Tanka Collection
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Comment from Mark Schardine
This poem captures a moment of sorrow and of longing. The loved one will return, hopefully soon, but the sound of the mourning doves may suggest that this person will not return.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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This poem captures a moment of sorrow and of longing. The loved one will return, hopefully soon, but the sound of the mourning doves may suggest that this person will not return.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much, Mark.
Gypsy
"Art is coming face to face with yourself"
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy,
This is a really great poem. First of all, the photo's subject is beautiful and haunting.
Then the part where the dying sun...I took to mean that the protagonist and her love are separated by great distances.
Beautiful work, Gypsy.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Gypsy,
This is a really great poem. First of all, the photo's subject is beautiful and haunting.
Then the part where the dying sun...I took to mean that the protagonist and her love are separated by great distances.
Beautiful work, Gypsy.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Cindy, I appreciate your feedback and kind words.
The paintings are from a Japanese artist, Ikenaga Yasunari. I love his work and I use it often.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written tanka poem. Lovely overall presentation, background and choice of font. Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words as well. Very nicely presented .
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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This is a nicely written tanka poem. Lovely overall presentation, background and choice of font. Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words as well. Very nicely presented .
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind feedback. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Very soothing, loving verse but it doesn't exactly meet Tanka format for syllable count in two lines:
1st Line = 4 syllables
5th Line = 8 syllables
Very nice.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Very soothing, loving verse but it doesn't exactly meet Tanka format for syllable count in two lines:
1st Line = 4 syllables
5th Line = 8 syllables
Very nice.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Same as with haiku, English tanka doesn't have to be 5-7-5-7-7 for the same reason.
Resources...
TANKA is a romantic Japanese poetic form that originated in the Japanese Imperial Court, where men and women engaged in courtship would exchange tanka. The form was created 1,200 years ago. Like haiku, it's written in a succinct manner in 31 syllables (5/7/5/7/7) OR LESS in a short/long/short/long/long format because Japanese and English syllables are different. Personification, metaphor, simile are permitted in Tanka. Capitalization and punctuation should only be used when necessary. No end rhymes. click here if you want to see tanka rules -- click here if you want to see modern tanka examples -- click here if you want to read free online tanka book -- click here to read Tanka Society of America ? click here to read Masterpiece Classes
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Got it, if I rated lower than 5 I will change. I will go check.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good and well written modern haiku you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery that went well with your words. thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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This is a very good and well written modern haiku you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery that went well with your words. thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind feedback. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
Comment from lyenochka
It's really during twilight when our emotions get stirred up the most and so I can understand why the narrator misses her beloved most at sunset. There are so many death references such as "dying sun" and "bur - reeds" (buried) bed and "mourning doves."
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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It's really during twilight when our emotions get stirred up the most and so I can understand why the narrator misses her beloved most at sunset. There are so many death references such as "dying sun" and "bur - reeds" (buried) bed and "mourning doves."
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Yes, long distance relationships don't work. This woman's grief reflects the death metaphors. You are very good at understanding my poetry.
Thank you very much, Helen. Have a wonderful day 😊
MariVal (*<>*) xoxoxo ❤️
Comment from aryr
A delightful picture, Gypsy. Your words definitely described the sorrow of a love lost, of the dilemma that followed. Unfortunately life goes on. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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A delightful picture, Gypsy. Your words definitely described the sorrow of a love lost, of the dilemma that followed. Unfortunately life goes on. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr, for your time and kind review. Blessed be and hugs.
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Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment from royowen
What a beautiful tanka Gypsy, there's something about certain breeds of birds that is inspiring for generating examples of romantic beauty in something like this great poem, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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What a beautiful tanka Gypsy, there's something about certain breeds of birds that is inspiring for generating examples of romantic beauty in something like this great poem, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
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Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
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Well done
Comment from kahpot
Missing someone is always hard, but when the sun falls and the pillow calls, the heart feels it most, an excellent Tanka that many will relate to, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Missing someone is always hard, but when the sun falls and the pillow calls, the heart feels it most, an excellent Tanka that many will relate to, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
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Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
Comment from irishauthorme
Hi, GBR,
Always enjoy your ventures into the literary void.
This tanka is a reminder of the devotion of the mourning doves compared to the devotion of one of us to another, a principle that is too often violated.
We have a pair that come and build a nest on our giant willow tree, raise a family, stay the rest of the summer lulling us to sleep, then migrate to a warmer climate and return in the spring.
And yes, sundowns foster memories.
Good work,
irish
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Hi, GBR,
Always enjoy your ventures into the literary void.
This tanka is a reminder of the devotion of the mourning doves compared to the devotion of one of us to another, a principle that is too often violated.
We have a pair that come and build a nest on our giant willow tree, raise a family, stay the rest of the summer lulling us to sleep, then migrate to a warmer climate and return in the spring.
And yes, sundowns foster memories.
Good work,
irish
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much for such beatiful and detailed review. You are very kind and I appreciate it.
Gypsy