Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Let's Pretend"Romantic Tanka Poems
19 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
We can never let go or move on after a terrible relationship. The harm done by the abuse will remain and at times intensify. The expression "come to terms with it" has no meaning.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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We can never let go or move on after a terrible relationship. The harm done by the abuse will remain and at times intensify. The expression "come to terms with it" has no meaning.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Mark, thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
"We are all wanderers on this earth. Our hearts are full of wonder, and our souls are deep with dreams." -Gypsy Proverbs
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It's easy to fantasise about all kinds of things in the back of our minds. Real life will teach us hard lessons if we act on those fantasies. There is nothing that can replace the real thing in reality. When the heart is connected to that special person, your heart gets ripped apart. Trying to fix anything broken has permanent flaws.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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It's easy to fantasise about all kinds of things in the back of our minds. Real life will teach us hard lessons if we act on those fantasies. There is nothing that can replace the real thing in reality. When the heart is connected to that special person, your heart gets ripped apart. Trying to fix anything broken has permanent flaws.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Yes, I agree.
Thank you very much, Carolyn. Have a nice weekend & 4th of July
Gypsy
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You are welcome.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Gypsy,
You've written a splendid tanka that pulls all the heart strings.
Beautiful imagery about the remembrance of romance.
Touch is the key to tanka, as it is the human connection;
perfect from the bookend photographs to the the flowing tanka.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Hello Gypsy,
You've written a splendid tanka that pulls all the heart strings.
Beautiful imagery about the remembrance of romance.
Touch is the key to tanka, as it is the human connection;
perfect from the bookend photographs to the the flowing tanka.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Robert, I deeply appreciate your stellar six stars review and kind words. Your opinion means a lot to me. Have a wonderful weekend.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". - Novalis
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Oh, how very sad, creative, and expressive this piece is! The heartbroken speaker is grasping for some little morsel of affection from the man who loves someone else.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Oh, how very sad, creative, and expressive this piece is! The heartbroken speaker is grasping for some little morsel of affection from the man who loves someone else.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Yes, you totally got my poem. Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from R.B.Bunn
What a lovely piece and the picture to go with it fits so well. Sometimes memories is all someone has, especially in a love gone wrong. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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What a lovely piece and the picture to go with it fits so well. Sometimes memories is all someone has, especially in a love gone wrong. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Yes, you totally got my poem. Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Ulla
This is just too beautiful, Marival. Without any effort you've written a tanka suite, one poem more beautiful than the other.
You are so talented, my dear friend. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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This is just too beautiful, Marival. Without any effort you've written a tanka suite, one poem more beautiful than the other.
You are so talented, my dear friend. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Gracias, Ulla, thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback .
Besitos y abrazos ♡
Comment from estory
I liked this. I thought it was very melancholy, very romantic, you had that great concentration of emotion in these short lines and intense stanzas. Nice economy of language. I liked the closing image, that captures this sense of a dying love, through the sunset and gathering darkness. you really captured the emotion we all feel there when a relationship comes to an end. estory
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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I liked this. I thought it was very melancholy, very romantic, you had that great concentration of emotion in these short lines and intense stanzas. Nice economy of language. I liked the closing image, that captures this sense of a dying love, through the sunset and gathering darkness. you really captured the emotion we all feel there when a relationship comes to an end. estory
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy♡
"A tear in the eye is a wound in the heart." ? Gypsy Proverbs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Gypsy,
The melancholy hits like a dull thud of reality settling just to be comforted in a way the heart and mind remembers. A lonely night, a strangers caress, a craving... a feeling of belonging, of being needed and to need someone just to be there, just to hold and be held.
I don't usually go and read reviews on poems unless I have reason. But after the third,or fourth read of this poem, I couldn't help but to do so... and besides, I wanted to check the number of six's your received... and to my astonishment, not a one... What!
Even some of the comments made my face slightly contort and my head shake back and forth in dismay... What?
Laying judgment on someone searching for the comfort to alleviate the ache of having and knowing a love that is no longer there... What!
The picture accompanying your lingering words, painted and paired with your poem and presentation beautifully. The disintegration of part of self, perfect... no indication that any minor was used in this promotion... What?
