Spanish Guitarra
Spanish Quintilla poetic form ~ FS Poetry Class22 total reviews
Comment from Theodore McDowell
I really like this one. Nice images and beautiful rhythm to the poem. I particularly like that you used the Quintilla as the structure for the piece.
Another fine job.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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I really like this one. Nice images and beautiful rhythm to the poem. I particularly like that you used the Quintilla as the structure for the piece.
Another fine job.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Hi Tim. So glad you liked this sad and soulful verse in the Spanish Quintilla form. We have started class up again and this is our first challenge. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heartfelt, beautiful, descriptive, and creative.
I pondered on the thought of playing music and thinking about a past
romance. I loved the format of these words. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is lovely and compliments these words.
Hope you are doing well, Melissa....Maria
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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The author's words are heartfelt, beautiful, descriptive, and creative.
I pondered on the thought of playing music and thinking about a past
romance. I loved the format of these words. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is lovely and compliments these words.
Hope you are doing well, Melissa....Maria
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Hello, sweet Maria. Thank you for our wonderful review. Glad you enjoyed this sad and soulful verse. It is in the Quintilla form that we are studying in the FS Poetry class. Several stanzas can be quite challenging. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from karenina
This is beautifully written. Love it when a poem touches my heart and I'm left sitting in silence for a bit...and enticed to go back and read it again for both content and the appreciation of the form. Your choice of "The Spanish Guitarist" is sublime-- I could easily have seen how this could have been ekphrastic poetry, the poem, and the image so perfectly aligned!
I love the Quintilla form, and you've done it proud!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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This is beautifully written. Love it when a poem touches my heart and I'm left sitting in silence for a bit...and enticed to go back and read it again for both content and the appreciation of the form. Your choice of "The Spanish Guitarist" is sublime-- I could easily have seen how this could have been ekphrastic poetry, the poem, and the image so perfectly aligned!
I love the Quintilla form, and you've done it proud!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Hello sweet Karenina. Thank you so very much for your wonderful review. It really means something to me when you tell me that you savored the writing and content. So appreciate you!
Melissa
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What a delightful poem!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Where do folks find these varying forms of poetry is the lead question, and in follow up why challenge the masses? I feel for the story, and hope you weren't one of the two leaving each other. Sounds sad, reads well.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Where do folks find these varying forms of poetry is the lead question, and in follow up why challenge the masses? I feel for the story, and hope you weren't one of the two leaving each other. Sounds sad, reads well.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thank you Tom. This is a little known form from Spain that our class teacher brought forward for us to study. It is quite challenging when you add several stanzas. I really appreciate your thoughts on this one.
Melissa
Comment from phill doran
Hello Melissa,
Lovely, lovely, lovely. You have crafted a wonderful, "all-round" fit with the form, its tempo and the subject matter.
Varying how you use your allotted two rhymes between the two verses creates an interesting read, and avoids any suggestion of a 'sing song' pace.
Good word choices too - very evocative (thrumming / la luna / Andalucía - and even 'brushing' as opposed to the more obvious 'strumming').
You write well, but always better when rising to something more challenging.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Hello Melissa,
Lovely, lovely, lovely. You have crafted a wonderful, "all-round" fit with the form, its tempo and the subject matter.
Varying how you use your allotted two rhymes between the two verses creates an interesting read, and avoids any suggestion of a 'sing song' pace.
Good word choices too - very evocative (thrumming / la luna / Andalucía - and even 'brushing' as opposed to the more obvious 'strumming').
You write well, but always better when rising to something more challenging.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Hello dear Phill. You have made my day with your review! I appreciate your perception of the challenging nature of the Quintilla. We have started a new FS poetry class and this was the first form for us. The next hurdle is to write one with five stanzas and each must have different end rhyme choices and rhyme pattern. Whew, it may take me a while :). So glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
This is lovely! I am always happy to see what you are learning in your classes. This format is perfect for a romantic piece highlighting a Spanish guitarist. I can hear the music now...
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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This is lovely! I am always happy to see what you are learning in your classes. This format is perfect for a romantic piece highlighting a Spanish guitarist. I can hear the music now...
