Tucker - Free at Last (Part-6)
Escaped, but still on the run.29 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Now I'll hear it explained I bet.*****************************************************************************************************************************************
Karen
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Now I'll hear it explained I bet.*****************************************************************************************************************************************
Karen
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Yes, there are always explanations if you look deep enough. LOL. Well, we hope there are anyway. But with someone like me at the helm, I don't even know what's going to happen next before it does. Thanks again for all the time you're spending to read this story. I hope there is some small reward, since there is no fan money to be made. I appreciate YOU!!!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Chocked full of rapid (perhaps in some places too much so) packed mayhem as Tucker narrowly escapes an attack on his plane debarking, a missile attack on a house that would overkill anything in its wake, and Tammy taking a potentially fatal bullet. All this occurs before Tucker receives a telephone call from his nemesis warning him he is evading the wrong army. Some things noted:
-Acid-bath death, what a way to go. And, it leaves no traces behind.
-"air strip" should be airstrip
-"East and West coast" should be East and West Coast.
-Maybe place "by design" in front of "Tucker brought". Would make the sentence read better.
-The truck sounds like it was made for speed. In an action-thriller those come in handy.
-Maybe make "trickling down" trickled down, if only for past tense uniformity.
-The plan to pin the cash thefts on Farnsworth a good idea. Have the cartel destroy itself.
-The ending would make Tucker wonder if he should trust his enemy or the FBI? Some choice.
-Should either spell out IN into Indiana, or abbreviate Florida. They should be written the same way.
Next chapter should be a real hoot!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Chocked full of rapid (perhaps in some places too much so) packed mayhem as Tucker narrowly escapes an attack on his plane debarking, a missile attack on a house that would overkill anything in its wake, and Tammy taking a potentially fatal bullet. All this occurs before Tucker receives a telephone call from his nemesis warning him he is evading the wrong army. Some things noted:
-Acid-bath death, what a way to go. And, it leaves no traces behind.
-"air strip" should be airstrip
-"East and West coast" should be East and West Coast.
-Maybe place "by design" in front of "Tucker brought". Would make the sentence read better.
-The truck sounds like it was made for speed. In an action-thriller those come in handy.
-Maybe make "trickling down" trickled down, if only for past tense uniformity.
-The plan to pin the cash thefts on Farnsworth a good idea. Have the cartel destroy itself.
-The ending would make Tucker wonder if he should trust his enemy or the FBI? Some choice.
-Should either spell out IN into Indiana, or abbreviate Florida. They should be written the same way.
Next chapter should be a real hoot!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Brett Matthew, for your extra special six-star review, kind words, and your always appreciated suggestions. This one has more action than is needed and should have given readers a break somewhere along with more attention to thoughts and feelings, I just couldn't find time. LOL. Honestly, I'll just be glad to get it wrapped up and find a slower pace. I hope everything is coming around for you. You are in my thoughts and prayers! I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Susan Newell
Ric,
Oh my word! What an ending! Farnsworth may be a good guy and the vaunted FBI could be the bad guys? Oh what a twisted plot you are weaving. (Reminds me of Whose on First, in a non-humorous way.) This is loaded with suspense, unusual characters and all kinds of surprises. Well done.
Again I have made some editing notes. Your writing is terrific, but needs a little polishing to take it over the top. You rely heavily on present participles (ing words) as replacements for verbs, thus essentially morphing sentences into clauses. I was once told to remove everything ending with "ing" from my writing. That was extreme, but helped me correct a bad habit. I've made a few more editing notes below.
Sue
Evansville, IN to Clewiston, Florida. -- Better to be consistent in spelling out state names
of the escapee's Indiana ==> escapees'
Aged, yellowed wallpaper covered with taxidermy-mounted plaques of beady lake and forest eyes that seemingly watched, following their every move. -- Needs clarification. Reads as though the wallpaper is following every move.
Niall had already filled-in -- no need for hyphen
Niall and Eddie had setup network ==> set up
bank executive's emails ==> executives'
The exploding fireballs quickly spreading in all directions. -- Using the present participle (spreading) makes this a clause, not a sentence. Better to just write "spread."
