Last Drive
Pay attention to your father's advice.20 total reviews
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is scary to be in your situation. I have always keep a blanket in the car but no food supplies.
This is a good piece for the contest. Your story is well written.
Good luck to your contest
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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It is scary to be in your situation. I have always keep a blanket in the car but no food supplies.
This is a good piece for the contest. Your story is well written.
Good luck to your contest
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Chan. You must live in a northern climate, too. Oh, maybe an extreme southern climate.
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North
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a tremendous piece of writing. An excellent story, with a great twist in the tale. The writing is beautifully understated, and the attention to detail and description are surprising given the length restriction.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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This is a tremendous piece of writing. An excellent story, with a great twist in the tale. The writing is beautifully understated, and the attention to detail and description are surprising given the length restriction.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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You are a sweetheart, Katherine. Six stars are rare in the short stuff. Do you have snow where you live?
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We do indeed. I once wrote a great short story about it that won a contest 'Condemned to Death' - very similar to yours I think. I also wrote a long true piece, but maybe I never posted that on this site. I'll have to look. Kate xx
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
You have written a great story. One that is a life saver. Especially driving in winter time. You never know what is going to happen driving a car. Without the correct emergency items you will freeze to death.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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You have written a great story. One that is a life saver. Especially driving in winter time. You never know what is going to happen driving a car. Without the correct emergency items you will freeze to death.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Carolyn. Every year, somewhere in the United States, you can read about a tragedy such as I have illustrated.
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Yes. You are correct. Young people need to heed the warning.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
The immediate question that sprung to my mind was who was the character talking to! lol
These little pieces can be very tricky to pull off. you hit the word count spot on.
best of luck to you
GMG
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Hi there,
The immediate question that sprung to my mind was who was the character talking to! lol
These little pieces can be very tricky to pull off. you hit the word count spot on.
best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thanks, GMG. He was talking to his dog. The dog survived and related the story to me.
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lol
Comment from Wendy G
Well, you obviously did survive, although of course it's fiction. Clever twist! A great image showing what can so easily happen. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Well, you obviously did survive, although of course it's fiction. Clever twist! A great image showing what can so easily happen. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Wendy. We have some of those storms in Maine.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry tells a good little story, Mystery
Author. You included good details to set the scene.
The image is supportive.
Best wishes, Jan
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Your contest entry tells a good little story, Mystery
Author. You included good details to set the scene.
The image is supportive.
Best wishes, Jan
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Jan. It's tough to tell a story in just fifty words.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Congratulations for posting a 50 word compliant flash that is in tandem with the specified requirements of the writing prompt.
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the imperative of making preparations ahead of time forestall unforeseen circumstances.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with how the proclivity of the protagonist to take things for granted got him or her entangled with lapses.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Congratulations for posting a 50 word compliant flash that is in tandem with the specified requirements of the writing prompt.
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the imperative of making preparations ahead of time forestall unforeseen circumstances.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with how the proclivity of the protagonist to take things for granted got him or her entangled with lapses.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Lloyd. This story is a lesson for the reader.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from royowen
I can remember being in a NY winter back in 2012, when 16 inches of snow fell with little white mountains in the streets parked near tha pavement, oh yes in deed, I usually have notebook and pen in various places but not in the car. Beautifully written, great thought, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I can remember being in a NY winter back in 2012, when 16 inches of snow fell with little white mountains in the streets parked near tha pavement, oh yes in deed, I usually have notebook and pen in various places but not in the car. Beautifully written, great thought, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Roy. Living in Maine, I have experienced the big storm.
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Well done
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image for your story.
-You have a good beginning
setting up the scene.
-Good follow up with your father's
advice that you ignored:)
-A good conclusion, as well.
-Hope you do better in the contest
than driving in the snow.
-Good luck!!!
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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-Good image for your story.
-You have a good beginning
setting up the scene.
-Good follow up with your father's
advice that you ignored:)
-A good conclusion, as well.
-Hope you do better in the contest
than driving in the snow.
-Good luck!!!
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Pam. I have had some interesting experiences while driving in snow storms.
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You are welcome. I imagine most of us do.
Comment from jessizero
Thank you for sharing this tragic but clever fifty-word piece of flash fiction. It was upsetting, but entertaining. I sincerely hope we never find ourselves in this kind of situation. Best wishes to you.
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you for sharing this tragic but clever fifty-word piece of flash fiction. It was upsetting, but entertaining. I sincerely hope we never find ourselves in this kind of situation. Best wishes to you.
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Jessi. You must be right on the ball. I only posted this story about two minutes ago.
