Be All You Can Be
Always appreciate your talents14 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
Sorry, out of sixes. I know this is old, way younger than me though, but I just wanted to catch up on some of the top-rated writers and I'm so delighted I did. You certainly deserve your listing near the top of the writer's ratings. If this is an example of the quality of your skill, I'll make sure I drop by more often.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Sorry, out of sixes. I know this is old, way younger than me though, but I just wanted to catch up on some of the top-rated writers and I'm so delighted I did. You certainly deserve your listing near the top of the writer's ratings. If this is an example of the quality of your skill, I'll make sure I drop by more often.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much, Bob :-). I remember enjoying writing this one - I'm so glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written. Good work.
Excellent fable-like story. Although I think that there may be room for something in between, such as dreaming a lofty goal and working/training toward it and being satisfied where you end.
But yours does a good job at stretching the issue to make the point.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Well written. Good work.
Excellent fable-like story. Although I think that there may be room for something in between, such as dreaming a lofty goal and working/training toward it and being satisfied where you end.
But yours does a good job at stretching the issue to make the point.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Wayne :-). Totally agree about there being a happy medium - I just used extremes to fit the fable format. Really happy you liked it!
Mike
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I liked the lesson here.
I believe we all have something we are good at and I think we should cultivate it.
If we are lucky and we can make a living out of it good otherwise we should find a job that pays the bills and in our free time do what makes us happy.
Personally, I think making university more accessible was an error.
Too many wannabe uni students are just not up to scratch , too many set goals far beyond their possibilities. This idea to follow one s dreams is okay up to a certain point.
In the end lots of student fail and have to face the hard truth but in the mean time they wasted ( precious) time and worse their parents money.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Ciao !
I liked the lesson here.
I believe we all have something we are good at and I think we should cultivate it.
If we are lucky and we can make a living out of it good otherwise we should find a job that pays the bills and in our free time do what makes us happy.
Personally, I think making university more accessible was an error.
Too many wannabe uni students are just not up to scratch , too many set goals far beyond their possibilities. This idea to follow one s dreams is okay up to a certain point.
In the end lots of student fail and have to face the hard truth but in the mean time they wasted ( precious) time and worse their parents money.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much :-). Yes, we're definitely on the same page here! I obviously used extreme examples for the sake of humour and to fit the fable style, but I think knowing your weaknesses is just as important as knowing your strengths. It's not soul-crushing for me to admit that I'll never be a champion salesman - it's just honest and saves me wasting time trying to be one.
Thanks again for the awesome review!
Mike
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Write A Modern Fable writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed reading your poem written in your own unique style. You have a way with words that is captivating. Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand. Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Excellent entry for the Write A Modern Fable writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed reading your poem written in your own unique style. You have a way with words that is captivating. Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand. Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Aw, I'm glad you liked it, Gypsy. Thanks very much for your words :-)
Comment from Bill Schott
Although I think the outcome for a Ralph and Jenny was broadcast from the beginning, I like the eventual moral, which captures the biggest problem people have today. They want to famous rather than functional, and want to make a killing instead of a living. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Although I think the outcome for a Ralph and Jenny was broadcast from the beginning, I like the eventual moral, which captures the biggest problem people have today. They want to famous rather than functional, and want to make a killing instead of a living. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thanks Bill :-). You're totally right - I might as well have run a flag up a pole, but I feel like that's a feature of the classic fables, so it felt okay. Thanks for the great review :-)
Comment from Wendy G
That's an excellent fable with a meaningful moral. It promotes acceptance of one's own gifts and talents, and being realistic, not envying others their abilities. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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That's an excellent fable with a meaningful moral. It promotes acceptance of one's own gifts and talents, and being realistic, not envying others their abilities. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Wendy :-). I think it's essential to find our strengths and maximise them. Obviously, we're going to find things we enjoy but aren't great at, and that's fine - as long as we don't expect to lead the world in them!
Comment from lyenochka
I love the moral of the story! Yes, "small (and practical) dreams" are far better than "massive delusions." I always feel bad for the children here who are taught that they "can be whatever they want to be." That could lead to a lot of disappointment. It's better to discover what we're good at instead! Hope this wins!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I love the moral of the story! Yes, "small (and practical) dreams" are far better than "massive delusions." I always feel bad for the children here who are taught that they "can be whatever they want to be." That could lead to a lot of disappointment. It's better to discover what we're good at instead! Hope this wins!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you :-). There aren't many things I feel strongly about but this is one. I think this culture of 'achieve your dreams' is incredibly damaging psychologically. The problem is, the only people we're exposed to in the mass media are the 0.01% who've actually managed it, not the depressed masses.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good one, a cautionary tale if you will. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hello fellow writer a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good one, a cautionary tale if you will. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much :-)
Comment from Marienkiefer
This is delightful to read. Most sparkling: the conversation when they discuss their aspirations and Ralph salutes with his sticky doughnut. You've chosen absolutely right POV, good flow her and great balance of dialogue and action or reactions.
I loved the moral of your story which now provides another reason to avoid high school reunions, sore reminders and delusional nostalgia.
Fantastic humour, on the right side, tilting ever so slightly past center...irony. All good, great.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This is delightful to read. Most sparkling: the conversation when they discuss their aspirations and Ralph salutes with his sticky doughnut. You've chosen absolutely right POV, good flow her and great balance of dialogue and action or reactions.
I loved the moral of your story which now provides another reason to avoid high school reunions, sore reminders and delusional nostalgia.
Fantastic humour, on the right side, tilting ever so slightly past center...irony. All good, great.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much! This was something a bit different for me so I enjoyed writing it :-)
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked the moral of this, although I don't wholeheartedly agree with it. if I did, I'd be doing something with maths which I was really good at but hated. I'd not be writing which was discouraged because of my dyslexia.
Ralph nodded his agreement, saluting the others with a sticky doughnut.- Ralph had been unwrapping a chocolate bar - he must have woofed that down fast!
e died of a burger overdose - a burger overdose! Maybe high cholesterol- or coronary heart disease.
One of the better ones of these I've read for the competiton.
GMG
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hi there,
I liked the moral of this, although I don't wholeheartedly agree with it. if I did, I'd be doing something with maths which I was really good at but hated. I'd not be writing which was discouraged because of my dyslexia.
Ralph nodded his agreement, saluting the others with a sticky doughnut.- Ralph had been unwrapping a chocolate bar - he must have woofed that down fast!
e died of a burger overdose - a burger overdose! Maybe high cholesterol- or coronary heart disease.
One of the better ones of these I've read for the competiton.
GMG
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, my friend :-). Totally with you - sometimes the dream is the way to go after all (you are proof). Tongue was firmly in cheek for this one, which is why I couldn't resist the burger overdose line! Glad you enjoyed it!
