"The Gift of Life 2003"
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2 total reviews
Comment from jp88
This was a nice read. I'm wondering, why is it under thriller? It didn't have that feel to it, at least to me.
The mountains peaks peeked, as the meadows flowers wilted. - I wonder, for the sake of grammar shouldn't it be mountain and meadow?
Something went wrong with the formatting at the end of the second to last paragraph, it just says â?°72.
Hope this was helpful!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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This was a nice read. I'm wondering, why is it under thriller? It didn't have that feel to it, at least to me.
The mountains peaks peeked, as the meadows flowers wilted. - I wonder, for the sake of grammar shouldn't it be mountain and meadow?
Something went wrong with the formatting at the end of the second to last paragraph, it just says â?°72.
Hope this was helpful!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Well first off thanks for reviewing it it is not completed ask for The Meadows flowering and the mountains peaking I think I had the original word spelled wrong but anyhow the ending paragraph sometimes fan story adds those days into the working for some reason.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from Fleedleflump
I like that you start out celestial and cataclysmic, and work your way down to the personal perspective by the end. You always write from the heart, and that makes your work compelling.
Mike
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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I like that you start out celestial and cataclysmic, and work your way down to the personal perspective by the end. You always write from the heart, and that makes your work compelling.
Mike
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thanks again Mikr.
Yes, for your time and review.
Doctor Ricky
