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Comment from prettybluebirds
This is an interesting story and I'm waiting for the dowsing to begin. The story is easy to follow and understand. Maybe it could use some dialogue to liven it up but it is okay as it is. Nice work.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2022
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This is an interesting story and I'm waiting for the dowsing to begin. The story is easy to follow and understand. Maybe it could use some dialogue to liven it up but it is okay as it is. Nice work.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. The catch-22 here, is they have to be silent. In earlier chapters in the 21st century there is plenty of dialogue. The only dialogue is Abbot Richard. He's the boss, he can speak. lol
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
There is a lot to resolve in the near future I feel. A the moment you are merely adding up unanswered questions. The significance of the 21st century harp players that the narrator saw playing 16th century harps still remains unexplained, and now we have Brother Roger in a mysterious piteous state. I look forward to reading answers. Kate xx
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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There is a lot to resolve in the near future I feel. A the moment you are merely adding up unanswered questions. The significance of the 21st century harp players that the narrator saw playing 16th century harps still remains unexplained, and now we have Brother Roger in a mysterious piteous state. I look forward to reading answers. Kate xx
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I adjusted the numbers for the centuries as you had observed. It's all math to me. I can write a book but cannot do math.
Comment from jp88
This was really interesting! I haven't read the rest of your writing, so I fully expected to not follow everything, but it was still engaging and interesting to read!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This was really interesting! I haven't read the rest of your writing, so I fully expected to not follow everything, but it was still engaging and interesting to read!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your interested review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from leather
This was an interesting chapter in an interesting location and setting. Two elements of this writing gave me pause: The word "buddy" seemed out of place for that time and environment, and the aside, "Ow, that would hurt." seemed intrusive and not productive in advancing the story. Otherwise, the suspense issues are quite solid.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This was an interesting chapter in an interesting location and setting. Two elements of this writing gave me pause: The word "buddy" seemed out of place for that time and environment, and the aside, "Ow, that would hurt." seemed intrusive and not productive in advancing the story. Otherwise, the suspense issues are quite solid.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your interested review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
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Yes, it is challenging to come in cold to a story chapter. First, rather than subsequent chapters might be much easier to follow. However, that wouldn't allow much feedback for the rest of the book. Thank you for the invitation to read other chapters from this book.
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Remember, no need for a review, just enjoy
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Okay.
Comment from lyenochka
So much has begun but isn't resolved! I was hoping the dowsing would have had a positive effect on the situation. Yet, only preparation to dowse was mentioned. Instead, more problems are uncovered. I wish I could have heard what Sylvester actually said instead of the summary "When he finishes his explanation..."
Question:
my big browns could not unfasten (What are the "big browns"? eyes?)
Time period question:
Henry the VIII lived mostly in the 1500s so shouldn't the monastery time be the 16th century to make them concurrent?
Abbot Richard and Brother John, catch Brother Roger (remove comma as it separates the subject from the verb)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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So much has begun but isn't resolved! I was hoping the dowsing would have had a positive effect on the situation. Yet, only preparation to dowse was mentioned. Instead, more problems are uncovered. I wish I could have heard what Sylvester actually said instead of the summary "When he finishes his explanation..."
Question:
my big browns could not unfasten (What are the "big browns"? eyes?)
Time period question:
Henry the VIII lived mostly in the 1500s so shouldn't the monastery time be the 16th century to make them concurrent?
Abbot Richard and Brother John, catch Brother Roger (remove comma as it separates the subject from the verb)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Helen,
Thank you for your insightful review. For some reason several have, for the 1st time, noted the discrepancy in the centuries. Jessiezero, said it sounds like we were born in the 1800's...bwaaa. It is math. So if we were born in 1900's what century is that & if the story takes place in 2003, what century is that? It's funny you mention the unnecessary comma. Jay has tutored me on my plethora of commas. I caught myself & took out about 12 commas. In school I didn't have enough commas. Now I'm overcorrecting...bwaaa. This is quite an improvement. I told myself, 'I', not going to use ANY commas, & yet, I guess I can't help myself. lol
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I know! I feel "commatose" and I don't like them at all but I have learned a lot about comma usage here!
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I'm learning...lol
The past life stuff takes place during 1539...so is that the 15th century? I do not understand how the century stuff works. Maybe I should look it up to begin to understand how it work. So we are probably only in the 21st century now?
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I love the commatose play on words...707
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Yes, we're in the 21st century just like you say in your notes. Henry VIII was born in the 15th century but by the time he was 10, he entered the 16th century.
Comment from aryr
What an interesting continuation chapter, Liz. Poor Madeline/ Brother Samuel is preparing to dowse the outcome when Brother Roger appears bloody, muddy and beaten. Perhaps she/he should continue her dowsing, it will definitely be better to know a little rather than nothing. Very well done, sadly but greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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What an interesting continuation chapter, Liz. Poor Madeline/ Brother Samuel is preparing to dowse the outcome when Brother Roger appears bloody, muddy and beaten. Perhaps she/he should continue her dowsing, it will definitely be better to know a little rather than nothing. Very well done, sadly but greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the appreciative review. I'm so glad you are into it. It is following the history of the place...not good.
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You are so welcome, Liz, I think it is great and informational.
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***warm smile***
By the way, there is a writer on here you may be familiar with named Sandra Mitchell. She's on her 2nd bout of Covid.I sent healing to her on all levels.
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Yes, I know of Sandra and sent her mine twice, lol.
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lol
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, this is an interesting turn. Samuel is going to use his rosary as a dowser, but in the process of deciding what to dowse for he digs deeper and deeper into the monastery and the Church. Both are houses of cards. He has yet to dowse. Good job, Liz
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Well, this is an interesting turn. Samuel is going to use his rosary as a dowser, but in the process of deciding what to dowse for he digs deeper and deeper into the monastery and the Church. Both are houses of cards. He has yet to dowse. Good job, Liz
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your entertaining review. I'm glad you are enjoying this subject...I will get very fired up.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Well-written and looking bad for the monastery. Henry VIII needed them gone as he began his new church with him in charge and it looks as if it is about to ruin the life in the Samuel's monastery. You and your heroine grew up in the 20th century (the 1900's), not in the 19th century (the 1800's).
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Well-written and looking bad for the monastery. Henry VIII needed them gone as he began his new church with him in charge and it looks as if it is about to ruin the life in the Samuel's monastery. You and your heroine grew up in the 20th century (the 1900's), not in the 19th century (the 1800's).
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your entertaining review. Thank you for the math enlightment. I can write a book, just not do math...bwaaa
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Thank you for your entertaining review. Thank you for the math enlightment. I can write a book, just not do math...bwaaa
Comment from jessizero
You have listed high school in 19th century, but that would be the 1800's, when they had no records.
Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed this installment. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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You have listed high school in 19th century, but that would be the 1800's, when they had no records.
Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed this installment. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your entertaining review. Thank you for the math enlightment. I can write a book, just not do math...bwaaa
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Thank you for your entertaining review. Thank you for the math enlightment. I can write a book, just not do math...bwaaa So if people were born in the 1950's, you're saying that's the 20th century. So now we are in the 2002 in the book, so what century would that be? I've got some adjusting to do.