Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, you've had a week of it, haven't you, and still more to come. What a terribe time. I do hope your son recovers soon, it doesn''t matter how old they are, our children are still a worry.
I'm glad Cord was told and came to get Ali, and I'm glad she's pressing charges. I'm sure she won't be his lawyer!! Lol. You've left a word out in the sentence below. Well done, my friend. I hope all goes well for you all. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
They headed that direction.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Oh dear, you've had a week of it, haven't you, and still more to come. What a terribe time. I do hope your son recovers soon, it doesn''t matter how old they are, our children are still a worry.
I'm glad Cord was told and came to get Ali, and I'm glad she's pressing charges. I'm sure she won't be his lawyer!! Lol. You've left a word out in the sentence below. Well done, my friend. I hope all goes well for you all. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
They headed that direction.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I have made the correction. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Barbara, I so sorry about the events that happened in your note. I can't believe you posted amend all that turmoil. This post quickly resolves the cliffhanger that you left us with in your previous post. It was a satisfying resolution with a close call. Well done. Stay out of the heat.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Barbara, I so sorry about the events that happened in your note. I can't believe you posted amend all that turmoil. This post quickly resolves the cliffhanger that you left us with in your previous post. It was a satisfying resolution with a close call. Well done. Stay out of the heat.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Scott Rhodie
Good news. Not much in the way of editing, as you said, only a few commas throughout. Single edit will sort that out. It's the only chapter I have read, but it flows well, and there are a couple of passive verbs, but again your edit will pick them up no problem. Well done, as your book obviously steams on.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Good news. Not much in the way of editing, as you said, only a few commas throughout. Single edit will sort that out. It's the only chapter I have read, but it flows well, and there are a couple of passive verbs, but again your edit will pick them up no problem. Well done, as your book obviously steams on.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. This will be edited many more times.
Comment from BethShelby
This is another excellent chapter. Maybe this time Luke will spend more than overnight in jail. Cord probably won't let her go to town alone. I'm sorry you had to give up the beach time with your grandchildren. I've had the gall bladder surgery it was no big deal and just three small incisions.
We've had the heat too and all my patio plants look dead. We did get shower yesterday. You're gentleman friend's worried." Your.....
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. Maybe this time Luke will spend more than overnight in jail. Cord probably won't let her go to town alone. I'm sorry you had to give up the beach time with your grandchildren. I've had the gall bladder surgery it was no big deal and just three small incisions.
We've had the heat too and all my patio plants look dead. We did get shower yesterday. You're gentleman friend's worried." Your.....
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help. I've had this surgery myself and it is minor. My worry, it that Steven is way overweight. I'm worried about his size.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I'm sorry that all your plans have been disrupted, but I'm glad it's nothing serious.
I really enjoyed this chapter, and thank goodness Ali was rescued in the last minute.
Alexandra's eyes meet Rico's= met
All best to all of you. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Hi Barbara, I'm sorry that all your plans have been disrupted, but I'm glad it's nothing serious.
I really enjoyed this chapter, and thank goodness Ali was rescued in the last minute.
Alexandra's eyes meet Rico's= met
All best to all of you. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help. Maybe someday, I'll have an error free post. LOL I doubt it.
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Oh, we all make mistakes, and we never see it. Lol. :)))
Comment from judiverse
I wish Ali didn't get into so many situations that call for Cord or someone else to bail her out. She's a lawyer. She surely has some power. Please show her stronger. She did that when she tried to help those abused women. The Luke character seems to come out of the blue. Does he really have a stake in attacking Ali as he did? Just something for you to consider. That aside, it was a good way to bring in some excitement. Your character development is going great. judi
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I wish Ali didn't get into so many situations that call for Cord or someone else to bail her out. She's a lawyer. She surely has some power. Please show her stronger. She did that when she tried to help those abused women. The Luke character seems to come out of the blue. Does he really have a stake in attacking Ali as he did? Just something for you to consider. That aside, it was a good way to bring in some excitement. Your character development is going great. judi
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Ali will show her strength. The whole point is Ali is finding herself. Luke showed up earlier. It will become clearer in the next post. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I remember Luke's first appearance. He seems to come out of the blue. Maybe someone is putting him up to it. judi
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Some body is.
Comment from Shirley McLain
First I am so sorry about your youngest son. No surgery is fine. Second, it is a shame you didn't get to spend time with your grandchildren. It will come around again. Finally, you wrote a great chapter again. Enjoy your Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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First I am so sorry about your youngest son. No surgery is fine. Second, it is a shame you didn't get to spend time with your grandchildren. It will come around again. Finally, you wrote a great chapter again. Enjoy your Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from amahra
A most exciting chapter, Barbara. I'm glad Alexandra is showing her toughness through her ordeal. Just one thing below:
With a controlled jabbed the tip of the knife went into her side. "Do that again and the knife goes deeper."
[With control, he jabbed her side with the tip of the knife.] "] [But better still..."He poked her side with the knife.] Poke means to jab, but not deeply.
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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A most exciting chapter, Barbara. I'm glad Alexandra is showing her toughness through her ordeal. Just one thing below:
With a controlled jabbed the tip of the knife went into her side. "Do that again and the knife goes deeper."
[With control, he jabbed her side with the tip of the knife.] "] [But better still..."He poked her side with the knife.] Poke means to jab, but not deeply.
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the help. I was worried about that sentence. I appreciate the help.
