Tucker - Free at Last (Part-6)
Escaped, but still on the run.30 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another nail-biting chapter, Ric. Very well written. I found nothing to suggest for improvement or fixes. You seem to be on a roll. Will the next one really be the last??lol
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Another nail-biting chapter, Ric. Very well written. I found nothing to suggest for improvement or fixes. You seem to be on a roll. Will the next one really be the last??lol
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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God, give me the strength to make this the last chapter. I don't like to write this often, and I'm worn out with all the action. I know I need to slow it down sometimes and change the pace, but that takes more words and only makes it last longer. LOL. Thanks Judy for your kind words and generous review. I appreciate YOU and your spending time to read this kind of story that isn't in your preference list.
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Lol. You?re worn out from writing it! I?m worn out from reading it. Or maybe it was the pickleball games that wore me out😄 You?re welcome, Ric.
Comment from Sally Law
Nothing boring here! You start with action, as I have learned in writing class, and your chapter doesn't let up. I get a little confused with T.D. and Tucker, then you have Tammy. A list of main characters would be most appreciated. Great writing, Ric, and your gift for this genre is clearly seen. A virtual six for today.
Sending you my very best,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Nothing boring here! You start with action, as I have learned in writing class, and your chapter doesn't let up. I get a little confused with T.D. and Tucker, then you have Tammy. A list of main characters would be most appreciated. Great writing, Ric, and your gift for this genre is clearly seen. A virtual six for today.
Sending you my very best,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Sal, for your kind words and generous review. Yes, if I ever do one of these run-on stories again, I will definitely list the characters to make it easier. But, if I ever get this one finished, I probably won't. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from rockinm76233
I enjoyed your adventure. Keep going, only one more chapter you think and then wala you have a book finished. Hope all is well in Ky, and you are as well.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed your adventure. Keep going, only one more chapter you think and then wala you have a book finished. Hope all is well in Ky, and you are as well.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your kind words and generous review. Yes, this one one I'll be glad to get over with. LOL. It's gone on much longer than I had intended. Hope your air-conditioner is full of life down in Texas.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
A lotta action. Good work.
The musty shack an arsenal of fishing gear, guns, and ammunition. - This sentence lacks a verb, but I'm good with it. We can call it 'style'.
"Sure, Tuck, keys are in it." - Wouldn't he say "Key is in it" since a truck has no trunk?
I seriously doubt that a 50's model Chevy pick-up could do 100mph. It could have a 283 V8, but wouldn't have the rear end for speed.
cheeks., - oops
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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A lotta action. Good work.
The musty shack an arsenal of fishing gear, guns, and ammunition. - This sentence lacks a verb, but I'm good with it. We can call it 'style'.
"Sure, Tuck, keys are in it." - Wouldn't he say "Key is in it" since a truck has no trunk?
I seriously doubt that a 50's model Chevy pick-up could do 100mph. It could have a 283 V8, but wouldn't have the rear end for speed.
cheeks., - oops
Best wishes.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thanks for hanging in there with my goofy story, Wayne. I appreciate your kind words, comments, and generous review. Yes, I truly do leave out a lot of verbs, intentionally, thinking the sentence sounds better without them. But since a few like you have been bringing to my attention, I try to do it a lot less. Cormac McCarthy, Don Delillo, Joyce, and many other do it regularly and it's called "style," as you say. But for me, it's considered a mistake. LOL. Usually, in my days, most people's key rings had multiple. But I guess you're right, the old truck would have only needed one, and today's vehicles don't have any, just a fob. The Chevy 265, 283, 302, 327, 350, and 396 were all small blocks that came later. The 50s model trucks had a 216.5 6-cylinder with a stock 4.11 rear end that wouldn't let them run 70 mph for long periods, but we both know how talkers exaggerate. I guess, I'm guilty. I always look forward to your reviews, Wayne. Much appreciated!
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Thanks.
I learned something about 50s Chevy truck engines.
I agree wholeheartedly about style (verbs, and etc). I think some reviewers are just too proud that they caught something that they can point to. I get those reviews all the time. Unless my 'style' makes understanding too difficult for average readers, I keep what I have.
Thanks again for your reply comments.
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It's always a pleasure to read your work, get your reviews, and communicated with you, Wayne!
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Oh, and thank to you, I added a line hoping to clarify why the truck could run so fast. LOL. Have a wonderful rest of your week!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
After all that, the twist at the end was really unexpected! Who'd have thought that Farnsworth was one of the good guys? Or is this one of your tricks? Will Tucker believe him?
