Last Drive
Pay attention to your father's advice.20 total reviews
Comment from amahra
This one is really good. I need to enter some of these writing contests to sharpen my writing skills. You managed to say a lot in just a few words...50 to be exact. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This one is really good. I need to enter some of these writing contests to sharpen my writing skills. You managed to say a lot in just a few words...50 to be exact. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks, amahra. Those short ones are a challenge.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Paul, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Hello Paul, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks again. I had a similar experience, but a snow plow helped me out.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Terrific flash!
I read a lot of flash fiction stories and something I have noticed is that due to word restrictions they read in an awkward way. This story does not. Your writing is clear, and succinct.
I didn't feel as though any details were left out to complete the story.
I would love a second installment to see what happens to the driver and possible passengers. Do they survive? Where are they? Country? State? City? I like that you left it up to the reader to make their own conclusion.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Terrific flash!
I read a lot of flash fiction stories and something I have noticed is that due to word restrictions they read in an awkward way. This story does not. Your writing is clear, and succinct.
I didn't feel as though any details were left out to complete the story.
I would love a second installment to see what happens to the driver and possible passengers. Do they survive? Where are they? Country? State? City? I like that you left it up to the reader to make their own conclusion.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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There was only a single man in the car. He perished. He had a dog with him that survived. The dog told me the story.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Wow! What a short, short story. It had a sad but foreshadowed ending. This could easily be made into a longer story. It was good. However, the font size is too small. The visual fits perfectly.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Wow! What a short, short story. It had a sad but foreshadowed ending. This could easily be made into a longer story. It was good. However, the font size is too small. The visual fits perfectly.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Sandra. I'm still trying to figure out how to increase the font size.
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You are welcome. Go to Edit Poem. Highlight the entire poem. While it is highlighted, press at the same time the keys Ctrl and the + plus sign. It will enlarge the text. Then click save poem. To make smaller do the steps above and press Ctrl and the - minus sign. Hope this helps.
Comment from Heather Knight
Your story is sad, but also very moving. Very often we ignore what our parents tell us and then realise they were right all along. Sometimes too late.Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Your story is sad, but also very moving. Very often we ignore what our parents tell us and then realise they were right all along. Sometimes too late.Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Heather. I had a similar experience once when I was young. Luckily, a snowplow came along and helped me out.
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Thank goodness for that.
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word flash fiction story, Last Drive, has the required word count and reminds me of an elderly couple caught in a snowstorm and buried for a couple weeks. The woman was able to keep a diary of her and husband's final moments. She gave the children a memory of noble grandparents accepting their fate with grace.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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This fifty-word flash fiction story, Last Drive, has the required word count and reminds me of an elderly couple caught in a snowstorm and buried for a couple weeks. The woman was able to keep a diary of her and husband's final moments. She gave the children a memory of noble grandparents accepting their fate with grace.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Bill. I remember that incident. That has got to be a terrible way to go.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Hmmm. This is an important public service message inside an unnerving and well-written tale: Inside the Car Survival Kit [thick blankets, jumper cables, flares, bottled water] also be sure to include pen and paper! Brilliant. I have a feeling this is going to do really well in this contest!! Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Hmmm. This is an important public service message inside an unnerving and well-written tale: Inside the Car Survival Kit [thick blankets, jumper cables, flares, bottled water] also be sure to include pen and paper! Brilliant. I have a feeling this is going to do really well in this contest!! Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Rachelle. I haven't had too much luck, lately.
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It doesn't change the fact--FACT--that it's a good piece, though.
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Thanks for the pat on the back, Rachelle.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Lesson taught; lesson forgotten got the lad pickin' cotton, save for the ice and snow which froze his butt which I figure will teach a valued lesson, but then again, the kid is stubborn.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Lesson taught; lesson forgotten got the lad pickin' cotton, save for the ice and snow which froze his butt which I figure will teach a valued lesson, but then again, the kid is stubborn.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Tom. Very clever review.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Writing with the limitation of only 50 words is a challenge, I myself think 500 words is a challenge. Here you are able to write a story in only 50 words that is engaging and frightening, particularly for those who have experienced being caught in a blizzard.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Writing with the limitation of only 50 words is a challenge, I myself think 500 words is a challenge. Here you are able to write a story in only 50 words that is engaging and frightening, particularly for those who have experienced being caught in a blizzard.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Mary. I was caught in a blizzard once - totally unprepared. A snowplow came along and helped me. That was when I was young and foolish.
Comment from evilynne
Interesting piece of very short fiction. It is well written. I didn't count words, but I assume the total of words is correct for the entry. Good luck! Evi
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Interesting piece of very short fiction. It is well written. I didn't count words, but I assume the total of words is correct for the entry. Good luck! Evi
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Evi. The computer said it was the right count. I didn't check.
