Animal Antics at the Zoo
Children help to feed the animals... (518 words)8 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Great use of all the letters of the alphabet. I especially liked "Z." What better way to end a busy, busy day than to make "Zzzzzzs" This was a really fun read.
Good job.
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Great use of all the letters of the alphabet. I especially liked "Z." What better way to end a busy, busy day than to make "Zzzzzzs" This was a really fun read.
Good job.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
Animal Antics at the Zoo as seen through some young feeders and the alphabet is a hit with me. I liked the follow-through with the alliterative phrasing throughout the story. Neat.
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Animal Antics at the Zoo as seen through some young feeders and the alphabet is a hit with me. I liked the follow-through with the alliterative phrasing throughout the story. Neat.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed this interesting and engaging alphabet tale. It was very cleverly written and the alliteration throughout was not forced. It seemed smooth and appropriate. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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I enjoyed this interesting and engaging alphabet tale. It was very cleverly written and the alliteration throughout was not forced. It seemed smooth and appropriate. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
Comment from lyenochka
You met the challenge well with your alliteration sentences that covered each of the letters of the alphabet. And animals and zoo stories are perfect for children! Best wishes in the contest!
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You met the challenge well with your alliteration sentences that covered each of the letters of the alphabet. And animals and zoo stories are perfect for children! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
Comment from Jay Squires
Ah-ha you clever autonomous person you! I daresay you had a lot of fun writing this piece and coming up with so many words starting with the same letter. Good luck with the contest.
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Ah-ha you clever autonomous person you! I daresay you had a lot of fun writing this piece and coming up with so many words starting with the same letter. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
Comment from cat frenette
This is adorable LisaMay!
You've captured the animals antics beautifully, and made the children's day sound like so much fun.
I could see this illustrated as a children's book.
What a wonderful story, and it fits the contest requirements very well.
Best of luck in the contest!
Cathy
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This is adorable LisaMay!
You've captured the animals antics beautifully, and made the children's day sound like so much fun.
I could see this illustrated as a children's book.
What a wonderful story, and it fits the contest requirements very well.
Best of luck in the contest!
Cathy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
Comment from GollyGreen32
Hi! I enjoyed your story. I liked how you used the different kids' names and words in the story to match the letter of the alphabet. You had an original idea for the kids to feed the animals at the zoo, which was entertaining. That was a nice touch. I liked the ending "zzzz...." which was funny and made me smile. Have a blessed week!
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Hi! I enjoyed your story. I liked how you used the different kids' names and words in the story to match the letter of the alphabet. You had an original idea for the kids to feed the animals at the zoo, which was entertaining. That was a nice touch. I liked the ending "zzzz...." which was funny and made me smile. Have a blessed week!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
Comment from royowen
I think you've done an excellent job of writing this alphabet tale extremely well my friend, it's not easy, particularly with quokkas in the mix, a very shy Australian animal, your alliteration was clever and deserves commendation, well done, blessings Roy
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I think you've done an excellent job of writing this alphabet tale extremely well my friend, it's not easy, particularly with quokkas in the mix, a very shy Australian animal, your alliteration was clever and deserves commendation, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
