Quiet Lawyer
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28 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Alexandra does get into lots of trouble; she seems tough but always gets into some mischievous cowboy busyness. That's what makes this story so filled with suspense. Enjoy your story.
It has been so hot here, too, we might get some rain. I guess we have summer for sure.
Hope your family is doing better.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Alexandra does get into lots of trouble; she seems tough but always gets into some mischievous cowboy busyness. That's what makes this story so filled with suspense. Enjoy your story.
It has been so hot here, too, we might get some rain. I guess we have summer for sure.
Hope your family is doing better.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
Comment from Tyletta Staton
That was very exciting, and although the passage began intensely, it ended on a playful note. I like that.
I enjoyed your story, but I enjoyed reading your real life story even better. You are an excellent writer in general.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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That was very exciting, and although the passage began intensely, it ended on a playful note. I like that.
I enjoyed your story, but I enjoyed reading your real life story even better. You are an excellent writer in general.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you for this review. I am not sure why I received three stars. You don't list any mistakes I made. How can I make it better so I can get five stars?
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I went back and gave it four. That is what I wanted to rate as anyway. I didn't notice any mistakes.
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I noticed you're new. Welcome to FS. I wish you luck here. It's a great place to learn to write. You may want to check the rating system. Unless there's a problem the standard is a five. I still don't know what to correct.
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I re-read it, and gave you fives stars. Great job!
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Thank you. It's not the stars as much as it is the review. If I need to make corrections, I want to be told what they are so I can learn.
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Truthfully, I thought you wrote in a more digestible manner about your actual life. You are an excellent writer, but when you aren't really trying to write something exciting, it was more fun to read. Does that make sense?
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This is a fictional romance novel. I'm not writing about my life.
Comment from eliz100
I was a little surprised by the picture but as I read the chapter, I could see why you chose it. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. Hope all goes well with your son.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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I was a little surprised by the picture but as I read the chapter, I could see why you chose it. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. Hope all goes well with your son.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the review. I was wondering about the picture, but I got a lot more men reviews. Go figure???? LOL
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LOL
Comment from Wordfinder
Perfectly written, nice pace, descriptive without being wordy. Natural sounding conversation and flowed pleasantly. The characters seem a little cliched to me, however they are consistent and you have portrayed them in a way that makes them pop off the page.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Perfectly written, nice pace, descriptive without being wordy. Natural sounding conversation and flowed pleasantly. The characters seem a little cliched to me, however they are consistent and you have portrayed them in a way that makes them pop off the page.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another dramatic chapter, Barbara, and well written. Ali can't seem to stay away from trouble no matter how hard she tries! I enjoyed reading it. Hope youâ??re sons surgery goes well. The best laid plans, right? Lol
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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This is another dramatic chapter, Barbara, and well written. Ali can't seem to stay away from trouble no matter how hard she tries! I enjoyed reading it. Hope youâ??re sons surgery goes well. The best laid plans, right? Lol
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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So true about the plans. I appreciate your dropping by and leaving this review.
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You?re most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from estory
Outside of the opening tension in the chapter, this was really mostly about Alexandra and Cord and Rico cementing their friendship. I liked the realistic dialogue, but I think you could have spent a bit more time with that tense opening scene instead of jumping over it with the crowd just rushing in to contain Luke. More detail there estory
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Outside of the opening tension in the chapter, this was really mostly about Alexandra and Cord and Rico cementing their friendship. I liked the realistic dialogue, but I think you could have spent a bit more time with that tense opening scene instead of jumping over it with the crowd just rushing in to contain Luke. More detail there estory
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Maybe but I'm not sure spending more time there would actually move the story forward. I will think about it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I saw nothing to fix, so either your editing's just fine or I got too caught up in the story to notice. She seems to inspire men to fierce displays doesn't she? Some lovely interactions in this chapter - I very much enjoyed it.
On a non-story related note, I hope everything goes well with your son.
Mike
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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I saw nothing to fix, so either your editing's just fine or I got too caught up in the story to notice. She seems to inspire men to fierce displays doesn't she? Some lovely interactions in this chapter - I very much enjoyed it.
On a non-story related note, I hope everything goes well with your son.
Mike
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the well wishes for Steven. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, sorry you aren't at the beach, but glad your son's illness isn't too serious. Although, gallstones can be mighty uncomfortable until he gets them out. Wishing you all the best!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Well, sorry you aren't at the beach, but glad your son's illness isn't too serious. Although, gallstones can be mighty uncomfortable until he gets them out. Wishing you all the best!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good writing. Good plot development. Credible dialogue.
I might not be remembering right, but I didn't think Cord was gonna be at home (at the house). But that's being too nit-picky of me. Good work.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Good writing. Good plot development. Credible dialogue.
I might not be remembering right, but I didn't think Cord was gonna be at home (at the house). But that's being too nit-picky of me. Good work.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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You're correct Cord was going to be out on the ranch, but they do have cell phones. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
An action-packed chapter. Sorry I haven't got a six left for it. Your clipped dialogue helps to ramp up the speed.
Just one query. I wasn't sure if this was a typo or a case of the character getting the word wrong. "Release the lady or I'll cut your juggler (jugular)."
Sorry to hear about your family crisis and change of plans. I hope all works out OK and the operation is successful.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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An action-packed chapter. Sorry I haven't got a six left for it. Your clipped dialogue helps to ramp up the speed.
Just one query. I wasn't sure if this was a typo or a case of the character getting the word wrong. "Release the lady or I'll cut your juggler (jugular)."
Sorry to hear about your family crisis and change of plans. I hope all works out OK and the operation is successful.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the catch. It was a typo. I'm surprised others didn't catch it. I appreciate the help. Don't worry about the six. I just appreciate you dropping by.
