Lucky
Unlucky10 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
I am so sorry for your loss of your pet dog. I can understand how painful that must have been. My condolences to you. Congratulations on winning the contest! Well deserved! Great job!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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I am so sorry for your loss of your pet dog. I can understand how painful that must have been. My condolences to you. Congratulations on winning the contest! Well deserved! Great job!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you Raul. I greatly appreciate your kind words.
Wendy
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Whew! Your story got me feeling sorry for your puppy "Lucky" and you. I am the owner of a 14-year-old Cocker Spaniel. I could feel your pain in retelling this story. I'm sorry you couldn't cry as a child, but I am glad you have finally cried about this loss. it's natural to cry when one loses a beloved pet. Thanks for writing in large font. It made your story easier to read. Good luck in the contest. You have my vote!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Whew! Your story got me feeling sorry for your puppy "Lucky" and you. I am the owner of a 14-year-old Cocker Spaniel. I could feel your pain in retelling this story. I'm sorry you couldn't cry as a child, but I am glad you have finally cried about this loss. it's natural to cry when one loses a beloved pet. Thanks for writing in large font. It made your story easier to read. Good luck in the contest. You have my vote!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you Sandra - your review is thoughtful, kind, understanding, and a great encouragement.
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You are now in second place by 2 votes. Hope you voted for yourself. I voted for you!
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Thank you Sandra! How lovely of you.
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My favorite!
Comment from lyenochka
I'm so sorry to hear about you losing this puppy at such a young age. How long did you have Lucky? What did Lucky look like? What kinds of activities did you do with him? I wished to have more information like that.
I'm glad you could finally properly grieve for Lucky even though your parents were insensitive to your young heart's deep loss.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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I'm so sorry to hear about you losing this puppy at such a young age. How long did you have Lucky? What did Lucky look like? What kinds of activities did you do with him? I wished to have more information like that.
I'm glad you could finally properly grieve for Lucky even though your parents were insensitive to your young heart's deep loss.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for reviewing. I'll take another look and see how to improve it with a few more details. I appreciate your thoughts and suggestions.
Comment from Annmuma
My heart hurts for you. I've lost pets over the many years and know the feeling of being responsible or be lonely or wanting another day -- all those emotions that can hurt so much, Good luck in the contest. ann
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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My heart hurts for you. I've lost pets over the many years and know the feeling of being responsible or be lonely or wanting another day -- all those emotions that can hurt so much, Good luck in the contest. ann
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for your understanding review, and also for the six star rating. I appreciate it so much as well as your good wishes.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Lucky, is a sad recollection of the death of a first puppy after such a brief time. Then, to suddenly see the situation differently, so many years later. seems to create a narrative that is totally unprovable.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This story, Lucky, is a sad recollection of the death of a first puppy after such a brief time. Then, to suddenly see the situation differently, so many years later. seems to create a narrative that is totally unprovable.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Yes, completely unprovable. But sometimes, one just knows, because of knowing people and what they do in situations. Thanks for reviewing - appreciated.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Having lost my friend of 14 years three weeks past, I can empathize with thee. I hope you will never find your thoughts to be true, but I too remember my dad shooting his brothers dog for him for the brother couldn't stand to do it himself. He was old and sick, the dog that is. thereafter, my dad never visited his brother again.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Having lost my friend of 14 years three weeks past, I can empathize with thee. I hope you will never find your thoughts to be true, but I too remember my dad shooting his brothers dog for him for the brother couldn't stand to do it himself. He was old and sick, the dog that is. thereafter, my dad never visited his brother again.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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That's a sad story too. Many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Michaela Moore
This simple story is beautifully written with so much emotion and heart woven into the imagery. I also love how you use the questions in the story to help us, the readers, understand the heart of the protagonist more and more. These questions are the backbone of the plot's structure, which builds beautifully to the real climax: the realization that the parents probably killed the pet. My only suggestion is this...the last sentence caught me off guard and didn't quite fit for me. You make a huge leap from the grief you are finally allowing yourself in a piece mainly about grief to the theme of forgiveness. I think the last line might be much stronger if you stuck with your theme of grief. For example: "Sometimes grief is a long and difficult process." That would keep this writing streamlined.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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This simple story is beautifully written with so much emotion and heart woven into the imagery. I also love how you use the questions in the story to help us, the readers, understand the heart of the protagonist more and more. These questions are the backbone of the plot's structure, which builds beautifully to the real climax: the realization that the parents probably killed the pet. My only suggestion is this...the last sentence caught me off guard and didn't quite fit for me. You make a huge leap from the grief you are finally allowing yourself in a piece mainly about grief to the theme of forgiveness. I think the last line might be much stronger if you stuck with your theme of grief. For example: "Sometimes grief is a long and difficult process." That would keep this writing streamlined.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Hi Michaela - thank you veryu much for your encouraging, thoughtful and insightful review. In retrospect, I agree with your suggestion, and appreciate it. I was thinking of the need to forgive my parents, but you are right - that is a different issue, and it is better to stick with the one theme. I have changed it.
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Wow! I am so thrilled that I could have been some help to you. I genuinely want to be a good reader and viewer of others' work.
Comment from jessizero
I am so sorry that this happened to you and your special pet. Sometimes it is better not to know. Thank you for sharing your story, though it was sad. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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I am so sorry that this happened to you and your special pet. Sometimes it is better not to know. Thank you for sharing your story, though it was sad. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Yes, in retrospect, I would rather have not known. It just hit me suddenly. Thank you Jessi for reviewing. Always appreciated.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
During my childhood, I had a dog named Lucky. He came up to me out of the blue. He did not have a tag. I was nine years old. The dog loved me as much as I loved him. Normally, I was afraid of dogs. Not Lucky. He was a great dog. He followed me everywhere. One day, my dad and mom decided to take a trip to my moms sisters house.
It was over one-hundred miles. Lucky followed us everywhere we would go. After several miles, dad stopped the truck and let him in. I hate to hear about your dog. And it does not take long for a dog to get close to your heart. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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During my childhood, I had a dog named Lucky. He came up to me out of the blue. He did not have a tag. I was nine years old. The dog loved me as much as I loved him. Normally, I was afraid of dogs. Not Lucky. He was a great dog. He followed me everywhere. One day, my dad and mom decided to take a trip to my moms sisters house.
It was over one-hundred miles. Lucky followed us everywhere we would go. After several miles, dad stopped the truck and let him in. I hate to hear about your dog. And it does not take long for a dog to get close to your heart. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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You are right - it doesn't take long to form a close loving bond with a dog. Thank you for a lovely review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Scott Rhodie
One little grammatical error where you've put good-bye instead of one word, goodbye. Other than that, this true story fits the bill for the writing prompt. All the best.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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One little grammatical error where you've put good-bye instead of one word, goodbye. Other than that, this true story fits the bill for the writing prompt. All the best.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reviewing. This how it is spelt in my country, and it is correct for me. It's not an error, just different from the way you spell it. Also ...
For "good-bye/goodbye": "Merriam-Webster, though, includes only "good-bye" and "good-by." Many style guides, including the Chicago Manual of Style, prefer a Merriam-Webster dictionary, so "good-bye" is with us ...."
Thanks again for reviewing though.
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