One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
Thanks for this lovely short poem. There is so much in so few words, even less than the 5-7-5 style. The final image is perfect.... after all a spider is not really a bug so it "hangs by a thread" as to whether it will fin in the collection of your young scientist.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thanks for this lovely short poem. There is so much in so few words, even less than the 5-7-5 style. The final image is perfect.... after all a spider is not really a bug so it "hangs by a thread" as to whether it will fin in the collection of your young scientist.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The last line is very creative using the clever phrase of hangs by a thread! The double meaning of a spider hanging by its silken thread and the colloquialism of hanging by your last thread is a marvelous aha moment!
The poor spider! I feel for its life being in such a predicament!
Thanks, Gyspy for illuminating a wonderful form of Japanese poetry.
Jesse
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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The last line is very creative using the clever phrase of hangs by a thread! The double meaning of a spider hanging by its silken thread and the colloquialism of hanging by your last thread is a marvelous aha moment!
The poor spider! I feel for its life being in such a predicament!
Thanks, Gyspy for illuminating a wonderful form of Japanese poetry.
Jesse
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Jesse,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Extra Gypsy hugs
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You are welcome, Gypsy!
Thanks for the hugs!
Jesse
Comment from aryr
Definitely a great haiku, Gypsy. This was totally not what I was expecting - hanging by a thread was truly awesome. The picture was amazing and your words were rather ominous. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Definitely a great haiku, Gypsy. This was totally not what I was expecting - hanging by a thread was truly awesome. The picture was amazing and your words were rather ominous. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Blessed be and hugs <3
Gypsy
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So very welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem- good presentation- picture- cute poem- flows well- young scientist trying to figure out what makes spiders do what they do- good job
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I like your poem- good presentation- picture- cute poem- flows well- young scientist trying to figure out what makes spiders do what they do- good job
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I love the way your satori highlights the kid as a dangerous predator, rather than a careful observer. Thank you very much for sharing this fine modern haiku. Kate xx
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I love the way your satori highlights the kid as a dangerous predator, rather than a careful observer. Thank you very much for sharing this fine modern haiku. Kate xx
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Kids love the play with bugs, watching their behaviour and being in charge of their lives, it is the power they have over a life and the bugs are at their mercy, a fine Haiku, love Dolly x
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Kids love the play with bugs, watching their behaviour and being in charge of their lives, it is the power they have over a life and the bugs are at their mercy, a fine Haiku, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from karenina
Okay. I want a glass of whatever you're drinking! Love this double entendre serious but with a wink Haiku! Wise wit...jocularity with a Japanese flair! Kudos!
Karenina
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Okay. I want a glass of whatever you're drinking! Love this double entendre serious but with a wink Haiku! Wise wit...jocularity with a Japanese flair! Kudos!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Katerina, I have a weird humor lol
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
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Me too! That's why I'm loving these!
Comment from kahpot
Another Spiderman in the making, between Spidy, the Fly, and the Hulk science, creates superpowers, love the connections, very well written and presented****kahpot
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Another Spiderman in the making, between Spidy, the Fly, and the Hulk science, creates superpowers, love the connections, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from prettybluebirds
You always write the most interesting poetry. Your poems are short and to the point. I love the spider in the picture you attached to the writing. I look forward to your next poem. Keep writing and I will keep reading.
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You always write the most interesting poetry. Your poems are short and to the point. I love the spider in the picture you attached to the writing. I look forward to your next poem. Keep writing and I will keep reading.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy, I like your excellent play on words.
Your photo is great too.
You have fourteen syllables instead of 13, though. Gypsy, just a suggestion:
If you lose the word "kid" and leave just "scientist" your poem would be just as effective. Entomologists always look for bugs.
Good luck with all your writing, Gypsy.
ð??? Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Gypsy, I like your excellent play on words.
Your photo is great too.
You have fourteen syllables instead of 13, though. Gypsy, just a suggestion:
If you lose the word "kid" and leave just "scientist" your poem would be just as effective. Entomologists always look for bugs.
Good luck with all your writing, Gypsy.
ð??? Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
