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Would it be Obscure?

5-7-5 contest entry

10 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This 5-7-5, Would It Be Obscure?, has the proper formatting and works as a great example of the point being made that obscure words can be fun to exhume for a bit of wordplay like this. The modern terms would be quite necessary, of course.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
    Lol. That's for sure. Thank you for the great review, Bill. I appreciate the generous stars, friend.

    Ron
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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There use to be a member on here that created
'Obscure Word' contests. Based on this submission, I am glad they left. Using the words in your author notes make better sense. Sorry. Just my opine.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
    Thanks, Tom. Yeah, I was just goofing around. I would't even get it myself without the author notes. That's why they're there. Thank for stopping in.
reply by Tom Horonzy on 24-Jul-2022
    No hard feeling. I thought it was quirky and for those on the edge of insanity, like me, could easily be sucked in. :-)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! Now THIS is hilarious!!! I absolutely love it!!! I can't wait until The Big Reveal to discover which clever member you are. What a totally unique idea this is!!! I so hope you win this! Good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
    Thank you for the great review, Rachelle. If only other people were grasping the meaning as well. Lol. I really appreciate the stars and good luck wishes. I might have to dumb the next one down a bit though. Haha. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. Thank you again.
reply by Rachelle Allen on 24-Jul-2022
    No, no! Do NOT dumb them down. Trust that our fellow members will rise up to your wit and creativity!!! I gave you my vote.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
    Sometimes you just have to do that in order to get ahead in these contest. There are some dense ones out there, that's for sure. Lol. Write something for a second grader and you're almost guaranteed a win. It's sad but usually true.
    Thank you for the support, Rachelle.

    =]
reply by Rachelle Allen on 24-Jul-2022
    I'm definitely third-grader material; I know this because I've been told so not just once. ("Oh dear gawd; you act like a third grader!") [Do you think it proves them right when I exclaim, "THANK YOU!!!"]
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
    Hahaaaa, not at all. That's the perfect answer. Mine's, "I know, right?" Lol
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
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This is a well written and clever 5-7-5 poem.
The photo is intriguing and pulls the reader in.
The 17 syllables used were effective at telling the story of a novice poet experimenting with phraseology to create a meaningful verse. And if that doesn't work, throw in a little humor:)
That's la for sharing.


 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
    Lol. Yes, I love throwing humor in quite a bit. Thank you for the fantastic review, KLR. I appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Comment from LyndaS
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Was it YM Roger that used to do those? I remember them. I must have read this three times to try and figure this out. Then I saw your author notes and had to work out the puzzle. Usually a 5-7-5 requires no thought at all both from the writer or the reader. This one was quite different and I enjoyed and appreciated the work that went into this. Enjoy that thesaurus! It serves you well.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
    Yes, that's who it was. I didn't find on the list of members, so some folks might not know who I referring to. Thank you so much for the giant sixer, Lynda. Yeah, this took a little thought but still didn't come exactly like I had planned but what can you do? I came close. Lol. I just love goofing around on here. I dearly appreciate the generous rating, Lynda. I'm glad you liked this silliness. I hope you have a wonderful rest of your weekend. Thank you again.
Comment from John Ciarmello
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This has got to be my favorite, 5-7-5. I love the words you used, all of them meaningful to the piece and of course the artwork. I wish you the best in the contest. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
    Thank you for the fantastic review, John. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Comment from pome lover
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might a practical joke excessively improvise an inexperienced poet use?
Let's see... might an excessively inexperienced poet (do better) if he didn't improvise but used a Thesaurus? Help!
I don't think that's your meaning, if you had one. Which word are you designating as obscure? Ah! you mean the whole shebang. Yes, obscure might be one word for it. I am pulling your leg. However, I haven't the foggiest what your poem means.
The 5 is for the challenge.
Katharine

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
    Lol. The whole piece is a lame joke. Might a trick excessively improvise an inexperienced poet's (knowledge) if he uses a thesaurus to give that illusion. I guess that's what I was hoping to accomplish there. Lol. Thank you for the great review and stars, Katharine.
reply by pome lover on 23-Jul-2022
    You're welcome. it was a tough one :)
Comment from royowen
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I would have a poet wouldn't need a thesaurus the vast majority of time, so the word "callow" fits extremely well, perhaps, "I want to be a poet" might be better, heh heh. But I've been known to use "aids" from Time to time. Well done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
    Thank you for the great review, Roy. I'm glad you liked this silliness.
reply by royowen on 23-Jul-2022
    Most welcome
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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This is very interesting albeit obscure. You have concocted a 5-7-5 poem made up of very obscure words and by doing so you place yourself on the winner's circle ceiling above the rest. I love a thesaurus too and have used it extensively in my studies at college. Yet to reach the common audience it improves your chances to use common wordage.
This is fun and all but seriously folks, what would we do if everyone used the exact same words all the time? We need some like you and some others that are different to make the world go round!
Thanks for the play on words!
Jesse

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
    Thank you for the fantastic review, Jesse. Yes, without the definitions added, I wouldn't have a clue what this even comes close to meaning. Lol. Like many people, I'm sure. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
reply by Jesse James Doty on 23-Jul-2022
    Yes, I had to look up the definitions myself. It was fun, though, to play your word game!
    Jesse
Comment from Fleedleflump
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Lol, this gave me a headache and a chuckle at the same time. I used to try to get smutch, homologate and securdate into verse :-).

I might have to make such a contest now!

Mike

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
    Hahaha. Thank you for the hilarious review, Mike. I was just in one of those moods. Lol. Yes, that would be an awesome contest. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. Have a great rest of your weekend and thanks again.