Two Loving Hearts
Fated to meet...5 total reviews
Comment from WriterHeather
Beautiful love story you have penned for the contest. You have captured those first attraction feelings so well. The Butterflies and electricity. Wonderful job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Beautiful love story you have penned for the contest. You have captured those first attraction feelings so well. The Butterflies and electricity. Wonderful job!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks for this brilliant review, much appreciated. :)
Comment from LisaMay
I'm pleased this turned out well for the men... I was worried when the people stared that they might turn hostile. I am also pleased they were able to be married. Your poem showed the initial hesitation but ultimate happy ending that should always be available to ANYBODY who finds love.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I'm pleased this turned out well for the men... I was worried when the people stared that they might turn hostile. I am also pleased they were able to be married. Your poem showed the initial hesitation but ultimate happy ending that should always be available to ANYBODY who finds love.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thanks for this great review, as always I'm so glad to hear from you. :)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
I like your poem. I like that the font is large and easily read. I like that the text is centered on the large, perfect visual. The rhyme scheme is great and not forced. I think if you changed the dream line to ~He walked out of my dream. It would make the poem more personal coming from the speaker of the poem. The other line that would be more personal is ~ Cupid let his arrow fly, and I didn't want to duck. Good luck, you have a good entry.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I like your poem. I like that the font is large and easily read. I like that the text is centered on the large, perfect visual. The rhyme scheme is great and not forced. I think if you changed the dream line to ~He walked out of my dream. It would make the poem more personal coming from the speaker of the poem. The other line that would be more personal is ~ Cupid let his arrow fly, and I didn't want to duck. Good luck, you have a good entry.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Such excellent suggestions. I changed my poem for the better, thanks to you. I appreciate you. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from RodG
You narrate your tale very well. You make this a warm-hearted story of two gay men meeting. It is easy to visualize Pete and your initial attraction to one another. I especially like the next to last stanza. This entry should do very well in the contest. Rod
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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You narrate your tale very well. You make this a warm-hearted story of two gay men meeting. It is easy to visualize Pete and your initial attraction to one another. I especially like the next to last stanza. This entry should do very well in the contest. Rod
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thanks, I appreciate this encouraging review. :)
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great response to the writing prompt and the contest. The following line was particularly striking: We talked around things left unsaid. A heartwarming story that fits the prompt really well.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Great response to the writing prompt and the contest. The following line was particularly striking: We talked around things left unsaid. A heartwarming story that fits the prompt really well.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you, I really appreciate this great review. :)
