On The Other Side Of Hell
A 5-7-5 poem17 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
Deb, I hope so, too, however... Sometimes clarity comes at inappropriate times.
Dementia is one of those things, I always thought was way off in the future, but I think I am semi-there. Maybe three quarters.
I'll be in the middle of a sentence, and stop, totally blank. Someone offers the appropriate word and continues on with the thought; then, in the middle of what she's saying, I remember and blurt out the forgotten word, triumphantly, so proud of remembering. Rude. not funny. Somethimes I think I am simultaneously regressing into a 5 yr old. (which has it's good points)
Debra, pardon the long winded above. It just struck a chord.
Congratulations on being recognized.
That is a precious picture of cute you and cute husband!
You keep things light, while I am in midst of being furious at my government and very vocal about it. Not a healthy pasttime.
Maybe I can think of something funny.
I'll have to see what else you've been up to.
Katharine
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Deb, I hope so, too, however... Sometimes clarity comes at inappropriate times.
Dementia is one of those things, I always thought was way off in the future, but I think I am semi-there. Maybe three quarters.
I'll be in the middle of a sentence, and stop, totally blank. Someone offers the appropriate word and continues on with the thought; then, in the middle of what she's saying, I remember and blurt out the forgotten word, triumphantly, so proud of remembering. Rude. not funny. Somethimes I think I am simultaneously regressing into a 5 yr old. (which has it's good points)
Debra, pardon the long winded above. It just struck a chord.
Congratulations on being recognized.
That is a precious picture of cute you and cute husband!
You keep things light, while I am in midst of being furious at my government and very vocal about it. Not a healthy pasttime.
Maybe I can think of something funny.
I'll have to see what else you've been up to.
Katharine
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your feedback, Katharine :) Best wishes as always, Debra x
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good grief!
Just re-read all that garbage. I apologize.
K
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Hey Katharine, there is need to apologise, at all! :) xx
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my, you have written a most moving small poem, my friend, and after all the time we have known one another, you have to know I seldom award one of my few sixes to a small poem, but this is truly exceptional, IMHO! And that presentation!!! WOW!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Oh my, you have written a most moving small poem, my friend, and after all the time we have known one another, you have to know I seldom award one of my few sixes to a small poem, but this is truly exceptional, IMHO! And that presentation!!! WOW!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Hello Dawn :)
Thank you so much for your kind and enthusiastic review of my poem. I really appreciate it!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Aussie
Wonderful Club entry. Scientists are very close to a cure. I liked your poem because it speaks the truth about how dementia affects the here and now and the sufferer can't see the future. Apart from knock-out pills, nursing them is frustrating. What you can't understand, you can't treat. Well done K XX
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Wonderful Club entry. Scientists are very close to a cure. I liked your poem because it speaks the truth about how dementia affects the here and now and the sufferer can't see the future. Apart from knock-out pills, nursing them is frustrating. What you can't understand, you can't treat. Well done K XX
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind feedback, Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A very pleasing philosophical 5-7-5 poem, Debra. You have managed to encapsulate a great unresolved medical question into a mere seventeen syllables. A masterpiece of concision. Kate xx
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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A very pleasing philosophical 5-7-5 poem, Debra. You have managed to encapsulate a great unresolved medical question into a mere seventeen syllables. A masterpiece of concision. Kate xx
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your feedback, Kate :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gloria ....
How great to see you again, Debra. Even with this poem that is so honest, and very sad.
You have utilized every aspect of the form here, and your title is brilliant. An excellent response to the Picture This Club.
Always great to read your astute work.
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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How great to see you again, Debra. Even with this poem that is so honest, and very sad.
You have utilized every aspect of the form here, and your title is brilliant. An excellent response to the Picture This Club.
Always great to read your astute work.
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hi Gloria, thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club response read well, Debra. I enjoyed reading it
and can see how it fits perfectly with those affected by
dementia. One day soon in their lives, they will be cured forever.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Your club response read well, Debra. I enjoyed reading it
and can see how it fits perfectly with those affected by
dementia. One day soon in their lives, they will be cured forever.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your feedback, Jan :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Heather Knight
This is extremely sad, but also very beautiful and full of hope.
Any kind of illness is bad, but dementia turns you into someone else. You stop being yourself.
The alliteration in the middle of your poem creates a very powerful effect.
I also hope you're right. x
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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This is extremely sad, but also very beautiful and full of hope.
Any kind of illness is bad, but dementia turns you into someone else. You stop being yourself.
The alliteration in the middle of your poem creates a very powerful effect.
I also hope you're right. x
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Hi Maria :) Thanks so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Well deserved x
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I'm not sure what awaits us, but if anything does I believe it will be perfect.
Dementia is a cruel, cruel disease that so many families are having to live with. Your poem is one of reality and hope for the next life.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I'm not sure what awaits us, but if anything does I believe it will be perfect.
Dementia is a cruel, cruel disease that so many families are having to live with. Your poem is one of reality and hope for the next life.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Pam, for your feedback. I appreciate it :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from dragonpoet
Debra,
This poem matches will wiht the picture this challenge. Heaven is the only place where there is constant clarity. I like the alliteration in the second line. It kind of gives the feel of the words.
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Debra,
This poem matches will wiht the picture this challenge. Heaven is the only place where there is constant clarity. I like the alliteration in the second line. It kind of gives the feel of the words.
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Joan
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Joan :)
Best wishes, Debra
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Don't mention it, Debra.
Joan
Comment from karenina
Hello Debra! It's been a minute!
Ament to this one, poetess. For my grandmom, who lived the last thirty-plus years of her life lost in Alzheimer's...for all who struggle with dementia in all its manifestations, and for the families that struggle to cope, let us lean on faith that there is no frailty of mind nor memory on the other side!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hello Debra! It's been a minute!
Ament to this one, poetess. For my grandmom, who lived the last thirty-plus years of her life lost in Alzheimer's...for all who struggle with dementia in all its manifestations, and for the families that struggle to cope, let us lean on faith that there is no frailty of mind nor memory on the other side!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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A minute, indeed! Certainly feels like it!
Thank you so much for your kind and understanding feedback, Karenina:) Best wishes as always, Debra x
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So nice to see a PM that you posted! Isn't it frustrating when life gets in the way of Fanstory? (smile)
