One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Mark Schardine
A pleasant morning which makes us happy that we woke up earlier to for this unique scene. All senses are involved, and we will fondly remember today's pleasures.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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A pleasant morning which makes us happy that we woke up earlier to for this unique scene. All senses are involved, and we will fondly remember today's pleasures.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem! Good presentation- up early in Madrid- I can picture this one in my mind- almost smell the coffee lol- such a beautiful place to be from!!- poem flows well- good job
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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I like your poem! Good presentation- up early in Madrid- I can picture this one in my mind- almost smell the coffee lol- such a beautiful place to be from!!- poem flows well- good job
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs & blessings
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid"-- Atticus
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting 3-5-3 Lune poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2022
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This is a very interesting 3-5-3 Lune poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
I always need to look up what waning and waxing mean. Now with your poem, I have now decoded that alphabetically waNing comes first, and waXing comes last (-;
Do like your artwork and coloring.
If you want to continue your c-letter alliteration, consider crescent for waning.
Mark
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2022
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Gypsy,
I always need to look up what waning and waxing mean. Now with your poem, I have now decoded that alphabetically waNing comes first, and waXing comes last (-;
Do like your artwork and coloring.
If you want to continue your c-letter alliteration, consider crescent for waning.
Mark
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from lyenochka
I like the atmospheric feeling of the "waning morning moon" and how the sun rising causes the night to fade to morning. I wonder if the second line should just be cafe Madrid because it should be just three syllables for a lune.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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I like the atmospheric feeling of the "waning morning moon" and how the sun rising causes the night to fade to morning. I wonder if the second line should just be cafe Madrid because it should be just three syllables for a lune.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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I chose the words lune, is 3/5/3 words. The other syllabus lune is 5/3/5.
Helen,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Very nice, Gypsy. I love the image of coffee and croissant in Madrid, and then the shift to nature with the last line--waning morning moon. The last line has subtle emotional undertones. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Very nice, Gypsy. I love the image of coffee and croissant in Madrid, and then the shift to nature with the last line--waning morning moon. The last line has subtle emotional undertones. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
You've managed to uncover images in my mind of having coffee in St Petersburg at 11:pm in broad daylight, watching the sunset in Santorini at sunset, midday in Dubrovnik, enjoying coffee is various locations, well done Gypsy, great d post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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You've managed to uncover images in my mind of having coffee in St Petersburg at 11:pm in broad daylight, watching the sunset in Santorini at sunset, midday in Dubrovnik, enjoying coffee is various locations, well done Gypsy, great d post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
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Most welcome
