First Date -Act Two
Continuation of Prelude to First Date17 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Delightful banter! This rings true to circumstances--witty zingers--this pair exudes chemistry, yet they are grounded in reality as to knowing their respective deal-breakers--smoking and drinking, same as mine. Wonderful piece!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Delightful banter! This rings true to circumstances--witty zingers--this pair exudes chemistry, yet they are grounded in reality as to knowing their respective deal-breakers--smoking and drinking, same as mine. Wonderful piece!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you Elizabeth. I really appreciate you reading and commenting on this one.
Beth
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think she's wise, but I don't think Daddy is going to change. He does sound like a nice guy, but should we be suspicious? I'm going to read the next part! Well done, Barb. I enjoyed this. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I think she's wise, but I don't think Daddy is going to change. He does sound like a nice guy, but should we be suspicious? I'm going to read the next part! Well done, Barb. I enjoyed this. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you again Sandra. Daddy was all bluster without a lot of follow through. I eventually learn how to handle him. My mom never did. She always tried to reason with him.
Beth
Comment from dmt1967
I thought the script was interesting and the dialogue sound. I am not sure about America but, usually, in Britain only little kids call their father 'Daddy.' Bigger ot teenager usually call their fathers 'Dad.' Thank you for sharing and have a nice weekend.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I thought the script was interesting and the dialogue sound. I am not sure about America but, usually, in Britain only little kids call their father 'Daddy.' Bigger ot teenager usually call their fathers 'Dad.' Thank you for sharing and have a nice weekend.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I didn't start calling my Dad, Dad until the sixties. Before that I called him Daddy. Of course, since this is basically the story of my own first date, I do admit to being naïve at seventeen. It is based on a true story although I called it fiction.
Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is excellent, Beth. The dialogue is natural and it's good these two are getting to know each other through conversation. I'm surprised that Betsy told Matt about her father's temper so early, but he seemed to take it in stride.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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This is excellent, Beth. The dialogue is natural and it's good these two are getting to know each other through conversation. I'm surprised that Betsy told Matt about her father's temper so early, but he seemed to take it in stride.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you Judy, I really appreciate the review and comments. Betsy says what she is thinking without worrying about the consequences.
Beth
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You?re welcome, Beth. I?m glad Matt is a good guy.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, I liked this and I'm glad you took it a step further. I must admit, I don't like all that talk about having a gun. I know it's a contentious issue in the States, but why it's so important in this day and time is so beyond me.
Now on to the next scene. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Hi Beth, I liked this and I'm glad you took it a step further. I must admit, I don't like all that talk about having a gun. I know it's a contentious issue in the States, but why it's so important in this day and time is so beyond me.
Now on to the next scene. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Everyone I every knew in Mississippi had guns in their homes. My Dad didn't hunt like most men, but he only used them to scare possums, foxes and hawks trying to get our chickens. Most people lived away from the city and liked to hunt.
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Oh I can understand that. The hunting bid, I mean. :)))
Comment from Teri7
I really enjoyed reading this script and scene. You used very good dialogue and very good descriptive words. Not everyone can write a script. I enjoyed this one!
love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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I really enjoyed reading this script and scene. You used very good dialogue and very good descriptive words. Not everyone can write a script. I enjoyed this one!
love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you Teri, I'm not a script writer but I decided to write enough to get rated in scripts. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is the second or next scene, in continuation, after the prelude, dating the first in the scene, decision was to be taken for exercise of freedom, some sort of errors, on analysis, attitude, people can take for self-security; nice taletelling with dramatic appeal in expressive order; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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This is the second or next scene, in continuation, after the prelude, dating the first in the scene, decision was to be taken for exercise of freedom, some sort of errors, on analysis, attitude, people can take for self-security; nice taletelling with dramatic appeal in expressive order; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the reviews on this scene. I'll probably post the last of this series today.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't read many scripts, and in truth, don't usually care for most that I do read. But yours is an exception to the rule with it's nice, ordinary couple, cute dialog, and relatable incidents. I'm looking forward to where it goes next. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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I don't read many scripts, and in truth, don't usually care for most that I do read. But yours is an exception to the rule with it's nice, ordinary couple, cute dialog, and relatable incidents. I'm looking forward to where it goes next. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Thank you for saying that. I've not really cared much for them either. Writing scrips is something new for me. I'm glad you like this one.
Beth
Comment from Gert sherwood
Continuation of Prelude to First Date
First Date -Act Two
BethShelby
Your script reminds me of how was 17 and Stan was in his twenties and my dad didn't want me go out with boys.
Your writing so well done and a pleasure to read.
Will be waiting for the next act.
Gert
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Continuation of Prelude to First Date
First Date -Act Two
BethShelby
Your script reminds me of how was 17 and Stan was in his twenties and my dad didn't want me go out with boys.
Your writing so well done and a pleasure to read.
Will be waiting for the next act.
Gert
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Gert, I changed the names but this is very closely based on my own first date.
Beth
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Beth
What ever I found it well written
Gert
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This script is a great continuation of your story,
Beth. I enjoyed reading it. Your gave readers lots
details to help them get to know you and Matt.
I would say you learned from Mom how to deflect
Dad's desire to interfere.
I look forward to more, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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This script is a great continuation of your story,
Beth. I enjoyed reading it. Your gave readers lots
details to help them get to know you and Matt.
I would say you learned from Mom how to deflect
Dad's desire to interfere.
I look forward to more, Jan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thank you Jan. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Lol. About learning from Mom, they say the apple doesn't fall far from the tree.
Beth
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