My Messy House
The mom had to cry.6 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you have 5 votes now!
I look back now and wonder how I managed looking after my father and 7 cats. At times I felt as if I was living in a mad house.
I truly don't know how women with a husband , a bunch of growing kids and even with a pet cope.
It's not just about stamina , it s also about keeping one s nerves in check.
Something tells me that you speak from personal experience in your poem.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Ciao poet, you have 5 votes now!
I look back now and wonder how I managed looking after my father and 7 cats. At times I felt as if I was living in a mad house.
I truly don't know how women with a husband , a bunch of growing kids and even with a pet cope.
It's not just about stamina , it s also about keeping one s nerves in check.
Something tells me that you speak from personal experience in your poem.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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No I made the poem up, thanks for the vote! I have two other poems in contests.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I like this piece better than the ones that preceded your and believe yours could be even better with a darker ink and perhaps centering the words by and through advance editing.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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I like this piece better than the ones that preceded your and believe yours could be even better with a darker ink and perhaps centering the words by and through advance editing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Ok, thanks!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and well written poem about a mess. I would have been crying like you said you did if that happened to me. We don't have our children living with us, but we have five kittens. Some days I feel like crying or running far away. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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This is a very cute and well written poem about a mess. I would have been crying like you said you did if that happened to me. We don't have our children living with us, but we have five kittens. Some days I feel like crying or running far away. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I thought this poem was hilarious. I enjoyed the flow and cadence, and your chosen artwork added to the reader's visualization.
My only recommendation would be to consider older eyes, and use a font color easier to read than yellow on white. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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I thought this poem was hilarious. I enjoyed the flow and cadence, and your chosen artwork added to the reader's visualization.
My only recommendation would be to consider older eyes, and use a font color easier to read than yellow on white. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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The yellow font goes with the picture. Thanks.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Oh, my, that would be one heck of a mess. I love the picture you attached to the writing, as it does add so much to it. I think we all have days like this at times. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Oh, my, that would be one heck of a mess. I love the picture you attached to the writing, as it does add so much to it. I think we all have days like this at times. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Yellow font goes with the picture, thanks.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a mess for sure, Mystery Author. You did a
good job describing all the messes. The picture is
awful looking, yet perfect at the same time. Your
words read smooth with good rhymes.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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What a mess for sure, Mystery Author. You did a
good job describing all the messes. The picture is
awful looking, yet perfect at the same time. Your
words read smooth with good rhymes.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thanks
