On The Other Side Of Hell
A 5-7-5 poem17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such an appropriate write for this club and because of this you deserve a six for this write Debra, I love your clever words here, dementia is such a terrible, cruel thing to happen to anyone, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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This is such an appropriate write for this club and because of this you deserve a six for this write Debra, I love your clever words here, dementia is such a terrible, cruel thing to happen to anyone, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Hi Dolly :) Thanks so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A beautiful haiku poem about dementia. It's such perverse disease.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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A beautiful haiku poem about dementia. It's such perverse disease.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
This is rather close to home. I'm visiting my parents and my dad has rapidly progressing Alzheimer's. His memories are indeed muddled. Clarity won't come until Heaven which is after this time on Earth. It's hard for the dementia sufferer and even more for the loved ones around him/her.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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This is rather close to home. I'm visiting my parents and my dad has rapidly progressing Alzheimer's. His memories are indeed muddled. Clarity won't come until Heaven which is after this time on Earth. It's hard for the dementia sufferer and even more for the loved ones around him/her.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hi Helen, we?re going through this with my mother-in-law too... sending love and understanding your way.
Thank you for reading.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully penned and illustrated poem for the unique prompt, dear Debra. I think Heaven is full clarity and perfection as we are transfigured from mortal flesh to immortal spirit to enter.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best for the challenge,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Beautifully penned and illustrated poem for the unique prompt, dear Debra. I think Heaven is full clarity and perfection as we are transfigured from mortal flesh to immortal spirit to enter.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best for the challenge,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Sal :) I appreciate your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
Nice to see you back here. It's been a while.
I've had some experience with Alzheimer's/dementia. It is sad to watch someone go downhill. They don't even know if they've had their breakfast, let alone if they've taken their pills. They forget at every turn. The blood is just not getting to all parts of their brain. There are little bits here, and little bits there. My mother could sing an old hymn, word for word. But she had no idea who I was.
I love your second line, some nice alliteration there...
"where mem'ries muddle and merge"
Nicely penned for the writing club's "`Doorway To"!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Hi Debra,
Nice to see you back here. It's been a while.
I've had some experience with Alzheimer's/dementia. It is sad to watch someone go downhill. They don't even know if they've had their breakfast, let alone if they've taken their pills. They forget at every turn. The blood is just not getting to all parts of their brain. There are little bits here, and little bits there. My mother could sing an old hymn, word for word. But she had no idea who I was.
I love your second line, some nice alliteration there...
"where mem'ries muddle and merge"
Nicely penned for the writing club's "`Doorway To"!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Hi Kimbob, it?s good to be back, hope you?re well :) Thank you for your feedback. I lost my Grandad to this awful illness a few years ago, and now, though not diagnosed, we?re certain that my mother-in-law also has it. It is heartbreaking to witness her gradually forget...
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think you have done an excellent job of sharing what it must feel like to have dementia. With three lines you say so much and address it well. Great job.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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I think you have done an excellent job of sharing what it must feel like to have dementia. With three lines you say so much and address it well. Great job.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your feedback, Michael, I appreciate it. Best wishes, Debra:)
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes clarity awaits. One day, hopefully, there will be a cure. It is sad to watch those afflicted with this syndrome. Not knowing who their loved ones are is horrible. There are many people with dementia in Nursing Homes that must be monitored twenty-four-seven. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Yes clarity awaits. One day, hopefully, there will be a cure. It is sad to watch those afflicted with this syndrome. Not knowing who their loved ones are is horrible. There are many people with dementia in Nursing Homes that must be monitored twenty-four-seven. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Hi Carolyn, thank you for your feedback. I lost my Grandad to this awful illness a few years ago, and now, my mother-in-law is tormented by it. It is heartbreaking to witness her gradually forget... Best wishes, Debra
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This is so sad. God Bless her. Best wishes to you and your family. May he rest in peace.
