God Bless America
a young patriot6 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Your opening prayer says it all. But then the unique approach of being the "fly on the wall" of a discussion between God and the angels topped it all off.
Just a few minor observations:
Para 2, 6th sentence: Remove comma after (important)
Para 5, 2nd sentence: Add opening quote mark before (I do not)
Para 15, 1st sentence: Remove one space before (God)
I would like to think God is listening so intently to our children and watching the dire potential of the socialistic takeover unfolding. We can only continue to pray and hope for November. Something is going to happen.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Your opening prayer says it all. But then the unique approach of being the "fly on the wall" of a discussion between God and the angels topped it all off.
Just a few minor observations:
Para 2, 6th sentence: Remove comma after (important)
Para 5, 2nd sentence: Add opening quote mark before (I do not)
Para 15, 1st sentence: Remove one space before (God)
I would like to think God is listening so intently to our children and watching the dire potential of the socialistic takeover unfolding. We can only continue to pray and hope for November. Something is going to happen.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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thanks, Gary. Corrected the errors. thanks for the catch.
Something IS going to happen in November, the question is, what? I wouldn't put anything past the extreme liberals.
Comment from Loren .
This is such a bold and pleading prayer and post. It is well presented and expresses the hope of so many of us. God does hear and we must stand firm that He is in control and always will be, Loren
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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This is such a bold and pleading prayer and post. It is well presented and expresses the hope of so many of us. God does hear and we must stand firm that He is in control and always will be, Loren
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Loren. But I am truly sick with worry. Why, since God is in control, as you say, is He letting us become a Socialist country? Is it because a minority (though it is growing) of Americans, along with the news people, etc, and our Congress, have rejected him?
But what about the majority of people in this country who have not? I do not understand His letting this happen to us. It is not my place to understand or question, I guess, but, I do.
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I truly understand but we must have faith. That is the assurance of things hoped for will come about even though we can?t see it. That is faith. Our country does look morally dismal but there are those of us who believe God will prevail and keep His followers safe. That is why the Christian community is so important. We know right from wrong because we commune with God through the Holy Spirit, Non believers do not have that favor. This is a war against dark, evil spirits and not against flesh and blood. Read the book of Ephesians and see what Paul has to say about this. We must put on the armor of God daily and stand firm. Do not believe the lies of satan but rather the truth of Jesus as found in the Bible. In the end I guess it is a matter of choice, but I personally will state as Joshua once said ?for me and my house, we will serve the Lord.? Saturate all you think and say in prayer, do not hate or fret, only believe and put on the full armor of God. Take care and I pray wisdom will council you and give you peace. Loren
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thank you, Loren. I hope so, too.
Comment from AP Apgar
"We the People"
"One Nation under God"
"United we Stand"
"Never give up"
"This too shall pass"
"Never Forget"
All words to remember as God's new generation is awakened to the fact that 'Freedom' is actually more than just a 'word '- when it's loss directly effects them- a Father teaching his children. God Bless you for your Poem
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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"We the People"
"One Nation under God"
"United we Stand"
"Never give up"
"This too shall pass"
"Never Forget"
All words to remember as God's new generation is awakened to the fact that 'Freedom' is actually more than just a 'word '- when it's loss directly effects them- a Father teaching his children. God Bless you for your Poem
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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thank you so much. I just hope the new generation (and us oldies) don't really have to go through what is being planned for us, that somehow Americans will start acting like Americans - we ARE the majority (not in Congress) but in the real world. I think it is going to take an uprising.
Anyway, I truly appreciate your comments - I hope this DOES pass. I pray that it does. And I am honored over the 6! muchas gracias, as they say here. :)
oops. almost signed my name.
Comment from GollyGreen32
Hi! I enjoyed your story. I think that using God's and the angels' points of view was a good idea. I liked that you incorporated the colors red, white, and blue into the print. The only criticism I have is that you wrote the entire story in italics. It's very difficult to read. I would suggest only using italics for a few lines of text that you want to emphasize. Otherwise, nice job. Have a blessed week!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Hi! I enjoyed your story. I think that using God's and the angels' points of view was a good idea. I liked that you incorporated the colors red, white, and blue into the print. The only criticism I have is that you wrote the entire story in italics. It's very difficult to read. I would suggest only using italics for a few lines of text that you want to emphasize. Otherwise, nice job. Have a blessed week!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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thank you for reading and for your comments.
However, it's not italics, it's script, and I think it's pretty. I'm sorry that it was difficult for you to read. I made it larger so it wouldn't be.
Maybe if I made it darker?
Comment from Fleedleflump
You've written this extremely clearly and with no errors or spags that I noticed. I like that you switch up the format between narrative conversations and prayers, making for a varied read.
Mike
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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You've written this extremely clearly and with no errors or spags that I noticed. I like that you switch up the format between narrative conversations and prayers, making for a varied read.
Mike
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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thank you, Mike, for a very nice review; much appreciated.
Comment from simonbagh
Then the angels each put hand to heart, bowed their heads in respect, and smiling hopefully, departed on their mission.
I just must confess that how I enjoyed seeing how nicely and beautifully you connected the Earth and Heaven to each other with blessful approach I also do prayers for the whole world and humanity to get a way to get rid of this political chaos
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Then the angels each put hand to heart, bowed their heads in respect, and smiling hopefully, departed on their mission.
I just must confess that how I enjoyed seeing how nicely and beautifully you connected the Earth and Heaven to each other with blessful approach I also do prayers for the whole world and humanity to get a way to get rid of this political chaos
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you. I wish it weren't fiction. I keep hoping.
Thank you so much for the lovely 6. I didn't know if some people might be offended by my taking license with God and His angels, but I hope they aren't.