Life is life. For some, all they will ever have is a memory of something more solid than they now know, could ever find, or have. Sometimes, the touch and caress of contact is enough to momentarily dampen the hole left behind... it may be the only thing left to hold onto?
So, sad as it is, the deep rich description and story has length and form.
The language and words, used to such a degree, drew this reader right into the feeling of it, the loss of it, the need in it, and yes, the hit of reality that love may be flickering awaiting its end. To keep something alive within self, with a sense of regaining the littlest piece of love, somehow, somewhere.
I may be a sucker when it comes to the writing of the heart and all of its complexities, but I find this so real, and so hauntingly touching.
With our thoughts we create...
a fleeting comfort.
Kindest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Hi Gypsy,
The melancholy hits like a dull thud of reality settling just to be comforted in a way the heart and mind remembers. A lonely night, a strangers caress, a craving... a feeling of belonging, of being needed and to need someone just to be there, just to hold and be held.
I don't usually go and read reviews on poems unless I have reason. But after the third,or fourth read of this poem, I couldn't help but to do so... and besides, I wanted to check the number of six's your received... and to my astonishment, not a one... What!
Even some of the comments made my face slightly contort and my head shake back and forth in dismay... What?
Laying judgment on someone searching for the comfort to alleviate the ache of having and knowing a love that is no longer there... What!
The picture accompanying your lingering words, painted and paired with your poem and presentation beautifully. The disintegration of part of self, perfect... no indication that any minor was used in this promotion... What?
Life is life. For some, all they will ever have is a memory of something more solid than they now know, could ever find, or have. Sometimes, the touch and caress of contact is enough to momentarily dampen the hole left behind... it may be the only thing left to hold onto?
So, sad as it is, the deep rich description and story has length and form.
The language and words, used to such a degree, drew this reader right into the feeling of it, the loss of it, the need in it, and yes, the hit of reality that love may be flickering awaiting its end. To keep something alive within self, with a sense of regaining the littlest piece of love, somehow, somewhere.
I may be a sucker when it comes to the writing of the heart and all of its complexities, but I find this so real, and so hauntingly touching.
With our thoughts we create...
a fleeting comfort.
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you doesn't seem enough for an exceptional review like yours. You totally got the emotional impact I intended it. Us, artists...authors....Poets..., give a piece of our hearts with each poem...painting...novel... whatever media our souls use to express through us. We are the conducts of pain, love, grief, joy, and yearning. It's a pleasure when someone like you, another poet, "gets it". Thank you for the stellar six stars review, James.
Gypsy♡
Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason. --Novalis
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem, good presentation picture is excellent - the poem tells and interesting story, although sad, of someone looking to re-experience a feeling they once had in a time past - hoping they can recreate it, exactly -with someone else in their present conscious reality - unconditionally - the poems is fine - I do however - from my perspective only - feel perplexed when I put the picture with the poem? The subject appears to be a pre-teen to me, and therefore words in the poem like "romance' for example and "he" give it a different turn. Just me. Good job. hug
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I like your poem, good presentation picture is excellent - the poem tells and interesting story, although sad, of someone looking to re-experience a feeling they once had in a time past - hoping they can recreate it, exactly -with someone else in their present conscious reality - unconditionally - the poems is fine - I do however - from my perspective only - feel perplexed when I put the picture with the poem? The subject appears to be a pre-teen to me, and therefore words in the poem like "romance' for example and "he" give it a different turn. Just me. Good job. hug
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I like the picture. To me it looks like a woman but I get your point. The poem is not about a teenager, that would be horrible.
Thank you, ap
Gypsy♡
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
Thank you for this lovely and sad poem. I'm trying to learn more about Japanese poetic form so I really appreciated this example of Tanka. I especially loved the lines: "the way he used to hold me, tenderly and kind --" The end line rhymes work beautifully!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this lovely and sad poem. I'm trying to learn more about Japanese poetic form so I really appreciated this example of Tanka. I especially loved the lines: "the way he used to hold me, tenderly and kind --" The end line rhymes work beautifully!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
