ending. Not your penned words herein but to think of the desperation someone must have to take his own life. Did they regret it for the remaining seconds as they fell into the New River?
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
-
I have always wondered what goes through the mind of a jumper on the way down.
Comment from LJbutterfly
It's unbelievable that you managed to create a surprise ending to a story this short, but I wasn't expected the protagonist to stop in the middle of the bridge. Great story is fifty words, with a clever title. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
|
It's unbelievable that you managed to create a surprise ending to a story this short, but I wasn't expected the protagonist to stop in the middle of the bridge. Great story is fifty words, with a clever title. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, LJ. Fifty words is quite a challenge. Didn't have enough words for the jump.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Are you going to write more? It sounds like you picked up a ghost or spirit. He has been let off where he jumped. This was interesting. You need to keep writing. Turn it into a great story. You held my attention until it stopped. Thank you.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
|
Are you going to write more? It sounds like you picked up a ghost or spirit. He has been let off where he jumped. This was interesting. You need to keep writing. Turn it into a great story. You held my attention until it stopped. Thank you.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, Carolyn. Poetry is really my thing, but I may try a short story later.
-
Great. You are welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am wondering this young hitchhiker is looking for. I am honestly worried for his life. I enjoyed reading this writing prompt entry. I am sure I am reading way too much into it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
|
I am wondering this young hitchhiker is looking for. I am honestly worried for his life. I enjoyed reading this writing prompt entry. I am sure I am reading way too much into it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, Barb. you are right to be worried about this young man. He wasn't getting out of the car to enjoy the view.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well that was a handy ride for both of them. He wanted to go to the bridge anyway, so he was able to show the you where to go. But, why did he want to get off halfway over? Were his problems so bad he was he going to jump off it? You've written a good 50 word story, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
|
Well that was a handy ride for both of them. He wanted to go to the bridge anyway, so he was able to show the you where to go. But, why did he want to get off halfway over? Were his problems so bad he was he going to jump off it? You've written a good 50 word story, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, Sandra. You guessed it.
