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Romantic Tanka Poems

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Comment from Mark Schardine
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We know that life continues even if we notice nothing, and at times this aspect provokes a sense of wonder. The natural world constantly changes and evolves, and we try to understand it, or at least observe it

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy Blue Rose
    The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid. Atticus
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Gypsy, the sentiment in your poem is absolutely beautiful. It's as soft and delicate as the falling petals. I especially liked:

never ending
river of life

(Life on Earth comes from the water.)

Well-chosen photo and gorgeous presentation. A pleasure to read.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer



 Comment Written 29-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    You are right, life comes from water. I appreciate your insightful feedback and kind review.

    Gypsy Hugs (*÷*)
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your poem- good presentation- picture- modern Tanka- theme cherry blossoms- depicting brevity of life - flowing down the river of life - while you sleep- good imagery- good job

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
    AP, Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
    "The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from Heather Knight
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Hi Gypsy,
It's always a pleasure to read and look at your poems. They are tiny works of art.
Even though there's no rhyme (as is to be expected in a tanka), the rhythm is great thanks to the repetition of sounds: blossoms bloom, sleep/creek.
Thanks for sharing. x

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
    Thank you very much, Heather, for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
    "The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from aryr
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A great tanka, Gypsy. I thought the picture was beautiful, all those cherry blossoms. I loved your words because they blended in the cherry blossoms and the river nicely. Blessed be n hugs!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
    Thank very, Aryr. Blessed be, my friend. Hugs.

    Gypsy
    "The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by aryr on 29-Jul-2022
    You are so very welcome, Gypsy, blessed be n hugs!
Comment from lyenochka
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Cherry blossoms are that sign of spring's rebirth and they speak to me of time flowing. Your poem uses that symbol in dream to show how that through life and dreams, the seasons keep flowing.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
    You understand my poem perfectly.

    Thank you very much, Helen. You are the best.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
reply by lyenochka on 28-Jul-2022
    💖💖
Comment from royowen
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Whatever we're doing, while the rest of us are sleeping, or at work, or working in the garden, creation keeps proliferating, not dependant on us, only on God not turning His back. Beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
    Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
reply by royowen on 28-Jul-2022
    Welcome
Comment from karenina
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Beautiful! Such a serene dreamlike imagination... You reflect this wonderful, magical passing of time we call life. "To sleep, perchance to dream..." (Said Will!) How I'd love to dream of this transformative cycle of cherry blossoms!

Karenina

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
    Yes, you get it. (*<>*)
    Thank you very much, sweetie pie.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
reply by karenina on 28-Jul-2022
    Always love reading your masterpieces!