My Figment Friend
comforting15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Holy Cow, Katharine! How could you possibly climb into a bed where you had just seen a ghost? I don't think I could stay in the house! I'd be getting dressed and heading to my granddaughter's for the night. Oh... wait now. I see in the rules this is supposed to be a Fiction story, with you and one family member during a ghostly encounter. You had me going for a second there, my dear! No wonder your entry won the contest... Congratulations! Well written!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Holy Cow, Katharine! How could you possibly climb into a bed where you had just seen a ghost? I don't think I could stay in the house! I'd be getting dressed and heading to my granddaughter's for the night. Oh... wait now. I see in the rules this is supposed to be a Fiction story, with you and one family member during a ghostly encounter. You had me going for a second there, my dear! No wonder your entry won the contest... Congratulations! Well written!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Goodness, You certainly went back aways to find that one. Sometimes my imagination flies off on unexpected tangents.
I appreciate your reading my work and for your kind comment.
Katharine
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good idea for a story. The font is a good size, but it could be a tad larger. The visual fits perfectly.
However, I feel the plot needs to be extended, especially in the area where she encounters for the FIRST time a spirit. Most people would not be so calm having a supernatural experience. The supernatural in most stories is frightening the first time, especially if it's not a deceased loved one or family member. She is also too calm on the phone with the granddaughter. The fear/ intimidation part is left out. If the granddaughter thought enough of her to call and check on her, she would possibly offer to come over. The plot is a bit rushed. It doesn't have the fear element. However, I am voting for you because I think you can add those additional details after the contest. You have my vote and a 4 for Good.
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This is a good idea for a story. The font is a good size, but it could be a tad larger. The visual fits perfectly.
However, I feel the plot needs to be extended, especially in the area where she encounters for the FIRST time a spirit. Most people would not be so calm having a supernatural experience. The supernatural in most stories is frightening the first time, especially if it's not a deceased loved one or family member. She is also too calm on the phone with the granddaughter. The fear/ intimidation part is left out. If the granddaughter thought enough of her to call and check on her, she would possibly offer to come over. The plot is a bit rushed. It doesn't have the fear element. However, I am voting for you because I think you can add those additional details after the contest. You have my vote and a 4 for Good.
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Sandra, I had it longer, but then I remembered there was a limited word count, so had to shorten it. It's supposed to be a happy little piece - a positive ghost encounter - light and humorous, a different kind of ghost story. If you'd rather not vote for me I understand, but thanks for your comments.
Katharine
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No, Ms. Pome lover,
It was just making possible suggestions to do or not do. That's just a review. I thought your story was the best regardless of whether you make the changes or not. I had voted before I wrote the review.
You are presently in the lead. I just checked. Let's make suggestions to each other, grow and support each other as female poets. At least that's how I see it.
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I'd be delighted. I was just trying to be different from a scary encounter. A lighter look at one. Thanks for responding!
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Good, let's be real with each other. We might both grow!
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as long as it's not width-wise :)
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Amen for sure not. I don't want vertically either. I am already 5 ft. 10 inches.
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed your story a lot as it seemed very authentic and possible. I agree - I wouldn't want anyone to think I was crazy, not more than usual. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed your story a lot as it seemed very authentic and possible. I agree - I wouldn't want anyone to think I was crazy, not more than usual. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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thanks, Wendy. It was fun to write - getting away from politics.
Thanks for reading and for the good wishes.
Katharine
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed reading your story. I wouldn't have told my granddaughter about it, either. I liked your last lines. "Any more than usual." LOL. Thanks for sharing! Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed reading your story. I wouldn't have told my granddaughter about it, either. I liked your last lines. "Any more than usual." LOL. Thanks for sharing! Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Jessi A+
It was fun to write - and get away from politics.
I appreciate your good wishes!
Katharine
Comment from LJbutterfly
I liked this supernatural ghost story because the ghost was cute and fuzzy, like a pet puppy, or Smiley. He turned out to be friendly, and helped you get a peaceful nights sleep. I also like the idea of keeping your little ghost friend a secret. But, how will Smiley react when he returns home? Ok, it sounds like I'm creating another story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I liked this supernatural ghost story because the ghost was cute and fuzzy, like a pet puppy, or Smiley. He turned out to be friendly, and helped you get a peaceful nights sleep. I also like the idea of keeping your little ghost friend a secret. But, how will Smiley react when he returns home? Ok, it sounds like I'm creating another story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I may write more about the little fella. He and Smiley might become friends, too. Stranger things.... :)
Thanks for reading and for your comments.
Katharine
Comment from lyenochka
This is very cute. I like it because the narrator is so unalarmed by the ghost and even had a better night's sleep with it's comforting presence. It apparently came to keep her company since her dog was at the vet's. Lol. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This is very cute. I like it because the narrator is so unalarmed by the ghost and even had a better night's sleep with it's comforting presence. It apparently came to keep her company since her dog was at the vet's. Lol. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Helen. I might write more about the little fella. It will be different :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the --An Encounter with the Supernatural writing prompt contest--.
I love the fact that grandma wasn't scared of the ghost. It sounds like it was a friendly ghost, like Casper...lol
You followed the rules well
I love the presentation. You have a good chance of winning. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Excellent entry for the --An Encounter with the Supernatural writing prompt contest--.
I love the fact that grandma wasn't scared of the ghost. It sounds like it was a friendly ghost, like Casper...lol
You followed the rules well
I love the presentation. You have a good chance of winning. Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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thank you. I think he's Casper's great nephew :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Inviting spirits back? Not a chance in hades. You have far more ..... than I for sure, and being a woman wouldn't have changed my mind as a man.
Pls advise this is fiction.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Inviting spirits back? Not a chance in hades. You have far more ..... than I for sure, and being a woman wouldn't have changed my mind as a man.
Pls advise this is fiction.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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He's Casper's great nephew; friendly but lonely. I think I'll write some more about him. He and Smiley can become buddies. Get into trouble.
Fiction? pro'bly :)
Comment from Irish Rain
Well this is just a precious little ghosty story.
I don't imagine it would scare any child, I think it would delight them.
I need one of those!!
Loved this,
blessings...
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Well this is just a precious little ghosty story.
I don't imagine it would scare any child, I think it would delight them.
I need one of those!!
Loved this,
blessings...
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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I do, too! Thanks for your always lovely comments!
I might try to develop the little guy and bring him out in other scenarios - maybe not as good as Casper, but not bad, either. Maybe a bit naïve and prone to getting into weird situations.
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Well, I just loved the little cutie!!
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I'll send him your way :)
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YAY
Comment from mermaids
This is delightful. I enjoyed reading this tale of a little cute ghost as a bed time friend. Your story is well written, flows smoothly and holds the reader's interest. Excellent happy supernatural tale.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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This is delightful. I enjoyed reading this tale of a little cute ghost as a bed time friend. Your story is well written, flows smoothly and holds the reader's interest. Excellent happy supernatural tale.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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thank you, ma'am! Your comments are much appreciated.
Katharine