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thank you June. This challenging form is the first one in this new class and I am having fun with it. I so appreciate your take on it!!
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You did a very good job on your Quintilla, Melissa.
You selected a wonderful work of art to grace the
page as well. A story about lovers who had to go their separate ways. Good Job! Nancy:)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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You did a very good job on your Quintilla, Melissa.
You selected a wonderful work of art to grace the
page as well. A story about lovers who had to go their separate ways. Good Job! Nancy:)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Hi Nancy. Thanks for your comments on this sad and soulful piece. So appreciate you.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm not familiar with the form Melissa and you did a wonderful job of it, fine rhymes and I heard the sweet spanish guitar music throughout, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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I'm not familiar with the form Melissa and you did a wonderful job of it, fine rhymes and I heard the sweet spanish guitar music throughout, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much Dolly. This is a new form for me that Jim introduced into the class. Its so fun to pick up the challenge and wrestle with it. So glad you liked it, my friend.
Melissa
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I must give it a try myself Melissa, you always do a sterling job with new forms, love Dolly x
Comment from RodG
This is lovely! The Quintilla is a new form to me and yours has inspired me to experiment. I love this poem about a Spanish guitarist playing old songs and the sad story of lovers "forced to go their separate ways." Your use of rhyme and smooth-flowing tetrameter make this challenging format look easy. Rod
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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This is lovely! The Quintilla is a new form to me and yours has inspired me to experiment. I love this poem about a Spanish guitarist playing old songs and the sad story of lovers "forced to go their separate ways." Your use of rhyme and smooth-flowing tetrameter make this challenging format look easy. Rod
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Oh, thank you Rod. We started the FS poetry class this past Saturday and this form was new to me too. Our next homework is to write one with five stanzas... we can't repeat the rhyme scheme nor end rhymes in each one, so that will be the challenge. Hugs, my friend. So glad you liked it.
Melissa
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I commend you again, Melissa, for making this new form look easy. Good luck writing five stanzas. Rod
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Hi, Melissa. That is quite a controversy. I don?t know enough about using foreign words in English works, though at times I use a French or Spanish term now and then. I would have to agree with your comments in the Forum. Rod
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Thank you Rod!! appreciate your insight!
M
Comment from Pantygynt
We had great fun with this in class, as writing a Copla Real (Royal Couplet) was set as partone of the less well known foreign forms we are studying.
This poem works exactly as short-form poetry should, producing a snapshot rather than a narrative. There is no room for narrative in a poem this brief.
I have no problem at all with the use of the odd Spanish word within a poem otherwise written in English, as this adds local colour to the piece. What concerns me though is whether one should add an English grammatical construct to a word in a language that does not possess thatthat grammatical form. This is what is being done here with 'la luna's'.
We all know 'la plume de ma tante' means my aunt's pen but to mix the two languages in the one statement as 'ma tante's plume' has got to be wrong, since neither French nor Spanish makes use of an apostrophised genitive contraction.
Apart from that I think this is an excellent rendering of this Spanish form.
I wonder what other reviewers feel on this.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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We had great fun with this in class, as writing a Copla Real (Royal Couplet) was set as partone of the less well known foreign forms we are studying.
This poem works exactly as short-form poetry should, producing a snapshot rather than a narrative. There is no room for narrative in a poem this brief.
I have no problem at all with the use of the odd Spanish word within a poem otherwise written in English, as this adds local colour to the piece. What concerns me though is whether one should add an English grammatical construct to a word in a language that does not possess thatthat grammatical form. This is what is being done here with 'la luna's'.
We all know 'la plume de ma tante' means my aunt's pen but to mix the two languages in the one statement as 'ma tante's plume' has got to be wrong, since neither French nor Spanish makes use of an apostrophised genitive contraction.
Apart from that I think this is an excellent rendering of this Spanish form.
I wonder what other reviewers feel on this.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thanks Jim. I really enjoyed our discussion in class this morning and look forward to comments and suggestions.... now on to the challenge of writing a Quintilla in five stanzas. I must tell you that this is an extra fun assignment for me. I plan to write on a new subject. Thanks again!
Melissa
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So pleased you are finding this enjoyable.
