Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Sandra,

Another good instalment here. All the threads are weaving together well.

just what are you's hoping to achieve / But shouldn't you's go to the police- in these two instance you use the apostrophe.

In these you don't - Put like that, no, I's not thinking yous can. Okay, when do yous want to do this?'

For consistency, sticking to one presentation would be better.

Gwendolyn just stuck her chin and sniffed.- feels like a word is missing here - stuck out?

All the best
G

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

Comment from Begin Again

Exceptional

Bravo, my dear friend. This is such a wonderful story and your ability to unroll the ghostly events so smoothly is unbelievable. It becomes so believable when you are reading and you can imagine being there... watching and sensing the nerves! I so love this story, Sandra. You deserve a full basket of sixes and more! On to the next chapters.... first time reading in a while so I must catch up quickly!!

Hugs and all my love, Carol

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022

Aw, thank you, Carol. That is so sweet of you to come and read it without a payout and to give it a six stars! I love your review, it is so encouraging! You've made my day! Thank you. Love you lots, Sandra xxx

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Sandra,
Your story shines with excellent dialogue and nice suspense. I tried to put myself in the Margot's place; I don't think I would have visited the two under these circumstances. But I know Margot has an ace...
Congratulations on number 1.
Blessings,
AFA,
Cindy

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022

Hi Cindy, I'm dashing from one place to the other! Thank you so much for another lovely review. I'm not I would visit them under those conditions, but with invisible Bessie, she does have that 'ace'! Thanks, my friend. Love and hugs. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, another one of your greatest hits/chapters...
and another one of your unanswered ending...leaving
me here scratching the nits out of my hair....Thanks...

ok...I'm so glad the Fellows are standing by them...they need their support...along with Margot and Bessie...

I'm glad to see Miles is finally going after Mr. Cranky Pants...and his father...maybe...if your keypads don't stick...we may have a chance to find out what Miles says to him...

and go gettem Margot...and Bessie...do let Gwen and the Jenkins push you around...and your last line is a classic...
one Gwen and Jenkins will have a hard time swallowing...
so lets see what if Margot gets out of that room alive...

I love this story my amazing friend...but I need more...
and I don't mean nits...so drink an energy drink...and get
those digits typing...I'm still waiting to see how Margot
will be leaving Megs body...hummmm...

well done beautiful you...sending sooooooo much love coming your way...Linda xxoo

I hope you and Graham are doing better...taking those
romantic walks in the park...take care...love xxoo

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022

I'm so pleased you like the way this story of mine is plodding along, 😂
Sarah and Josh are Miles' great friends and will always stand by him. The fireworks are going to start exploding soon. You are going to have to wait for another 70,000,000 words before you know all the answers about Margot leaving ... or staying ... or stuck somewhere in the middle!! 😂😂😂

Thank you, my dear friend, for another of your crazy, amazing, wonderful reviews. Love you millions! xxxxx Sandra xxx
Did you get my email about the photo Kristy took of my books? I was thrilled!!! xxxxxxx

reply by l.raven on 14-Jul-2022

well...I guess 70,000,00's not so bad when I
have already waited...how many would you say???...if Meg doesn't give birth to Margot...I'm going to feel real deprived from waiting all this time...I'm looking for a miracle here...

and yes I got your email...thank you...I wish she would have taken all the books together...and tell Graham to give you your birthday card back...I was dead set on you getting it before your birthday...some take 2 or 3 weeks...love you in billions amazing you...Linda xxoo 🤗🤗💓🌷🙏🌼

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

You did a great job, Sandra, with this chapter.
I enjoyed reading it. You began the chapter with a great
question (after a few sentences). 'Who has the money?'
Mr. Cranky is up to his eyeball in the cover-up. It will
be interesting to know what Meg finds out from Gwen.
What an evil woman to think she could keep Meg locked
up. The lines about the discovery of the hemlock are
important. I liked the idea of Meg saying she wasn't
alone. I hope there's more of the way Bessie handled the
poker incident. It seems thing are moving to closure.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022

