Kid
This was a grade school writing assignment. It got an 'A'.10 total reviews
Comment from karenina
A child prodigy! Amazing verse at any age...to have such depth at age nine proves my theory that poetry (really, all writing) is the DNA of our souls...
Congratulations on second place!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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A child prodigy! Amazing verse at any age...to have such depth at age nine proves my theory that poetry (really, all writing) is the DNA of our souls...
Congratulations on second place!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. You make me wish I was a child again so I could still write with depth but old age came too quickly. Who ever heard of an elder prodigy? Thank you for reading my work.
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Smile... Young at heart prodigy?
Works for me!
Comment from Melbelles
This is really well done; excellent job on the story. It's memorable in the way I won't forget it. I'm shocked you wrote this in grade school. It takes a lot of talent to write something like this. Bravo!!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This is really well done; excellent job on the story. It's memorable in the way I won't forget it. I'm shocked you wrote this in grade school. It takes a lot of talent to write something like this. Bravo!!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I bet she loved being your teacher, because funny grown-ups (like I discern you to be) started out as funny children. (I know this because I've been an educator for 40 years...)
What an imaginative poem this is for a nine-year-old! And very deep, too. I'll have to read more of your offerings; you've now piqued my curiosity. There's no way your writing hasn't improved.
Thanks for the smile (and, like your "emotional teacher") the tear. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I bet she loved being your teacher, because funny grown-ups (like I discern you to be) started out as funny children. (I know this because I've been an educator for 40 years...)
What an imaginative poem this is for a nine-year-old! And very deep, too. I'll have to read more of your offerings; you've now piqued my curiosity. There's no way your writing hasn't improved.
Thanks for the smile (and, like your "emotional teacher") the tear. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for these kind words and generous rating. I hope my other writing pleases you as well.
Comment from Susan Newell
Gerald,
That is a very profound poem for a nine-year-old. I loved the spelling errors. They added to the charm. It's amazing that you were able two incorporate two distinct personalities, three if you count the dog. I'm impressed.
Sue
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Gerald,
That is a very profound poem for a nine-year-old. I loved the spelling errors. They added to the charm. It's amazing that you were able two incorporate two distinct personalities, three if you count the dog. I'm impressed.
Sue
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. It was hard to show it as originally written because of the mistakes. Thank you.
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You are very welcome. Mistakes just add to the authenticity.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I like the twist at the end, that it's his own child and he still has trouble connecting. This is wise for a youngster!
Thabjs so much for entering my little contest :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I like the twist at the end, that it's his own child and he still has trouble connecting. This is wise for a youngster!
Thabjs so much for entering my little contest :-)
Mike
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. At that young age all I was doing in my writing was trying to impress my teacher but the writing bug hit me.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a very touching poem. I guess you've always had a tender heart. The fact you say it was your son comes as a big surprise. I hope it does well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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This is a very touching poem. I guess you've always had a tender heart. The fact you say it was your son comes as a big surprise. I hope it does well in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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The school assignment was to write a poem about a father and son. I had a friend whose father was the mayor of our town so I just made up the poem from that. My own father read it and said I was wasting my time wanting to learn to write. For a long while I believed him.
Thank you for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
For one so young this is remarkable and beautifully written. Your talent was shining even at that young age. Even without the tears, your teacher should have given you a high grade for an amazing and well-written poem from a nine year old.
Best wishes and this should be a contender in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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For one so young this is remarkable and beautifully written. Your talent was shining even at that young age. Even without the tears, your teacher should have given you a high grade for an amazing and well-written poem from a nine year old.
Best wishes and this should be a contender in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You were one heck of a good writer when you were young. No wonder you can write such interesting and well-written stories now. God blessed you very early in your life.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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You were one heck of a good writer when you were young. No wonder you can write such interesting and well-written stories now. God blessed you very early in your life.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from Teri7
Truly, I enjoyed reading this poem about Kid and prayer from the child. It was heartbreaking to read it and feel the child's pain as he asked the Lord to tell the little dog things for him. Thank you for sharing this. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Truly, I enjoyed reading this poem about Kid and prayer from the child. It was heartbreaking to read it and feel the child's pain as he asked the Lord to tell the little dog things for him. Thank you for sharing this. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from robyn corum
Gerald,
I think it's a remarkable poem for one so young. I would have given you high marks, too. Of course, my first instincts were to try to offer corrections! But I realize the whole beauty of this contest is finding ourselves where we WERE and seeing (maybe) how far we've come. Nice job! Thank you~
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Gerald,
I think it's a remarkable poem for one so young. I would have given you high marks, too. Of course, my first instincts were to try to offer corrections! But I realize the whole beauty of this contest is finding ourselves where we WERE and seeing (maybe) how far we've come. Nice job! Thank you~
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating.
