Use Time Wisely
Love One Another15 total reviews
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this loop verse!
It is clever and creative.
The use of alliteration is effective.
The rhymes work well with out force and create a tempo that reminds me of riding on a slide. Moving from angst to salvation, landing at the sandy bottom.
I must address your mural, outstanding!!!
As a fellow painter, this is very impressive!!
I appreciate ALL of your talents and thank you for sharing them with us.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
I love this loop verse!
It is clever and creative.
The use of alliteration is effective.
The rhymes work well with out force and create a tempo that reminds me of riding on a slide. Moving from angst to salvation, landing at the sandy bottom.
I must address your mural, outstanding!!!
As a fellow painter, this is very impressive!!
I appreciate ALL of your talents and thank you for sharing them with us.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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K.L. thank you for reading my poem so closely and noting the things I tried to impart in my poem. Thank you for the compliment on the mural. I appreciate your support. Blessings!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Wow, I think we have the winner here. This is fantastic!! These loop poems are such a challenge and you nailed it!!!
Well done :)
Have a fantastic weekend,
Erika
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
Wow, I think we have the winner here. This is fantastic!! These loop poems are such a challenge and you nailed it!!!
Well done :)
Have a fantastic weekend,
Erika
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Erika, (You have my deceased daughter's name and the exact spelling) I have read some good entries. I just hope it places in the top three. Have a blessed weekend too!
Comment from Regina Elliott
Wow, a great poet AND a great artist. I was doing
artwork for years and began
writing about 9 years ago. I
still do some cartooning. Anyway, may you have success in the loop contest.
And thank you for being a
humanitarian. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
Wow, a great poet AND a great artist. I was doing
artwork for years and began
writing about 9 years ago. I
still do some cartooning. Anyway, may you have success in the loop contest.
And thank you for being a
humanitarian. Blessings ~
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Regina, for your supportive comments. I love my work at the non-profit. I am the manager of the clothing and household departments.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
First of all, great painting. You are a multi-talented person I see. Your poem is a nonet, isn't it? Where the last word becomes the first word of the next sentence? Short message = quit fooling around and get it done because we do not know when he returns.
Very nice.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
First of all, great painting. You are a multi-talented person I see. Your poem is a nonet, isn't it? Where the last word becomes the first word of the next sentence? Short message = quit fooling around and get it done because we do not know when he returns.
Very nice.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem. The contest is calling it a Loop Poem.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words starting with what stress, tension, and negativity can be in one's life. The words lead to love, compassion, helping hands and spreading God's power. This poem, for me, is doing God's will. Thank you for the author's notes - lovely to hear where the artwork came from.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
The author's words starting with what stress, tension, and negativity can be in one's life. The words lead to love, compassion, helping hands and spreading God's power. This poem, for me, is doing God's will. Thank you for the author's notes - lovely to hear where the artwork came from.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your support and rating!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Beautiful mural, Sandra, thanks for sharing it.
-A very nice presentation, too.
-You did a good job with the loop poem.
-A good topic, effective loops, imagery, and rhyme.
-I like the use of 'devour' in the opening line,
and agree that 'days cannot be wasted.'
-You have a good message in your poem
about the world needing "love and a helping hand."
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
-Beautiful mural, Sandra, thanks for sharing it.
-A very nice presentation, too.
-You did a good job with the loop poem.
-A good topic, effective loops, imagery, and rhyme.
-I like the use of 'devour' in the opening line,
and agree that 'days cannot be wasted.'
-You have a good message in your poem
about the world needing "love and a helping hand."
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Pam, for reading and rating my poem.
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You are welcome, Sandra.
Comment from karenina
Congratulations to you on your multiplicity of artistic skill! God blesses you with creativity in visual art and in writing ~~ and you gift us all with both here.
The loop can be a difficult form to pull off. Often those required "loops" weigh a theme down.
Not for you! This is as uplifting as can be, and buoyed my spirit more than I can tell you!
Best of luck in the contest!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
Congratulations to you on your multiplicity of artistic skill! God blesses you with creativity in visual art and in writing ~~ and you gift us all with both here.
The loop can be a difficult form to pull off. Often those required "loops" weigh a theme down.
Not for you! This is as uplifting as can be, and buoyed my spirit more than I can tell you!
Best of luck in the contest!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your words of support. You are appreciated.
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As are you!
Comment from Marienkiefer
What I love about your poem, is the progression and how ideas link to form powerful thought, leading line-by-line to an incentive to action.
What stands out for me in this poem is the last line that loops very effectively to the first line. Those two lines alone brings this loop poem full circle to the central idea: In short moments of time, use to spread the power of God. This is profoundly inspiring thought and riveting.
Excellent. All the best your entry.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
What I love about your poem, is the progression and how ideas link to form powerful thought, leading line-by-line to an incentive to action.
What stands out for me in this poem is the last line that loops very effectively to the first line. Those two lines alone brings this loop poem full circle to the central idea: In short moments of time, use to spread the power of God. This is profoundly inspiring thought and riveting.
Excellent. All the best your entry.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and rating my loop poem.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your mural is beautiful, Sandra. I believe those who come to
receive help there are uplifted when it's seen. I commend you
for volunteering and for sharing your artistic talent. I liked the
color scheme of your contest entry. Great job with the loop
style. Your words are correctly rhymed and present a great,
and true message. No one knows when their time will be up.
So, it's best to be a messenger of peace and offer others a
helping hand. I'm reminded of the saying, 'There, but for the
grace of God, go I.'
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
Your mural is beautiful, Sandra. I believe those who come to
receive help there are uplifted when it's seen. I commend you
for volunteering and for sharing your artistic talent. I liked the
color scheme of your contest entry. Great job with the loop
style. Your words are correctly rhymed and present a great,
and true message. No one knows when their time will be up.
So, it's best to be a messenger of peace and offer others a
helping hand. I'm reminded of the saying, 'There, but for the
grace of God, go I.'
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your comments and support. This saying guides the way I move through the world} 'There, but for the grace of God, go I.' I am the manager of the household and clothing departments and I do my best to make my clients feel welcome. Please consider reading my faith poem too} Promises Kept.
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Comment from JLR
Sandra, I knew from the first poem that you published that you live a life of compassionate service. This loop poem is technically exact and provides excellent unforced end rhymes, a most challenging task with loop poems. But the winner is your expression of faith and acknowledgment of God's power.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
Sandra, I knew from the first poem that you published that you live a life of compassionate service. This loop poem is technically exact and provides excellent unforced end rhymes, a most challenging task with loop poems. But the winner is your expression of faith and acknowledgment of God's power.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank your supportive comments. I am the manager of the household and clothing departments, but I left that out of my note. I typed it but took it out. Service to others is not about me. It's about the people who needs it. Thanks for reading my poem.