Reaching for the Moon
An entry for the club challenge16 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine scene described here as you reach for the moon to escape the darkness and rise above the gloom, an ambient write and I enjoyed the ride, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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A fine scene described here as you reach for the moon to escape the darkness and rise above the gloom, an ambient write and I enjoyed the ride, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Tina Crute
This is really intense and immensely thought-provoking. I wonder what the person is rising above and how the moon must represent hope. Beautifully done!
Tina
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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This is really intense and immensely thought-provoking. I wonder what the person is rising above and how the moon must represent hope. Beautifully done!
Tina
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your very encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Fleedleflump
The moon is night time's defense against the shadows, reflecting the sun's smile to bless the world with ghostly approval. I very much enjoyed your lune poem - even the trees yearn to touch the moon :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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The moon is night time's defense against the shadows, reflecting the sun's smile to bless the world with ghostly approval. I very much enjoyed your lune poem - even the trees yearn to touch the moon :-)
Mike
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your excellent comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is quite the poem that embodies a personal ambition to 'rise above all darkness' while 'reaching for the moon.' It appears to adhere perfectly to the form's 5-3-5 syllable count. It seems to underscore the importance of having high standards. Good luck in that contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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This is quite the poem that embodies a personal ambition to 'rise above all darkness' while 'reaching for the moon.' It appears to adhere perfectly to the form's 5-3-5 syllable count. It seems to underscore the importance of having high standards. Good luck in that contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Val Crisson
Nice one. Good lune. I actually like this form. I have been writing a lot about moons and dark skies lately. Lovely sentiment in these dark times. Lovely presentation
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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Nice one. Good lune. I actually like this form. I have been writing a lot about moons and dark skies lately. Lovely sentiment in these dark times. Lovely presentation
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
I like the positive stance of "rising above all darkness" which I take metaphorically not physically. I feel the first line of "branches of life" didn't quite prepare me for the contrast with the darkness. I guess the "darkness" could symbolize death.
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I like the positive stance of "rising above all darkness" which I take metaphorically not physically. I feel the first line of "branches of life" didn't quite prepare me for the contrast with the darkness. I guess the "darkness" could symbolize death.
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much and yes I agree, so I decided to use the title as the first line, love your helpful and constructive help, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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Oh that works very well! 💖
