Loss
life is too short for some34 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
Such a beautiful poem Janet, beautiful, though sad, but the final two stanzas bring it all together and seal the story with boundless hope, as we turn to the one who died to make things right.
I am forced to eliminate quotation marks when using my iPad because somehow they become question marks or other unrecognizable symbols when posted on FanStory, but I know you know those are your beautiful words, not mine. Thank you for your pure and lovely poem. I am so sorry for the loss of this young man. Thank you for sharing your touching poem.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Such a beautiful poem Janet, beautiful, though sad, but the final two stanzas bring it all together and seal the story with boundless hope, as we turn to the one who died to make things right.
I am forced to eliminate quotation marks when using my iPad because somehow they become question marks or other unrecognizable symbols when posted on FanStory, but I know you know those are your beautiful words, not mine. Thank you for your pure and lovely poem. I am so sorry for the loss of this young man. Thank you for sharing your touching poem.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely and encouraging review and your condolences for loss of this young man.
I always appreciate hearing from you and your six stars are icing on my cake.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
This was a very deep poem with wonderful rhyme and meter that didn't seem forced.
The picture and presentation was a delight to see.
I loved your message. Parents are the Children's first role models a very important part of a healthy life.
It's a shame that we have so many school shootings. My son was in one when he was 7 years old. We need gun law reforms.
Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This was a very deep poem with wonderful rhyme and meter that didn't seem forced.
The picture and presentation was a delight to see.
I loved your message. Parents are the Children's first role models a very important part of a healthy life.
It's a shame that we have so many school shootings. My son was in one when he was 7 years old. We need gun law reforms.
Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much Gypsy for your kind review. So sorry abut your son's experience and at such a young age. And Novaslis was right....poetry does heal the wounds inflicted by reason.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent piece--skillfully written, with good rhyme and meter; and a powerful, realistic message. I too remember when accountability
began at HOME--with Mama and Daddy. I'm sure it's still that way in SOME homes, but not enough. Young people are dying by the score--as innocent bystanders, as gun-wielding criminals, . . . !
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is an excellent piece--skillfully written, with good rhyme and meter; and a powerful, realistic message. I too remember when accountability
began at HOME--with Mama and Daddy. I'm sure it's still that way in SOME homes, but not enough. Young people are dying by the score--as innocent bystanders, as gun-wielding criminals, . . . !
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much Janice for your kind and understanding review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Wendy G
I understand your distress,and this sort of life, lived in anxiety and fear, is an impossible situation. I am so sorry for the loss of your friend's son, because he didn't "fit in". Where is the acceptance of difference, and the celebration of our diversity?!! Well written poem - thank you for sharing it.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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I understand your distress,and this sort of life, lived in anxiety and fear, is an impossible situation. I am so sorry for the loss of your friend's son, because he didn't "fit in". Where is the acceptance of difference, and the celebration of our diversity?!! Well written poem - thank you for sharing it.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much Wendy for your kind and understanding review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mary Vigasin
So sad that a young man died. The loss to the family makes it difficult for them to recover. My cousin was 17.
Faith in God and the hope of being together one day is needed.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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So sad that a young man died. The loss to the family makes it difficult for them to recover. My cousin was 17.
Faith in God and the hope of being together one day is needed.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much Mary for your kind and understanding review. So sorry for your loss as well.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Sometimes, to someone, life is too short to think of about, his death is really shocking; we the family members can only think of and remember him through the memories of love for there is no hates; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Sometimes, to someone, life is too short to think of about, his death is really shocking; we the family members can only think of and remember him through the memories of love for there is no hates; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much DR for your kind and understanding review. You are so right, our memories will help get us through.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from mermaids
Your words reflect how times have change and yes, it gets closer to home all the time. Your poetic flow is smooth and adds strength to your theme. I love your last verse which emphasizes that Jesus is the answer. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Your words reflect how times have change and yes, it gets closer to home all the time. Your poetic flow is smooth and adds strength to your theme. I love your last verse which emphasizes that Jesus is the answer. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind and understanding review. I appreciate hearing that you favored the last verse. I did too.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Well written poem. Interesting theme, very truthful. I would guess that just about everyone would agree with most of it. It has a nice rhythm, the rhyme scheme works well, too. Impressive!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Well written poem. Interesting theme, very truthful. I would guess that just about everyone would agree with most of it. It has a nice rhythm, the rhyme scheme works well, too. Impressive!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you Donna for your kind and understanding review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Janet,
Your rhyming poem is really fantastic. Your rhyme flows nicely.
I keep picturing the news stories about children being shot and/or abused; when a nation does not protect its vulnerable, it is headed for disaster. In vulnerable I include the elderly and disabled.
Your poem is a wake up call.
I'm sorry for your loss.
Good luck.
Cindy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Janet,
Your rhyming poem is really fantastic. Your rhyme flows nicely.
I keep picturing the news stories about children being shot and/or abused; when a nation does not protect its vulnerable, it is headed for disaster. In vulnerable I include the elderly and disabled.
Your poem is a wake up call.
I'm sorry for your loss.
Good luck.
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you Cindy for your kind and understanding review. I greatly appreciate it.
Blessings
Janet
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Comment from Paul McFarland
This is very good Janet. The rhyme and meter are excellent, and the poem illustrates the tragedies that we endure on an almost daily occasion. Sorry to read about your friend in your notes.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is very good Janet. The rhyme and meter are excellent, and the poem illustrates the tragedies that we endure on an almost daily occasion. Sorry to read about your friend in your notes.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you Paul for your kind and understanding review and for the extra stars. I greatly appreciate your understanding.
Blessings
Janet