Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from estory
I liked the no nonsense judge Pickett in this chapter. The dialogue is crisp and pointed, we see how Alexandra is going to defend her clients, she mixes it up good with the opposing attorney. She has a backbone, we can see that. estory
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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I liked the no nonsense judge Pickett in this chapter. The dialogue is crisp and pointed, we see how Alexandra is going to defend her clients, she mixes it up good with the opposing attorney. She has a backbone, we can see that. estory
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Alexandra acquits herself most competitively and has impressed the Judge, as she would, but Brown, Rogers' solicitor apparently doesn't know the whereabouts of Rogers, so he says, the judge Brown needs to get Rogers back in custody. Alie has fwo bodyguards, beautifully written Barbara, well done, great writing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Alexandra acquits herself most competitively and has impressed the Judge, as she would, but Brown, Rogers' solicitor apparently doesn't know the whereabouts of Rogers, so he says, the judge Brown needs to get Rogers back in custody. Alie has fwo bodyguards, beautifully written Barbara, well done, great writing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Jay Squires
A rather long, but very effective chapter. By the way, I commend you for choosing a large font for the actual text. I think makes the reading go more smoothly.
It's about ninety percent Hispanic." [A minor, minor consideration here. I think I'd use the name of the place instead of "it's" here. The reason is that he just described Ali's blue eyes and as I casually read, I thought, at first, I thought "it's" referred back to Ali's eyes.]
About your footnote, you might think I'm one who has been trying to rush their relationship, but if you'll recall, my only fear was that their many instances of "kissus interruptus" were, I felt, starting to get predictable and I was afraid begin also to seem artificial.
Great job!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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A rather long, but very effective chapter. By the way, I commend you for choosing a large font for the actual text. I think makes the reading go more smoothly.
It's about ninety percent Hispanic." [A minor, minor consideration here. I think I'd use the name of the place instead of "it's" here. The reason is that he just described Ali's blue eyes and as I casually read, I thought, at first, I thought "it's" referred back to Ali's eyes.]
About your footnote, you might think I'm one who has been trying to rush their relationship, but if you'll recall, my only fear was that their many instances of "kissus interruptus" were, I felt, starting to get predictable and I was afraid begin also to seem artificial.
Great job!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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You are Not one of the reviewers I was discussing. I have a certain reviewer to has continually comments on my morals. LOL Even in his own posts. I have made the correction. Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
Your construction is good. I will not comment on anything I see that you need to look at or that doesn't quite seem right. I see that isn't wanted and I don't your fans searching for me in the review sections (they probably have already. Oh well.)
I do wish you luck in your romance novel and hope you get it published.
Peace.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Your construction is good. I will not comment on anything I see that you need to look at or that doesn't quite seem right. I see that isn't wanted and I don't your fans searching for me in the review sections (they probably have already. Oh well.)
I do wish you luck in your romance novel and hope you get it published.
Peace.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your insight. I think about it, but when it comes to a certain area, I will not back down on it. I honestly feel in my soul, I'm right. I have never mentioned any person and I never will.
Comment from amahra
There was a lot of dialogue, making me feel like I was watching this from a stage. The dialogue pushes this story forward quickly. I like the different artwork you use. Another fine chapter, Barbara.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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There was a lot of dialogue, making me feel like I was watching this from a stage. The dialogue pushes this story forward quickly. I like the different artwork you use. Another fine chapter, Barbara.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
What an exciting, dramatic chapter. Always good reading and hopefully your fellow writer Ulla will be back on track next week. Well done and not a spag anywhere. Keep it coming!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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What an exciting, dramatic chapter. Always good reading and hopefully your fellow writer Ulla will be back on track next week. Well done and not a spag anywhere. Keep it coming!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I don't think they're moving too slowly at all. Ali is justifiably mistrustful, and Cord keeps putting his foot in his mouth. Pat is proving a hard one to get at, but Ali's determined. I hope nothing happens to Amy before they get there. Good explanation about the right to practice law in another state. She just may tell New York to forget about it. She's making a name for herself by helping these women. judi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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I don't think they're moving too slowly at all. Ali is justifiably mistrustful, and Cord keeps putting his foot in his mouth. Pat is proving a hard one to get at, but Ali's determined. I hope nothing happens to Amy before they get there. Good explanation about the right to practice law in another state. She just may tell New York to forget about it. She's making a name for herself by helping these women. judi
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from nomi338
Pat Rogers has bitten off much more than he is going to be able to chew and digest. Obviously he has gotten used to dominating women who are unable to fight back or hold their own against him. Ali has proven to be much more than he has bargained for and with Cord as backup he does not stand a chance.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Pat Rogers has bitten off much more than he is going to be able to chew and digest. Obviously he has gotten used to dominating women who are unable to fight back or hold their own against him. Ali has proven to be much more than he has bargained for and with Cord as backup he does not stand a chance.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying this. I 'm glad Ali has seen to it that she is able to practice in this area. She is making a difference for some women who are being bullied by Luke. She has made enough enemies that she can't go to town without a bodyguard. The story is starting to escalate to the danger point.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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I'm enjoying this. I 'm glad Ali has seen to it that she is able to practice in this area. She is making a difference for some women who are being bullied by Luke. She has made enough enemies that she can't go to town without a bodyguard. The story is starting to escalate to the danger point.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anne Johnston
This chapter is very well written and showing us that Ali is strong and willing to stand up for the rights of her clients. I like your explanation as to why you are making it a long story. I did notice one typo, but perhaps someone else has already mentioned this. Paragraph 7, "Jorge's calling Jim and ask if" - I think you meant "asking"
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This chapter is very well written and showing us that Ali is strong and willing to stand up for the rights of her clients. I like your explanation as to why you are making it a long story. I did notice one typo, but perhaps someone else has already mentioned this. Paragraph 7, "Jorge's calling Jim and ask if" - I think you meant "asking"
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the catch. Nobody else brought it up. I've corrected it.
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You are very welcome
