To Sleep- Perchance
Insomnia eased by God's presence13 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Insomnia is not great, but it affords time to catch up on potential time spent in the peaceful presence of God, and the reassurance that comes from that restful place. Beautifully written my friend oh yes indeed. Written ballad style, 8686 and abcb rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
Insomnia is not great, but it affords time to catch up on potential time spent in the peaceful presence of God, and the reassurance that comes from that restful place. Beautifully written my friend oh yes indeed. Written ballad style, 8686 and abcb rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Roy. I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews!
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Most welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can identify with your words here and in the present heat it is almost impossible to sleep at night even with the fans blaring. Fine rhymes and flow Verna, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
I can identify with your words here and in the present heat it is almost impossible to sleep at night even with the fans blaring. Fine rhymes and flow Verna, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Dolly, for your excellent review.
Comment from BethShelby
I love your rhyming poem which is excellent for the contest. You restlessness in bed sound a lot like my nights as well. I have a lot of nights where I want to so badly, but I just can't. Praying helps but so far I've not heard hymns lulling me to sleep.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
I love your rhyming poem which is excellent for the contest. You restlessness in bed sound a lot like my nights as well. I have a lot of nights where I want to so badly, but I just can't. Praying helps but so far I've not heard hymns lulling me to sleep.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for a great review, Beth.
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your poem! I recently re-read an article where the writer realized that her insomnia was really appointments with God and so the next time she was woken up, she asked God to speak to her. It's went we fight to go back to sleep that we become more awake.
Congrats on your 100th post!!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
Loved your poem! I recently re-read an article where the writer realized that her insomnia was really appointments with God and so the next time she was woken up, she asked God to speak to her. It's went we fight to go back to sleep that we become more awake.
Congrats on your 100th post!!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Dear.
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful rhyming poem - best wishes for the contest! I can identify with your words - that was last night for me. I particularly like the conclusion. Congratulations too, on reaching a milestone post. That's wonderful!
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
A beautiful rhyming poem - best wishes for the contest! I can identify with your words - that was last night for me. I particularly like the conclusion. Congratulations too, on reaching a milestone post. That's wonderful!
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Wendy.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Verna,
While reading your poem, I wasn't sure where you were going with it. Then came the beauty and hope of the last stanza!
What a wonderful tribute to the Lord.
I think you have a great chance in the rhyming contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
Verna,
While reading your poem, I wasn't sure where you were going with it. Then came the beauty and hope of the last stanza!
What a wonderful tribute to the Lord.
I think you have a great chance in the rhyming contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the review and the encouragement, Cindy.
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You?re welcome.
Comment from karenina
Congratulations on Milestone Post #100! You've outdone yourself with this superb rhyming verse... In 8/6/8/6 syllabic count, smooth meter, and delicate yet finessed rhymes you soared in this lament of sleeplessness!
Loved:
"Concerns for problems of the day
Are ropes that round me bind.
By worries for the ones I love,
I'm held in close confine."
Sometimes It feels like as I lay my head on the pillow, I have a mental checklist of loved ones to worry about...
Very nice!
Karenina
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
Congratulations on Milestone Post #100! You've outdone yourself with this superb rhyming verse... In 8/6/8/6 syllabic count, smooth meter, and delicate yet finessed rhymes you soared in this lament of sleeplessness!
Loved:
"Concerns for problems of the day
Are ropes that round me bind.
By worries for the ones I love,
I'm held in close confine."
Sometimes It feels like as I lay my head on the pillow, I have a mental checklist of loved ones to worry about...
Very nice!
Karenina
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Karenina for a wonderful review!
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Welcome!
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Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Very nice depiction of many a remembered night. I don't really like to admit it but when my mind simply will not stop, I turn to prayer. I have a nightly prayer I recite and invariably before I am able to say Amen, I drift off to sleep. I don't know what it is but if I relax long enough to go to the Lord, I think he understands my predicament and lets me have my rest. I don't like to admit it because I don't really like the idea that I can't stay awake long enough to get my prayer done. But that is my remedy.
Very familiar problem and solution.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
Very nice depiction of many a remembered night. I don't really like to admit it but when my mind simply will not stop, I turn to prayer. I have a nightly prayer I recite and invariably before I am able to say Amen, I drift off to sleep. I don't know what it is but if I relax long enough to go to the Lord, I think he understands my predicament and lets me have my rest. I don't like to admit it because I don't really like the idea that I can't stay awake long enough to get my prayer done. But that is my remedy.
Very familiar problem and solution.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your faithfulnesss in reviewing, Gary. I appreciate you.
Comment from GeraldShuler
This was written with the heart of a woman, mother, wife, grandmother and child of God. Your committment to Love as Christ Loved shows in your wonderful poem. It's too bad the only peace comes at the very end. I suggest hearing the songs much sooner. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
This was written with the heart of a woman, mother, wife, grandmother and child of God. Your committment to Love as Christ Loved shows in your wonderful poem. It's too bad the only peace comes at the very end. I suggest hearing the songs much sooner. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks Gerald, for your review and your suggestion.
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The suggestion was for review word count only. I'm sure you already have those songs in your heart already... always. It shows.
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is a beautiful poem, and though I'm not religious (as you know), I find the main portion of the poem beautiful in both thought and wording. The absolutely perfect first stanza drew me in and the following stanzas offer both humor (the fly on the nose) and angst: "Concerns for problems of the day Are ropes that round me bind." The words flow and the images are easy to identify with. My solution to infrequent insomnia is to get up and drink a cup of hot mint tea and read a book. Each person must find the own solution that works for them.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
This is a beautiful poem, and though I'm not religious (as you know), I find the main portion of the poem beautiful in both thought and wording. The absolutely perfect first stanza drew me in and the following stanzas offer both humor (the fly on the nose) and angst: "Concerns for problems of the day Are ropes that round me bind." The words flow and the images are easy to identify with. My solution to infrequent insomnia is to get up and drink a cup of hot mint tea and read a book. Each person must find the own solution that works for them.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thanks for a good review, Katie. I wrote this years ago, and with age, ugh!, Insomnia is worse. When I've been awake for awhile and even the peace I long for doesn't arrive, I get up and read for an hour or so. Usually, I'll go back to sleep then. It isn't always that I'm worried-I'm just old!