Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

I'm glad the uncle is back among the living. You did a great job as always. I know there is trouble lurking for those boys. I'm ready to see what happens. Have a great evening. Shirley

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022

Thank you, Shirley :) Yes, Uncle Jacks is alive and ready to protect the boys. I'm happy you enjoyed. The next chapter will get interesting. The two officers have questions for Jem and Jace's uncle.

Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

I have been following this story, and so far I haven't been sorry. It is exciting and has kept my interest with each new chapter. I like the addition of the pets and the names you gave them. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022

Thank you, prettybluebirds :) I appreciate your support and thrilled you are enjoying the chapters. This is great news since I am rewriting this first book in the series. Your feedback gives me the confidence I need to keep on going.

Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

You've handled this episode rather well Dear Shana, as you do with all the facets of drama and emotion, this episode was deeply moving, and I love the reception that a brighter Jackson is experiencing, being a pilot, I suspect, he would like the boys to stay with John, and they would love to have them, a large house with two delightful pets, beautifully written Shana, blessings Roy

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022

Thank you, dear friend :) I'm happy to hear you approve. This book is very important to rewrite as best as I can. Your feedback is important. I pray that I can get through this book quicker than all the others. LOL! It seems to take me forever to complete each one.

Thanks for supporting me with encouraging words.
Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 09-Aug-2022

Good job Shana

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Excellent

An interesting piece of writing.

The flow is good. The scene stays on point. The dialogue is believable. The end leaves us looking for the next development.

Suggestion:

If Jackson is in the recovery room that would mean he is just out of surgery. He would have equipment attached. Usually both cardiac monitoring and I.V. Visitors are usually not allowed in recovery and as soon as patients are stable enough to not be constantly monitored they are moved to general population. A private room might be more realistic.

Thanks for a good read.

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022

Thanks so much, dellsworthpoet :) I appreciate your positive feedback and your helpful advice. I'll definitely make the changes on the hospital room he's in. A private room sounds much better and more realistic.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by dellsworthpoet on 08-Aug-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This is an excellent chapter. Your dialogue is strong. Your descriptions are excellent and I could see this play out in my minds eye. The story easily kept my interest. Great job.

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022

Thanks so much, Michael! :) So glad to hear you enjoyed the chapter. I appreciate your positive feedback. It is definitely helpful and encouraging.

Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)