My Road Through Life
Four stanzas-ab ab57 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Jaybird, your poem beautifully illustrates the various paths of life.
I especially liked:
I now approach the final bends
and wonder where this journey ends
(It ends at the Pearly Gate. Our Heavenly Father and everyone that you have lost and loved will be waiting for you.)
Smooth rhyming. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Hello Jaybird, your poem beautifully illustrates the various paths of life.
I especially liked:
I now approach the final bends
and wonder where this journey ends
(It ends at the Pearly Gate. Our Heavenly Father and everyone that you have lost and loved will be waiting for you.)
Smooth rhyming. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
Comment from Ulla
Yes, Jay, I can well imagine that it's been a long journey through your 98 years I especially liked the last stanza which just says it all. A wonderful ending to a fine and well written poem. Ulla:)))
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Yes, Jay, I can well imagine that it's been a long journey through your 98 years I especially liked the last stanza which just says it all. A wonderful ending to a fine and well written poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a honest poem about mortality. yes. You have lived a long life, but you are not 100 yet so you still have many years left. Keep on going to places wherever you can and never stop and never stop writing.
Well done.
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What a honest poem about mortality. yes. You have lived a long life, but you are not 100 yet so you still have many years left. Keep on going to places wherever you can and never stop and never stop writing.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Your note and poem are appreciated, jaybird.
-You wrote a very good poem, sharing about
the roads you have traveled, reflecting on how you felt and feel now.
-The imagery and rhyme are very good, like
"My feet are weary, painful, slow."
-A very good concluding verse, too.
-Have a good evening and upcoming weekend.
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-Your note and poem are appreciated, jaybird.
-You wrote a very good poem, sharing about
the roads you have traveled, reflecting on how you felt and feel now.
-The imagery and rhyme are very good, like
"My feet are weary, painful, slow."
-A very good concluding verse, too.
-Have a good evening and upcoming weekend.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jake,
This is an excellent poem with very good rhymes and smooth meter.
You've been writing poetry longer than most people on fanstory have been alive and have knowledge stretching back all the way to the great depression.
My great grandfather lived to be ninety-nine, and at one point was the oldest voter in Brooklyn.
I think the journey ends with a reunion.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Hello Jake,
This is an excellent poem with very good rhymes and smooth meter.
You've been writing poetry longer than most people on fanstory have been alive and have knowledge stretching back all the way to the great depression.
My great grandfather lived to be ninety-nine, and at one point was the oldest voter in Brooklyn.
I think the journey ends with a reunion.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
Comment from Laurie Holding
So beautiful, Jaybird! But please know that you aren't alone; you have your whole FanStory fan club out here gobbling up your work, so even if we can't be with you in person, you still have virtual company! Thanks for posting this poignant poem.
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So beautiful, Jaybird! But please know that you aren't alone; you have your whole FanStory fan club out here gobbling up your work, so even if we can't be with you in person, you still have virtual company! Thanks for posting this poignant poem.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's a good one, Jaybird. I guess you are telling me what's up ahead for me. I think your last stanza is one of the best that you have written from what I have read.
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That's a good one, Jaybird. I guess you are telling me what's up ahead for me. I think your last stanza is one of the best that you have written from what I have read.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
Comment from Boogienights
Your poetry is beautiful as always, but please don't be in a hurry to leave us. Your words reflect your pain, believe me I know what it's like, but your family needs you as long as possible.
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Your poetry is beautiful as always, but please don't be in a hurry to leave us. Your words reflect your pain, believe me I know what it's like, but your family needs you as long as possible.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
I admire your strength and wit, and your ability to write poetry and share your deepest thoughts in rhyme. Your feet may be "weary, painful, slow," but you are a blessing to all of us on FanStory, as evidenced by the number of writers who read your posts. Thank you for sharing.
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I admire your strength and wit, and your ability to write poetry and share your deepest thoughts in rhyme. Your feet may be "weary, painful, slow," but you are a blessing to all of us on FanStory, as evidenced by the number of writers who read your posts. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
Comment from Dawn Munro
I think your poem is wonderful, although the topic is more than a bit unsettling, as I guess we all begin to ponder our futures past a certain age. Sometimes I dwell a little longer than I should in the past, too!
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I think your poem is wonderful, although the topic is more than a bit unsettling, as I guess we all begin to ponder our futures past a certain age. Sometimes I dwell a little longer than I should in the past, too!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
