Two Strangers
An Empat Empat poem24 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
This is great, Yvonne.
You're always so creative. I love the concept you've used for this poem: you've managed to turn something that happens every day and that we tend to forget into a lovely story with a touch of humour.
Lovely colours and rhyme as usual.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is great, Yvonne.
You're always so creative. I love the concept you've used for this poem: you've managed to turn something that happens every day and that we tend to forget into a lovely story with a touch of humour.
Lovely colours and rhyme as usual.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you for much for the lovely comments!
Comment from judiverse
Beautifully done. I like the repeating line "two total strangers sharing sky. I'd never thought about that, but the sun never seeing the milky way. You did an excellent job with the rhyme. I like the imagery of them sharing their reign. judi
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Beautifully done. I like the repeating line "two total strangers sharing sky. I'd never thought about that, but the sun never seeing the milky way. You did an excellent job with the rhyme. I like the imagery of them sharing their reign. judi
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you! I appreciate that.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, fun to read, thought provoking, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the meaning of this poem and as I continued to read I finally understood it! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes well with the theme and words.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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The author's words are interesting, fun to read, thought provoking, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the meaning of this poem and as I continued to read I finally understood it! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes well with the theme and words.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you for much for reviewing and great comments.
Comment from dragonpoet
Yvonne,
This is an imaginative personification of the sun and moon in the empat empat poem. You did well. You chose appropriate artwork for your words.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Yvonne,
This is an imaginative personification of the sun and moon in the empat empat poem. You did well. You chose appropriate artwork for your words.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much. You, too.
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You are most kindly welcome, Yvonne.
Joan
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This is an interesting poem. I love poems about the moon and the sun. It's interesting to think of how they don't see each other despite being the lights of our world. It's interesting that the only time they do "meet" each other it causes an eclipse, a state of darkness. Could be an interesting metaphor for people.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is an interesting poem. I love poems about the moon and the sun. It's interesting to think of how they don't see each other despite being the lights of our world. It's interesting that the only time they do "meet" each other it causes an eclipse, a state of darkness. Could be an interesting metaphor for people.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you for a great and interesting review. I like the idea of it being a metaphor for people.
Comment from June Sargent
I can always count on you to meet this challenge in a way that will inspire the rest of us to give it a try! I love the imagery of two strangers in the sky meeting by chance and never really getting to know each other. Much like society these days. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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I can always count on you to meet this challenge in a way that will inspire the rest of us to give it a try! I love the imagery of two strangers in the sky meeting by chance and never really getting to know each other. Much like society these days. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Awww, thanks for that beautiful compliment. You always do a great job in poetry. I appreciate this lovely review so much.
Comment from royowen
This is a unique way to observe the monarch of the day and the ruler of the night, both have a profound affect on the earth, in different ways, this is beautifully written Yvonne, and in a unique way, with skilled verse the vehicle, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is a unique way to observe the monarch of the day and the ruler of the night, both have a profound affect on the earth, in different ways, this is beautifully written Yvonne, and in a unique way, with skilled verse the vehicle, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Roy. Much appreciataed.
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WElcome
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello damommy, Yvonne, I love this poem. It is full of vivid imagery, and your message is clear. There is so much in your poem that I, too, have thought and pondered about. Before my muse went MIA, I use to write about the sun and moon and how they just admire each other, but will never kiss. This is what your poem made me reflect upon.
I especially liked:
Sun never sees the Milky Way,
Moon winks as he goes passing by.
(The above make me sigh a heartfelt sigh--nice imagery)
Also - nice repeating line:
two total strangers sharing sky,
(Y, I'm hearing Frank Sinatra singing, "Strangers in the Night.")
Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Hello damommy, Yvonne, I love this poem. It is full of vivid imagery, and your message is clear. There is so much in your poem that I, too, have thought and pondered about. Before my muse went MIA, I use to write about the sun and moon and how they just admire each other, but will never kiss. This is what your poem made me reflect upon.
I especially liked:
Sun never sees the Milky Way,
Moon winks as he goes passing by.
(The above make me sigh a heartfelt sigh--nice imagery)
Also - nice repeating line:
two total strangers sharing sky,
(Y, I'm hearing Frank Sinatra singing, "Strangers in the Night.")
Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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I'm so glad to make you smile. Thanks for a wonderful review.
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, it's a riddle and a poem! At first, I wondered if it were two birds but then it became clear that it was the sun and moon! Loved it!
Is this Empat Empat the same as a quatern poem? I didn't know what the difference would be.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Ah, it's a riddle and a poem! At first, I wondered if it were two birds but then it became clear that it was the sun and moon! Loved it!
Is this Empat Empat the same as a quatern poem? I didn't know what the difference would be.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Helen. I think it's more like a cascade with rhyme, but it could be a sort of quatern. My tired old mind can't decide. 8-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We can sometimes share a moment with a stranger and never see them again but in that moment we have connected when we view a scene together, a memorable moment in time here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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We can sometimes share a moment with a stranger and never see them again but in that moment we have connected when we view a scene together, a memorable moment in time here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Dolly.
