haiku ( bright crescent moon)
A 4-7-6 Haiku for the club challenge15 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gazing out on the full moon a week or so ago, I easily 'see' your explanation in your nicely penned poem.
Nice posting for Gypsy's club idea.
Mark
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Gazing out on the full moon a week or so ago, I easily 'see' your explanation in your nicely penned poem.
Nice posting for Gypsy's club idea.
Mark
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, kym,
Good job, I love your moon haiku. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Hello, kym,
Good job, I love your moon haiku. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
I enjoy looking at the different phases of the moon. This is a great picture.
Sometimes the moon shines so bright at night. I wish those men would stop going up there. They have no business there. Man needs to leave space alone. Now they have created a garbage dump. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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I enjoy looking at the different phases of the moon. This is a great picture.
Sometimes the moon shines so bright at night. I wish those men would stop going up there. They have no business there. Man needs to leave space alone. Now they have created a garbage dump. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much and yes I agree, we should be looking after our own planet, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are welcome.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, kahpot.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery describing the moon and the night.
-A good satori line, but I would take out 'the'. You
don't want to have too many small descriptors in a haiku;
you just need the short, long, short format. It also gives
you the 5 syllables instead of 6.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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-Nice image and presentation, kahpot.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery describing the moon and the night.
-A good satori line, but I would take out 'the'. You
don't want to have too many small descriptors in a haiku;
you just need the short, long, short format. It also gives
you the 5 syllables instead of 6.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, and for your suggestions, I did and will again think about your idea, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Awesome presentation, kahpot. I enjoyed your moon haiku.
Great job with the haiku style. Your picture is beautiful and
mysterious at the same time. Your words alone painted a great
picture, too. The color scheme is perfect.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Awesome presentation, kahpot. I enjoyed your moon haiku.
Great job with the haiku style. Your picture is beautiful and
mysterious at the same time. Your words alone painted a great
picture, too. The color scheme is perfect.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for your uplifting comments and review, so encouraging, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
What a fun interpretation of the lovely artwork! An armchair view of the stars. No wonder he's relaxed and content. Very soothing imagery captured in just a few short lines. Well done! Great response to the club challenge.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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What a fun interpretation of the lovely artwork! An armchair view of the stars. No wonder he's relaxed and content. Very soothing imagery captured in just a few short lines. Well done! Great response to the club challenge.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your very understanding comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from mermaids
I enjoy reading poems about the moon. Your poem is unique because it is written about the crescent moon. There is a feeling of relaxation in your haiku form as your last line describes "armchair view of the stars".
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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I enjoy reading poems about the moon. Your poem is unique because it is written about the crescent moon. There is a feeling of relaxation in your haiku form as your last line describes "armchair view of the stars".
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from John Ciarmello
I love the words here, kahpot. They're warming and tell of perhaps an older person on the porch looking at the stars and beautiful crescent moon. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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I love the words here, kahpot. They're warming and tell of perhaps an older person on the porch looking at the stars and beautiful crescent moon. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your very understanding comments and review, yes sitting on the porch and just gazing, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Occasionally we look up and notice the moon and wonder where it will appear next as it is so buoyant and whimsical, I enjoyed your fun poem as we watch from our armchairs, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Occasionally we look up and notice the moon and wonder where it will appear next as it is so buoyant and whimsical, I enjoyed your fun poem as we watch from our armchairs, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the last line of this haiku. Armchair view of the stars. It's the lazy man's view! We are all guilty of this from one time or another! Star gazing takes an active role in getting out of your house and into the outdoors to see all the beautiful sights of the brilliant stars.
A crescent moon is lovely to behold in the dark sky up above. I love the artwork that is suited to this poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Jesse
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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I love the last line of this haiku. Armchair view of the stars. It's the lazy man's view! We are all guilty of this from one time or another! Star gazing takes an active role in getting out of your house and into the outdoors to see all the beautiful sights of the brilliant stars.
A crescent moon is lovely to behold in the dark sky up above. I love the artwork that is suited to this poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Jesse
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Jesse, yes the picture inspired me to be (lazy) or at least the vision of laziness, yes the moon is a marvelous thing, and the outdoors so wonderous, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
