The Coward
That is me17 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
I like your 8 words or less poem. I like that you made the word "what" smaller as if it were in the distance approaching. It all works. However, I don't get how the abstract visual fits such a concrete thought. For me it doesn't go with your defined message. Good luck in the contest if it is not over.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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I like your 8 words or less poem. I like that you made the word "what" smaller as if it were in the distance approaching. It all works. However, I don't get how the abstract visual fits such a concrete thought. For me it doesn't go with your defined message. Good luck in the contest if it is not over.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you, very much. Sandra for a wonderful review. Blessings, Barbara
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You are welcome.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I'm not sure I understand this verse.
I appreciate the artwork as it looks to tell the story of you being taken over or trampled in some way.
I am just not sure what your intention is.
Are you saying that you not a strong person to handle adversity?
I feel badly that I don't understand.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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I'm not sure I understand this verse.
I appreciate the artwork as it looks to tell the story of you being taken over or trampled in some way.
I am just not sure what your intention is.
Are you saying that you not a strong person to handle adversity?
I feel badly that I don't understand.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you, kL. It is about the aweful things going on in the world and my fear, Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Raul1
You have set your few words well written. This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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You have set your few words well written. This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Raul. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from godlucifer
i think sometime we don't want to see what is coming in the future. we live for the present,past,and future because this way we don't have to fear for what is coming. your poem was well structure and well written. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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i think sometime we don't want to see what is coming in the future. we live for the present,past,and future because this way we don't have to fear for what is coming. your poem was well structure and well written. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Yes. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Wendy G
I can understand, and you have expressed your sense of fear and avoidance of coming realities very well.When darkness or perceived darkness is on the threshold, it is daunting. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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I can understand, and you have expressed your sense of fear and avoidance of coming realities very well.When darkness or perceived darkness is on the threshold, it is daunting. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Wendy for your understanding and kind words, Blessings, Barbara
Comment from jake cosmos aller
cool poem and thought. Sometimes I think that I don't want to know what is coming down the pike towards me, just want to live today and don't worry about tomorrow which may never come.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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cool poem and thought. Sometimes I think that I don't want to know what is coming down the pike towards me, just want to live today and don't worry about tomorrow which may never come.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you, jake. That's the wise way to live. I pretty much do, but I don't have blinders on and can read and think. ;) Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Frank Malley
The Coward is interesting in the way its font size in the five lines suggests the eponymous theme of the poem. All the lines have the same sized font except for the middle line, the crux of the coward's fear: what. This word is in a much smaller font, as though the narrator wishes to hide what he or she fears by keeping it small, and - at least - less seen. The poem's shortcoming is its choice of blunt statement. This makes it too ordinary for excellence. How about: "Hah!/ No coward I/ with eyes( smaller font)/ shut tight (back to previous font). Or, 'I opened my peepers to/ armies of toads.' Or to a 'Selfie flagranté.'
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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The Coward is interesting in the way its font size in the five lines suggests the eponymous theme of the poem. All the lines have the same sized font except for the middle line, the crux of the coward's fear: what. This word is in a much smaller font, as though the narrator wishes to hide what he or she fears by keeping it small, and - at least - less seen. The poem's shortcoming is its choice of blunt statement. This makes it too ordinary for excellence. How about: "Hah!/ No coward I/ with eyes( smaller font)/ shut tight (back to previous font). Or, 'I opened my peepers to/ armies of toads.' Or to a 'Selfie flagranté.'
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Frank. The small what is representing cowering. oh well. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Janet Foor
I too am concerned for what is coming and I'm glad we don't know when. We just must stay focused and in the ready and pray for those who are not preparing for what is coming.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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I too am concerned for what is coming and I'm glad we don't know when. We just must stay focused and in the ready and pray for those who are not preparing for what is coming.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Janet. Amen. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I hate to agree with you, but I fear what is coming too. It may be here even sooner than many of us think. The world is a powder keg just waiting for the first person to light a match.
Sad but true.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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I hate to agree with you, but I fear what is coming too. It may be here even sooner than many of us think. The world is a powder keg just waiting for the first person to light a match.
Sad but true.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Gary. I know. So sad and frieghting world we live in, Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes, I feel the same. Too much has happened, and things will get worse. The Devil is busy these days. I fear for my children, their children--etc.
I have a few granddaughters that are pregnant. God Bless their souls. Thank you for the great awareness. We are not cowards, we have no control. Things are happening, as the Bible warned.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Yes, I feel the same. Too much has happened, and things will get worse. The Devil is busy these days. I fear for my children, their children--etc.
I have a few granddaughters that are pregnant. God Bless their souls. Thank you for the great awareness. We are not cowards, we have no control. Things are happening, as the Bible warned.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Carolyn. Amen. A sad world. Blessing, Barbara
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Yes, it is a sad world. You are welcome.
