Lost Love
True love no more.18 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We feel such grief when losing someone close and here you had a double dose of grief and I am sorry for your loss. It is hard to change our habits when we have given someone our heart, but we learn to get over it and move on. A moving and endearing write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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We feel such grief when losing someone close and here you had a double dose of grief and I am sorry for your loss. It is hard to change our habits when we have given someone our heart, but we learn to get over it and move on. A moving and endearing write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thanks Dolly.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
It's a good poem. However, the rhyme scheme is inconsistent. The top portion rhymes more than the bottom. you are using the same end rhyme word with repeated "me" and 'again". This inconsistency throws off the rhythm of the poem. It may be better as a free verse poem with no rhyming words. The visual fits fine. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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It's a good poem. However, the rhyme scheme is inconsistent. The top portion rhymes more than the bottom. you are using the same end rhyme word with repeated "me" and 'again". This inconsistency throws off the rhythm of the poem. It may be better as a free verse poem with no rhyming words. The visual fits fine. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thanks Sandra.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are sad, heartfelt, clear, upsetting descriptive and
creative. Thank you for the author's notes - may you work through your
pain and keep your spirit. I found the last line filled with spirit! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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The author's words are sad, heartfelt, clear, upsetting descriptive and
creative. Thank you for the author's notes - may you work through your
pain and keep your spirit. I found the last line filled with spirit! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you so very much Harmony.
Comment from papa55mike
Blessings are always behind great tragedies, but your boyfriend was an ass to leave so close after a loss. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Blessings are always behind great tragedies, but your boyfriend was an ass to leave so close after a loss. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you Mike. God bless you!
Comment from TDLRasmar
It was a very sweet poem about something that everyone goes through, heartbreak. I used to look for my lost love too, but then someone told me that she wasn't lost, but ran away. In a way I guess that means my lost love was found. Good luck on your entry.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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It was a very sweet poem about something that everyone goes through, heartbreak. I used to look for my lost love too, but then someone told me that she wasn't lost, but ran away. In a way I guess that means my lost love was found. Good luck on your entry.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you for understanding. I guess you could say more ran away too.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
How young might you be? This seems rather adolescent, and that is fine for love should be experience in the throes of youthfulness. I like this very much, and hope the time of mourning has passed and the new love has blossomed to brighten the way.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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How young might you be? This seems rather adolescent, and that is fine for love should be experience in the throes of youthfulness. I like this very much, and hope the time of mourning has passed and the new love has blossomed to brighten the way.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Awe Tom. I wish I were young. My heart is though. I've only loved a few times.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice response to the prompt. You move from the pain of lost love to a resolute decision to move on and find new love, with the assurance that you are strong enough to so. It's a poem of resilience and hope embedded in the grief over love lost. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Nice response to the prompt. You move from the pain of lost love to a resolute decision to move on and find new love, with the assurance that you are strong enough to so. It's a poem of resilience and hope embedded in the grief over love lost. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and for understanding.
Comment from Eternal Muse
I can feel pain and loss coming through your words. The pain is still there despite all the years. I must tell you, though - I seriously question the character and values of a man who would say goodbye to a woman two days after she had lost her father. He should have waited for you to go through your bereavement period, at least. This was cruel and heartless, and I wouldn't want to spend the rest of my life with a man like this.
You are better off without him, despite the pain.
I emphasize with your loss, I know well what it's like to lose a relative. The pain like this never dies, it eases with the years, but our loved ones are always with us, in spirit.
A poem that would stay with a reader. Well done, and I like your honesty. You know, we are one big family here, and you are always welcome to share.
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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I can feel pain and loss coming through your words. The pain is still there despite all the years. I must tell you, though - I seriously question the character and values of a man who would say goodbye to a woman two days after she had lost her father. He should have waited for you to go through your bereavement period, at least. This was cruel and heartless, and I wouldn't want to spend the rest of my life with a man like this.
You are better off without him, despite the pain.
I emphasize with your loss, I know well what it's like to lose a relative. The pain like this never dies, it eases with the years, but our loved ones are always with us, in spirit.
A poem that would stay with a reader. Well done, and I like your honesty. You know, we are one big family here, and you are always welcome to share.
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Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you so very much for your kind words and understanding. I agree. Anyone who walks away right after you've lost a loved one isn't really worth keeping.