Tammy's right side covered in blood. -- Missing verb (was covered).
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Ric,
Oh my word! What an ending! Farnsworth may be a good guy and the vaunted FBI could be the bad guys? Oh what a twisted plot you are weaving. (Reminds me of Whose on First, in a non-humorous way.) This is loaded with suspense, unusual characters and all kinds of surprises. Well done.
Again I have made some editing notes. Your writing is terrific, but needs a little polishing to take it over the top. You rely heavily on present participles (ing words) as replacements for verbs, thus essentially morphing sentences into clauses. I was once told to remove everything ending with "ing" from my writing. That was extreme, but helped me correct a bad habit. I've made a few more editing notes below.
Sue
Evansville, IN to Clewiston, Florida. -- Better to be consistent in spelling out state names
of the escapee's Indiana ==> escapees'
Aged, yellowed wallpaper covered with taxidermy-mounted plaques of beady lake and forest eyes that seemingly watched, following their every move. -- Needs clarification. Reads as though the wallpaper is following every move.
Niall had already filled-in -- no need for hyphen
Niall and Eddie had setup network ==> set up
bank executive's emails ==> executives'
The exploding fireballs quickly spreading in all directions. -- Using the present participle (spreading) makes this a clause, not a sentence. Better to just write "spread."
Tammy's right side covered in blood. -- Missing verb (was covered).
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Sue, for your kind words taking time to point out my blunders. Some are just careless, and others like using "ing" is more a lazy habit that I used to be conscious of. But leave a boy alone for 15 minutes and you have to retrain him. And as is obvious, I haven't been trained to write. I just put words on the page. LOL. Much appreciated!
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You are very welcome Ric. Cleaning up some of those habits will help improve the reader's experience and make it perfect!
Comment from Theodore McDowell
This was a page-turner with twists in the action throughout. Your ability to describe action scenes is a real strength. I loved the shift back and forth between locations and scenes. The shifting broke up the chapter into manageable chunks of action and dialogue. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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This was a page-turner with twists in the action throughout. Your ability to describe action scenes is a real strength. I loved the shift back and forth between locations and scenes. The shifting broke up the chapter into manageable chunks of action and dialogue. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Tim, for your kind words and generous review. These action pieces don't give readers enough breaks, since I'm trying to get everything in and keep the word count down. LOL. Oh, well, Thanks for taking time to read it. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Well, I walked right into the middle of the action on that one. Very cool. Well-described, it played out like a movie scene in my head. That was a nice twist at the end.
Perhaps this review will help bump you to into an all time best status. ;)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Well, I walked right into the middle of the action on that one. Very cool. Well-described, it played out like a movie scene in my head. That was a nice twist at the end.
Perhaps this review will help bump you to into an all time best status. ;)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Erika, for your kind words and generous review. And for spending time to read this foolishness that I'm sure isn't on your priority list of enjoyable reading. Plus it's long, which I apologize for. But thankfully, I don't post often. LOL. I just wish you'd read it the day before and gotten paid for your time. Much appreciated!
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Ha, I just sent you another message about why I don't normally read book chapters.
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Your other message is so sweet and kind. Just read it. LOL. I don't write books. I write short stories and usually try to keep them around 1,200 words or so, and don't normally post often. But with this run-on story, I've had to post in short enough intervals so readers don't forget what's happened previously. I'm exactly like you in that I don't like reading books, and usually find them somewhere in the middle. I had no intention of writing a story with seven parts. Although, in the last couple years it's happened more than once. I planned to end this Tucker series after the second chapter to begin with, it just wouldn't let me, and has kept going on and on. I've just sort of slipped into this action crap in the last couple years, but I think it's about time to do something different, which should please most. Sorry for the novella, and the other couple. LOL.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Ric,
It's a nice piece in continuation having PERFECTLY matching the theme IMPRESSIVE phraseology, CAPRTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end where the last paragraph is working as a lovely HOOK.
Description of scenes and situations, particularly actions and reactions of Tucker - Suki - Tammy at the time of their meeting, is noteworthy.
