Double, Double Toil and Trouble
A student learns to be a teacher.6 total reviews
Comment from karenina
MacBeth, I had a loose grip on... My mom was a Bridge player (and ironically, she also played Bridge with Omar Shariff at a tournament in Hawaii! Great entry for the contest. Your tone is comfortable and chatty--almost as if we were having coffee and you were sharing this memory.
Good luck!
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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MacBeth, I had a loose grip on... My mom was a Bridge player (and ironically, she also played Bridge with Omar Shariff at a tournament in Hawaii! Great entry for the contest. Your tone is comfortable and chatty--almost as if we were having coffee and you were sharing this memory.
Good luck!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review. I do feel like I have a new friend in you. I want to be your fan when I work out how to do it. I have enjoyed our visits. Sarah
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I'd love that! The process will fall into place soon...and then you can fan two people per day!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a very good story for this contest, good luck. I really like the way you used the Macbeth quote as a student in high school and then the double part for your work as a teacher. Thank you for entering the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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This is a very good story for this contest, good luck. I really like the way you used the Macbeth quote as a student in high school and then the double part for your work as a teacher. Thank you for entering the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting memory.
The piece flows well. The images are clear. The story stays on point. The pace is good. The ending is a neat object lesson.
Suggestions:
Double, doubl e toil and trouble Fire burn and caldron bubble"
The second double needs an extra space removed. Usually when quoting older poems that cap each line either the two lines are written as two lines or a "/" is put between to notify people of such.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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An interesting memory.
The piece flows well. The images are clear. The story stays on point. The pace is good. The ending is a neat object lesson.
Suggestions:
Double, doubl e toil and trouble Fire burn and caldron bubble"
The second double needs an extra space removed. Usually when quoting older poems that cap each line either the two lines are written as two lines or a "/" is put between to notify people of such.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate your editing help. I will take care of it. Thanks.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Raul1
This story meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. I have enjoyed reading it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good job! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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This story meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. I have enjoyed reading it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good job! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you Raul1. I appreciate your kind words. I am having fun with FanStory.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You tell a really good story and are a good writer. You do need to format your story into paragraphs with one blank line between each paragraph and no indent. End first paragraph after Macbeth. You should have four paragraphs. If I can be any further help, let me know.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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You tell a really good story and are a good writer. You do need to format your story into paragraphs with one blank line between each paragraph and no indent. End first paragraph after Macbeth. You should have four paragraphs. If I can be any further help, let me know.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you Carol for your kind words and your editing help. I am not sure where the paragraph breaks should be. After Macbeth, after magnificent teacher, after poems we wrote, after reading and writing,after chant. I can use some editing help. Thanks again.
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You did a really good job of dividing it into paragraphs. The only difference I would make is remove "had" from second paragraph as it distances the reader. There is a word for using words like that but I'm way too far away from my days of learning the names of parts of speech.
Comment from jessizero
Some of my favorite high school memories are about Macbeth!!! I enjoyed reading about your transition from high school student to teacher. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you. :)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Some of my favorite high school memories are about Macbeth!!! I enjoyed reading about your transition from high school student to teacher. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you. :)
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you jessizero for your support I am enjoying being in a group that is helpful and caring.
