Random Rhyme and Petty Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Mud Pie"a collection of phenomenally mundane work.
12 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Well, this certainly is different, Bill.
So what you're telling us is that haiku, tanks, and renga poetic forms are like mud pies, a "wet dirt bakery". Back to basics? They cook? Mix them together for fun? "A little bit me, a little bit you" ... Monkees? Recipe for success? Pat-a-cake, Pat-a-cake, Baker's man... Bake a cake as fast as you can?
Nicely penned in 5-7-5 syllables, Bill!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Well, this certainly is different, Bill.
So what you're telling us is that haiku, tanks, and renga poetic forms are like mud pies, a "wet dirt bakery". Back to basics? They cook? Mix them together for fun? "A little bit me, a little bit you" ... Monkees? Recipe for success? Pat-a-cake, Pat-a-cake, Baker's man... Bake a cake as fast as you can?
Nicely penned in 5-7-5 syllables, Bill!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Kimbob
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, Bill, you do make me smile. How you get away with it, I do not not know, but it is certainly make for entertaining reading. I simply love it. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Hahahaha, Bill, you do make me smile. How you get away with it, I do not not know, but it is certainly make for entertaining reading. I simply love it. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Ulla.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, mud pies make poems do they Bill? Whatever next, a very inventive and clever write and I am always amused by your work, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Ha ha ha, mud pies make poems do they Bill? Whatever next, a very inventive and clever write and I am always amused by your work, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Dolly
Comment from kahpot
How very well done, the mixing of forms is always fun, though maybe not as much as playing with mud, very clever, well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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How very well done, the mixing of forms is always fun, though maybe not as much as playing with mud, very clever, well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thanks, kahpot
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very well written mud pie haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Bill, This is a very well written mud pie haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Ric Myworld
Even us big kids like to get our hands dirty, but not so much with dirt. Maybe some flour, eggs, and water or milk, then we can clean up the cake later. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Even us big kids like to get our hands dirty, but not so much with dirt. Maybe some flour, eggs, and water or milk, then we can clean up the cake later. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Ric
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Haha. I don't see anything dirty in haiku, tanka, and renga. You need to make it more obvious. But I like the humor. This is supposed to be a poem, not a piece of prose.
Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Haha. I don't see anything dirty in haiku, tanka, and renga. You need to make it more obvious. But I like the humor. This is supposed to be a poem, not a piece of prose.
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Ohhhhh.
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Maybe it is a piece of prose.
Comment from Spitfire
I don't know what 'renga' is, but I'm sure it added flavor to the mix. Good use of consonance with 'wet' and 'dirt', and 'patted'.
Forced rhyme with 'dirt' and 'together'.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I don't know what 'renga' is, but I'm sure it added flavor to the mix. Good use of consonance with 'wet' and 'dirt', and 'patted'.
Forced rhyme with 'dirt' and 'together'.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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A renga is a grouping of tanka written by various contributors to capture a common theme.
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Thanks for the definition, Bill.
Comment from nomi338
No matter what she tells you, no matter how sweet, do not eat potted/mystery meat, even she give s you the sad eye. Eat that mud pie and you will wish to die. I know that you want to please her , to make her smile, but do not eat that mud pie, you can pretend if you want to, but do not take any a tiny bite.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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No matter what she tells you, no matter how sweet, do not eat potted/mystery meat, even she give s you the sad eye. Eat that mud pie and you will wish to die. I know that you want to please her , to make her smile, but do not eat that mud pie, you can pretend if you want to, but do not take any a tiny bite.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Too late.
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You are a dad, and a grand dad, I do understand.
Comment from LisaMay
I wrote a poem about mud recently myself, but you have shaped more into yours. Your haiku, tanka, and renga make tasty little bite-sized pies from your wet dirt bakery. Cute, just don't eat them.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I wrote a poem about mud recently myself, but you have shaped more into yours. Your haiku, tanka, and renga make tasty little bite-sized pies from your wet dirt bakery. Cute, just don't eat them.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thanks, LisaMay
