Moon Candy
5-7-5 Poem10 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
Wow.The title alone is enough to win me over. It is so delicious. Poetic. Perfect. The poem is lovely. You captured a mood and emotions. Nice work.
C.G.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Wow.The title alone is enough to win me over. It is so delicious. Poetic. Perfect. The poem is lovely. You captured a mood and emotions. Nice work.
C.G.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Hey there!
Many thanks for the candied words.
Steve
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You are welcome Moon Pie
Comment from Allezw2
Nicely done.
Seeing this posting reminds me of a blurb I once received. "Write for greeting cards, a source for great returns for little effort!"
When you mention moon, there are so many references from mythology to tin pan alley for any moo or emotion, from sinister to joyful.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Nicely done.
Seeing this posting reminds me of a blurb I once received. "Write for greeting cards, a source for great returns for little effort!"
When you mention moon, there are so many references from mythology to tin pan alley for any moo or emotion, from sinister to joyful.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you! I have tinkered with the idea of writing for Hallmark or similar. I guess it's still on the possibles list for retirement - if I make it that far!
Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Snatch our sweet moments
that is a good lesson to remember, for you never know which one will be th last. Enjoyed your 3 line poem Steve, good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Snatch our sweet moments
that is a good lesson to remember, for you never know which one will be th last. Enjoyed your 3 line poem Steve, good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Valda. Yep, just a tweak on the carpe diem theme, I guess.
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The moon is a constant and our night encourages it to shine and let us know that has a mission to move. A moonlit night is romantic and we need to grab life as it is short, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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The moon is a constant and our night encourages it to shine and let us know that has a mission to move. A moonlit night is romantic and we need to grab life as it is short, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Dolly. Couldn't cram all of 'To His Coy Mistress' in here, but you got the abbreviated version!
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You've presented us with a beautiful imagine in both artwork and writing. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with this contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You've presented us with a beautiful imagine in both artwork and writing. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Barbara, many thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from rama devi
Love the title! FULL MOONS are delicious, for sure. Good poem. Fine presentation. Nice consonance of S, W, L and M for a cohesive auditory effect.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Love the title! FULL MOONS are delicious, for sure. Good poem. Fine presentation. Nice consonance of S, W, L and M for a cohesive auditory effect.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Rama.
Hope all is well with you. Very WET here, but at least not burning up like the other half of the world.
Steve
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All is well, thanks! Hot here, but not too bad!
Comment from Pam (respa)
Very nice image and presentation, Steve.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and a good message-live life to the fullest
just like how the moon appears.
-Good use of personification, as well.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Very nice image and presentation, Steve.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and a good message-live life to the fullest
just like how the moon appears.
-Good use of personification, as well.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Many thanks, Pam!
Steve
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You are welcome, Steve.
Comment from humpwhistle
I do believe this is a true haiku--rare enough, even in haiku competitions. Above and beyond! Love as big and as bright as the moon. Now that's something.
Hawkeye Pierce once called the moon 'the vertical smile', but I think he was talking about a different moon.
Best of luck, Steve.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I do believe this is a true haiku--rare enough, even in haiku competitions. Above and beyond! Love as big and as bright as the moon. Now that's something.
Hawkeye Pierce once called the moon 'the vertical smile', but I think he was talking about a different moon.
Best of luck, Steve.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Lee.
Ah, memories of MASH - that used to be a staple on our TV diet. I can't say that anything as good captures our viewing pleasure these days.
Steve
Comment from lyenochka
I wonder what "moon" it is. The personification is nice. I suppose the sense of being under that smiling moon inspires living without fear of death. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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I wonder what "moon" it is. The personification is nice. I suppose the sense of being under that smiling moon inspires living without fear of death. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you.
Very sorry for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from Raul1
This is the perfect advice I think everyone should take and also another one is respect others. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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This is the perfect advice I think everyone should take and also another one is respect others. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Raul.
Very sorry for the late reply.
Steve