Thank you so very much for another wonderful review, dear Jan! The question of the money is a mystery at the moment. That might be one that Bessie and Margot will need to find out. 🤔
Bessie is at her best in the next chapter, I think you'll like it. 😊
(I love it that you showed me these smilies!! 😂)
Thank you so much my dear friend, for this wonderful review and the sixth golden star! I do appreciate them, and you, a lot. Love and hugs, Sandra 🥰xxx

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Sandra,
Another marvelous chapter and another step closer to the identity of the potential murderer, apart from Gwendolyn and Jenkins who are already murderers.
The chapter reads smoothly with very good dialogue.

"Now, it seems you've managed to get away with poisoning your father and my brother. Fine, Richard and I were never close"

This seems a bit off, would Margot/Meg really say "fine" to the murder of two people.

Hopefully, Bessie will be enough to scare the two, otherwise Margot could wind up in the cellar.
It might have been better to say "Yes, Miles knows I'm here, but he didn't put me up to it. I came of my own volition.

Great mystery story, I doubt anyone knows for sure who the murderer is.

Hope you are feeling better, my friend. Your health comes first! Best wishes.
Robert

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022

Hello, Robert,
No, she wouldn't, you're right. That does sound as if she condones the murders. Thanks for that, I've taken it out, and changed the other sentence to say Miles knew.

I've had a few guesses, only one has come up with who the murderer is, even then, she only thinks it's a 'might be'. Perhaps I'll have to do a series of 'Bessie and the whodunnit? mysteries. Hmm, now that's an idea.
Thank you so much for this really helpful review, and the lovely sixth star, my friend. I really appreciate them. Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
I'm getting better, thank you, Robert. My cough is easing now, that was the worst part, coughing and trying to breathe. My oxygen levels are up to 94!!! I have to get them to 96 to make my asthma nurse happy, and me. I am still having to stand, or sit up poker straight, to help take the pressure off my ribs. I do my typing standing up, using my breakfast bar to put my laptop on. But I'm feeling better. Thanks for asking, dear friend. xxx

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

Well, I confess to not finding any spag nits at all - I just enjoyed reading the chapter. I'm anticipating a little supernatural fun about to happen and looking forward to how attitudes may change!

Mike

Note:

''I's thinking this snotty butler needs taking down a peg or two!' Bessie was not at all impressed.' - it's a minor thought, but I think Bessie's unimpressedness (ooh, a new word, lol) is self-explanatory

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022

Thank you, Mike! I agree with you and have removed that part. And I love the new word! Unimpressedness! Love it. Yes, Bessie is enjoying herself in the next chapter. 😊 It's nice to have a bit of fun sometimes. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

I'm enjoying the shenanigans Margot and Bessie are getting up to almost as much as they are, I'll be thinking! You are keeping the tension going beautifully as this story gradually draws to its conclusion. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022

Thank you so much, Tony. It's getting closer with each part now and we'll soon see whodunnit! I've loved how people have been guessing and getting it wrong. I'm so pleased you're enjoying it, it is always a compliment coming from respected authors, which you are. Thank you, also, for that sixth star, I really appreciate all of it. Warm hugs, dear friend. Sandra xx

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I think Gwendolyn and Jenkins are about to get the treatment from Bessie. I can't wait. The last time was so funny. I don't imagine their idea of keeping Margot in the cellar is going to work so well. I'm waiting with baited breath to see what happens.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022

Yes, I'm watching her now, and I can tell you, she is having a grand time with her ghostliness! Lol. Thank you so much for your continued support of my story, Cindy, I'm chuffed to bits you are still enjoying it. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Everything happens not as you plan for, for nothing happens per one's perception, wish and expectation, life goes on, still we have to make and take a decision, changes are evident, some characters are realistic, human relation is so complex; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022

Thank you, Alcreator Litt Dear, for another great review. I appreciate it a lot. Warm hugs, Sandra xx