Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Nicely written.
a step further? maybe a baby step. lol
Of course, he had guns. - 'has' guns would make more sense
He's gonna get a job so far away as to have to spend the week away? How would they date?
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

Thank you Wayne, I do appreciate the review and comments. This is based closely on my own relationship, and in truth he did take a job sixty miles away. He came back to his parents home on weekends only twenty miles away. You are right "has" works better.
Beth

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Nice date normal, old fashion with proper behavior just the way I like it:) so dad can be happy. Thank you for sharing and I am curious to see what's next.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

Thank you Isa. It was an old fashion date. because it was another time and another place. Stay tuned.
Beth

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Hooray! I'm glad you decided to keep up with the scripts, Beth! And I think you could do some of your stories in scripts as you do the dialogues so well. You really showed us your personalities in the dialogue!

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

I still need one more to be recognized as a script writer. I'm glad you think I'm doing all right with the dialogue.
Beth

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

This is capturing my interest. I like your touches of humor. The father seems to be the obstacle here to any prolonged relationship. You might explore that. He has a temper and could be dangerous.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

Thank you for the review. I'm glad you are seeing the traces of humor. People seem to think I do okay with dialogue. I don't put a lot into other things I post. Scripts are sort of a pain. Maybe I'm just not used to them.
Beth
Beth

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I have teased my sons about being this protective of their daughters. Only one is of dating age, so far. LOL Thank you for sharing scene two with us and I can't wait for scene three.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

Thank you for the review. I didn't start out planning on this continuing but maybe I need to write a little more.
Beth

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Those time could be a discouragement for a young man. I was very apprehensive when my girls were young, but I needn't have been, they were level headed, but my experiences as a young man, taught me how untrustworthy young men could be. Beautifully written Script Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : Hopefully he('I'll) be appeased.

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 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

That is probably the reason most dads worry. They remember their own not so pure thoughts when they were young. They also remember that the girl is sometime too naïve to know how to handle these guys and they assume their daughter is naïve and innocent and it their job to protect them.
Beth

reply by royowen on 22-Jun-2022

No, girls are surprisingly good at handling themselves, but there?s always that really bad guy lurking?

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

You have pushed the plot forward in this scene. I would have liked to hear the dialogue in the cafe to help me delve into Matt and Betsy's characters. A fly on the wall, in a way. I hope you develop the dialogue between them on the next date! Well done.

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 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022

Thanks Ted, I might take it forward. I didn't want to make this one too long. I appreciate the review.
Beth