Interesting and worth enjoying!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Hello Ric,
It's a nice piece in continuation having PERFECTLY matching the theme IMPRESSIVE phraseology, CAPRTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end where the last paragraph is working as a lovely HOOK.
Description of scenes and situations, particularly actions and reactions of Tucker - Suki - Tammy at the time of their meeting, is noteworthy.
Interesting and worth enjoying!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, RP, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. So much action in this one leaves little time for anything else, which isn't everyone's cup of tea, so to speak. I'm happy you found it interesting and worth the time of reading. It's always a pleasure to get your reviews, and the purpose of posting is never complete without our opinion. I appreciate YOU!
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Hi Ric, Most Welcome!
It REALLY looks like an interesting ACTION MOVIE.
Keep writing!
With best wishes
~ RP
Comment from jenintorre
Wow! another fast paced, action packed sequel. A brilliant peice of writing. How do you do it Ric?
Looking forward to the final chapter, or is it?
Take care. Jen. X
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Wow! another fast paced, action packed sequel. A brilliant peice of writing. How do you do it Ric?
Looking forward to the final chapter, or is it?
Take care. Jen. X
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Jen, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. Yes, the next will be the last chapter if there is anyway that I can get it done. I'm even worn out with this one. LOL. What was supposed to be two parts, three at the most, has turned into seven. Thanks for your patience and sticking with me through this. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from L. Kalere
Hi Ric
This reads like a madcap movie...and a great way to spend an evening, along with popcorn and beer. Besides, I don't think movie producers get hung up over grammar, typos, and goofs. Wacky stuff but loads of fun...a summertime blockbuster for those who want an adrenaline rush.
The finale should leave us wrung out. I'm looking forward to it.
Linda
Entertainment value=a six
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Hi Ric
This reads like a madcap movie...and a great way to spend an evening, along with popcorn and beer. Besides, I don't think movie producers get hung up over grammar, typos, and goofs. Wacky stuff but loads of fun...a summertime blockbuster for those who want an adrenaline rush.
The finale should leave us wrung out. I'm looking forward to it.
Linda
Entertainment value=a six
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Linda, for your kind words and extra special six-star review. Yes, it kind of wears us all out, me, and readers. LOL. I'll be glad to finish this one. Your encouragement is always greatly appreciated!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This chapter was well worth the wait, with lots of action and detail. I always second guess stories as I read and am disappointed if I've guessed correctly. I am NEVER correct when I think I know what's going to happen in your stories. Tucker has gone from one trap to another, and now has a phone call from Farnsworth. Can he believe Farnsworth? I can't guess. There's no telling where your creative mind will take this. I'll be waiting to see.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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This chapter was well worth the wait, with lots of action and detail. I always second guess stories as I read and am disappointed if I've guessed correctly. I am NEVER correct when I think I know what's going to happen in your stories. Tucker has gone from one trap to another, and now has a phone call from Farnsworth. Can he believe Farnsworth? I can't guess. There's no telling where your creative mind will take this. I'll be waiting to see.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Lorraine, for your kind words and generous review. I never know where these stories are going myself. I just start writing and end up wherever the story leads me. Now, I need to slow the pace with more mundane details so it's not as hectic on the reader, like the pros do. LOL. It's always a pleasure to find out what you have to say. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another nail-biting chapter, Ric. Very well written. I found nothing to suggest for improvement or fixes. You seem to be on a roll. Will the next one really be the last??lol
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Another nail-biting chapter, Ric. Very well written. I found nothing to suggest for improvement or fixes. You seem to be on a roll. Will the next one really be the last??lol
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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God, give me the strength to make this the last chapter. I don't like to write this often, and I'm worn out with all the action. I know I need to slow it down sometimes and change the pace, but that takes more words and only makes it last longer. LOL. Thanks Judy for your kind words and generous review. I appreciate YOU and your spending time to read this kind of story that isn't in your preference list.
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Lol. You?re worn out from writing it! I?m worn out from reading it. Or maybe it was the pickleball games that wore me out😄 You?re welcome, Ric.