This was a very well written chapter, with lots happening. I was worried when Tammy was shot, but I think she's going to be fine. I liked the detail you put into that part as well. Very realistic. Excellent chapter, and now you've left us hanging and I want to read the next part tonight!! Lol. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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After all that, the twist at the end was really unexpected! Who'd have thought that Farnsworth was one of the good guys? Or is this one of your tricks? Will Tucker believe him?
This was a very well written chapter, with lots happening. I was worried when Tammy was shot, but I think she's going to be fine. I liked the detail you put into that part as well. Very realistic. Excellent chapter, and now you've left us hanging and I want to read the next part tonight!! Lol. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your kind words and generous review. I appreciate those of you who have hung in there with this story that isn't exactly in your preference category. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
You know how to write action, that's for sure! This story hits the ground running and keeps going throughout.
You end with a paragraph that promises a twist, and is just enough of a hook to insure that the reader will return for more.
Very descriptive writing - which helps the reader to see the scene as it plays out.
Looking forward to the next one. Hope you don't mind, I found a couple of minor things that could be corrected.
A miserable drunken maudlin since losing Claudia, I only have me. This is in quotes, but it reads like a narration - one wouldn't speak like this about themself.
in route should be en route - which means "on the way"
Last line in first section, you end sentence "cheeks.," Take comma out
laid-out doesn't need the dash
300-times doesn't require a dash either
MITM - either take away the dash and leave parentheses or take away parentheses and add a dash after "attacks"
Where are the mad Mexicans firing the missiles - into "all four corners" of the cabin. The reader can figure that out, but I would add "corners of the cabin" to make it clear
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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You know how to write action, that's for sure! This story hits the ground running and keeps going throughout.
You end with a paragraph that promises a twist, and is just enough of a hook to insure that the reader will return for more.
Very descriptive writing - which helps the reader to see the scene as it plays out.
Looking forward to the next one. Hope you don't mind, I found a couple of minor things that could be corrected.
A miserable drunken maudlin since losing Claudia, I only have me. This is in quotes, but it reads like a narration - one wouldn't speak like this about themself.
in route should be en route - which means "on the way"
Last line in first section, you end sentence "cheeks.," Take comma out
laid-out doesn't need the dash
300-times doesn't require a dash either
MITM - either take away the dash and leave parentheses or take away parentheses and add a dash after "attacks"
Where are the mad Mexicans firing the missiles - into "all four corners" of the cabin. The reader can figure that out, but I would add "corners of the cabin" to make it clear
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your kind words, suggestions, and generous review. Yes, I make plenty of mistakes and thanks for pointing them out. I write really fast and hate to edit. With this one I rushed even more than usual to get it posted, and it's obvious. Much appreciated!
Comment from dmt1967
'(Then, he instructed his search force to track all planes scheduled to leave surrounding airports within a two-hour radius.') Don't tell, show. ("Track all planes to leave surrounding airports within a two-hour radius," he barked to his search force.)
Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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'(Then, he instructed his search force to track all planes scheduled to leave surrounding airports within a two-hour radius.') Don't tell, show. ("Track all planes to leave surrounding airports within a two-hour radius," he barked to his search force.)
Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your suggestion and generous review. As you can tell, I mostly show, and usually in detail. But sometimes I choose to tell thinking it gets the point across in more detail. Much appreciated!
Comment from karenina
You've packed more action into this chapter than was in the last three James Bond movies combined!
I always get swept up in your frenetic pace and my pulse quickens as you swing me wildly from shootouts to daring escapes to cyber attacks that make me suddenly want to take all my data off line!
(No worries, I can stash my tens of dollars beneath my mattress!)
I'm in this for the long haul. Every chapter has been intricate and (oddly) fun!
You sure you will be wrapping this up with one more chapter!?!
Ah, c'mon! I'm not ready to see it end yet!
Great, as always!
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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You've packed more action into this chapter than was in the last three James Bond movies combined!
I always get swept up in your frenetic pace and my pulse quickens as you swing me wildly from shootouts to daring escapes to cyber attacks that make me suddenly want to take all my data off line!
(No worries, I can stash my tens of dollars beneath my mattress!)
I'm in this for the long haul. Every chapter has been intricate and (oddly) fun!
You sure you will be wrapping this up with one more chapter!?!
