First Impressions
A first date does not go as usually expected15 total reviews
Comment from C2
Mike,
This is well executed and very funny with just the right level of melancholy--if not outright sentimentality. It expresses beautifully the pretense and false posturing the online dating scene has escalated to the next excruciating level, but does so by contrast. Your couple, honest and weary of charade, turn the first date paradigm on its head. Bravo for this funny, toughing opening scene. If it were a series I'd definitely want to see what happens to this couple next!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Mike,
This is well executed and very funny with just the right level of melancholy--if not outright sentimentality. It expresses beautifully the pretense and false posturing the online dating scene has escalated to the next excruciating level, but does so by contrast. Your couple, honest and weary of charade, turn the first date paradigm on its head. Bravo for this funny, toughing opening scene. If it were a series I'd definitely want to see what happens to this couple next!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much! I'm not sure everyone 'got it' with this piece, but that's fine - I knew very well I was being provocative. It started life as a crime-based script but as I was writing the exchange between the two, it felt so right as a sort of honest romance, I decided to drop the crime bits (they will no doubt be recycled into a future project!). I'm thrilled you enjoyed this :-)
Mike
Comment from Iza Deleanu
ha, ha, ha very colorful but heck this might happen on a first date - what you see is what you get. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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ha, ha, ha very colorful but heck this might happen on a first date - what you see is what you get. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Iza :-). I had no chance with the contest, but I really enjoyed writing this, and that's the most important thing.
Mike
Comment from Cindy Warren
They say nobody's ugly at closing time. I guess that applies in this case. He's good and drunk. I wonder what he'll think of her in the morning. He may not like himself to well either. Hope he doesn't end up needing a crab scrub.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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They say nobody's ugly at closing time. I guess that applies in this case. He's good and drunk. I wonder what he'll think of her in the morning. He may not like himself to well either. Hope he doesn't end up needing a crab scrub.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thanks Cindy :-). I've known stranger couples, but I don't thing I give them great odd long term!
Mike
Comment from WLHall
This is so disgusting but I love it. Match made in heaven. The dialogue flowed well, seemed natural. The introduction is a little misleading since the man is described as being neatly dressed and groomed, and then to realize he's as disgusting as the woman. That's great because I thought he would run out on her. You let it play out superbly. Do these kind of first dates really happen? Very entertaining.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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This is so disgusting but I love it. Match made in heaven. The dialogue flowed well, seemed natural. The introduction is a little misleading since the man is described as being neatly dressed and groomed, and then to realize he's as disgusting as the woman. That's great because I thought he would run out on her. You let it play out superbly. Do these kind of first dates really happen? Very entertaining.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Wanda :-). Who knows - it takes all sorts! Admittedly, it was quite fun writing her dialogue.
Mike
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the First Date contest.
In my opinion, most dates don't turn out the way one expects.
I enjoyed reading your script. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Excellent entry for the First Date contest.
In my opinion, most dates don't turn out the way one expects.
I enjoyed reading your script. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Admittedly, I haven't been on a date in a while, just lots of comfy married cuddles on the sofa! Still, I enjoyed writing this :-).
Mike
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lots of comfy married cuddles on the sofa are priceless ♡
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Yes, this did make me smile in several places, although probably not where you were hoping for the most laughs. I particularly liked the play on UK versus US English - wouldn't it be good to see a piece liberally peppered with that... Kate xx
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Yes, this did make me smile in several places, although probably not where you were hoping for the most laughs. I particularly liked the play on UK versus US English - wouldn't it be good to see a piece liberally peppered with that... Kate xx
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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There's definitely some fun to be plumbed from misunderstandings between Americans and Brits, that's for sure :-). I'm glad you enjoyed it, Kate, and many thanks for the fun contest prompt.
Mike
Comment from BethShelby
Excellent script writing. It was fun to read.
The first impressing seem to be "No Way". but I guess he's had enough wine to want to see where it leads.
She was quite a character, but I've met a few that she'll feel right at home with. I enjoyed reading and got some laughs. It sure makes my first date seem tame, but I was practically a child. These two have been around the block a few times. Good luck in the contest.
Beth
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Excellent script writing. It was fun to read.
The first impressing seem to be "No Way". but I guess he's had enough wine to want to see where it leads.
She was quite a character, but I've met a few that she'll feel right at home with. I enjoyed reading and got some laughs. It sure makes my first date seem tame, but I was practically a child. These two have been around the block a few times. Good luck in the contest.
Beth
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Beth :-). It was fun writing the lady as the vulgar one and she's based on a real person I used to work with. Hopefully it's something a little different for the contest!
Mike
Comment from royowen
I wonder where this came from Mike. Because I'm an Aussie, we use a similar Vernacular, even with some rhyming slang to boot. We've even got a lot of our own. Well done, showing c versatility in this, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I wonder where this came from Mike. Because I'm an Aussie, we use a similar Vernacular, even with some rhyming slang to boot. We've even got a lot of our own. Well done, showing c versatility in this, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks Roy :-). This is about as close as I come to a normal romance story - ie part comedy and shock value! It actually started out as a crime-slanted date script but I changed my mind. The crime bits will be recycled into a new one!
Mike
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I?m a little like that, although I?m a little sloppier with wife, daughters and grands.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, this is different! I could imagine the right accent based on your spelling. I am glad the man found the very unvarnished personality of the "Lady" refreshing. Sounds like a good date after all. Best wishes in the contest!
Also, great job with the script - the directions and the very poetically written scene setting!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Well, this is different! I could imagine the right accent based on your spelling. I am glad the man found the very unvarnished personality of the "Lady" refreshing. Sounds like a good date after all. Best wishes in the contest!
Also, great job with the script - the directions and the very poetically written scene setting!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you! I loved the idea of the lady being the vulgar one of the two, but then playing it out with genuine intent. It was almost a crime thriller instead, so those elements will be recycled :-).
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very interesting contest entry. I can honestly say none of my first dates were anywhere close to this one. This entry was fun and easy to read. Thank you for sharing it with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This is a very interesting contest entry. I can honestly say none of my first dates were anywhere close to this one. This entry was fun and easy to read. Thank you for sharing it with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Barbara :-). Hopefully it's a bit different from the other entries!
Mike