Ah, c'mon! I'm not ready to see it end yet!
Great, as always!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Karenina, for your extra special six-star review. I'm worn out with this story myself, and I'm sure plenty of others are too. So, I hope I can end it with one more and get on to something new and less frenetic. Is it great? Nope . . . but it's a way for an old man to get a little action. LOL.
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I disagree. I think it's great!
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Hugs! You just like me. LOL.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ok, the last line suggests Tucker has it all wrong and I didn't quite understand all the stuff with the banks. So where does he go from here? Good details of the escape. Only spotted one nit "Tammy close(d) behind,"
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Ok, the last line suggests Tucker has it all wrong and I didn't quite understand all the stuff with the banks. So where does he go from here? Good details of the escape. Only spotted one nit "Tammy close(d) behind,"
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Carol, for your kind word, suggestion, and generous review. As for the nit, I meant closed behind, that she closed ground from behind. But if you like it better I could make her close behind the person in front. LOL. I always appreciate you taking time out for my madness.
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I enjoy your madness. Maybe Tammy closing in behind.
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She closed in from behind. But I changed it already to your "close behind." LOL. It's always a pleasure, Carol! Thanks!
Comment from lyenochka
I used up all my sixes on Sunday and here you post on a Monday! Enjoyed your continuation story! Hope our heroes had some refreshments on the plane as it would be grueling to go from being hostages to running full speed! Feels like a James Bond thriller.
Seems like you know your ways of cyber attacks so the whole scheme of putting the blame on Farnsworth seems like a good plan and helps to wrap things up. But after the explanation, I was lost as to where the conversation between Tammy and Tucker took place.
"Well, Tucker, where do we go from here?" Tammy asked. (Where were they when that conversation took place?)
You left us hanging as to whom to believe. I wonder if Farnsworth is tricking Tucker because he knows his days are numbered by el Nemesio. (lol). I wonder how Farnsworth even knew which hotel Tucker would be in? Hope Tucker makes the right call!
Comments/Suggestions:
releasing the planes evacuation slide (plane's)
With the Pilot and crew exiting the stairs (pilot)
"Don't worry about us, Tuck" (comma after Tuck)
Doe-eyed, Tammy looked up at Tucker, (I felt that after her "puppy face sad" look, that the "doe-eyed" was too much.)
She flipping her waist-length, (flipped) needed a main verb here
"Now, now, lets not spoil (let's)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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I used up all my sixes on Sunday and here you post on a Monday! Enjoyed your continuation story! Hope our heroes had some refreshments on the plane as it would be grueling to go from being hostages to running full speed! Feels like a James Bond thriller.
Seems like you know your ways of cyber attacks so the whole scheme of putting the blame on Farnsworth seems like a good plan and helps to wrap things up. But after the explanation, I was lost as to where the conversation between Tammy and Tucker took place.
"Well, Tucker, where do we go from here?" Tammy asked. (Where were they when that conversation took place?)
You left us hanging as to whom to believe. I wonder if Farnsworth is tricking Tucker because he knows his days are numbered by el Nemesio. (lol). I wonder how Farnsworth even knew which hotel Tucker would be in? Hope Tucker makes the right call!
Comments/Suggestions:
releasing the planes evacuation slide (plane's)
With the Pilot and crew exiting the stairs (pilot)
"Don't worry about us, Tuck" (comma after Tuck)
Doe-eyed, Tammy looked up at Tucker, (I felt that after her "puppy face sad" look, that the "doe-eyed" was too much.)
She flipping her waist-length, (flipped) needed a main verb here
"Now, now, lets not spoil (let's)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Helen, for your kind words, suggestions, and generous review. I always make more than my fair share of mistakes, but seldom as silly and foolish and these. Just lazy and careless, trying to write too fast and get it posted. I had already changed a couple of the mistakes you pointed out, so you must have started reading it earlier. But now I've changed the rest. I switched the Tammy questions ahead of the computer info as the plane taxied down the runway for Bimini Island. A 30 second patch job, so I'd better go see what I've done. LOL. Much appreciated, as always! HUGS
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I opened your post as soon as I saw it this morning but got busy with other things like yardwork and reviewed shorter posts first so I figured you probably corrected it.
You kept it realistic by having Tammy get the gun shot wound and the IV antibiotics. That's the part you never see in the TV shows - somehow miraculously none of the hail of bullets hit the main characters. Lol.
