Be Your Bestl
a 5-5-5 poem13 total reviews
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi Bill, I tend to make sure my
body is a temple for Reese's
peanut butter cups. The last
line I sure practice too. I think
I help my mind by writing.
Your writing is superb, and
you have a good sense of
humor. All the best ~
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Hi Bill, I tend to make sure my
body is a temple for Reese's
peanut butter cups. The last
line I sure practice too. I think
I help my mind by writing.
Your writing is superb, and
you have a good sense of
humor. All the best ~
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Regina
Comment from jessizero
The first two lines were good, but that last line was hilarious! You got the syllable count right, and the subject was fun. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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The first two lines were good, but that last line was hilarious! You got the syllable count right, and the subject was fun. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Jessizero
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 5-5-5 writing prompt contest.
Good syllables count and connection between lines with nice presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid. " -- Atticus
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Excellent entry for the 5-5-5 writing prompt contest.
Good syllables count and connection between lines with nice presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid. " -- Atticus
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Gypsy, for the excellent review.
Comment from royowen
I particularly like that last line, which breaks apart the semi morality ofbthe first two. They are a great lead in to the punch line, where sticking to a strict regime would crack the walnut as it where, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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I particularly like that last line, which breaks apart the semi morality ofbthe first two. They are a great lead in to the punch line, where sticking to a strict regime would crack the walnut as it where, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Roy
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Thanks, Roy
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Welcome
Comment from LisaMay
Well, there is certainly much to swear about these days, and while I don't personally know any sailors I think my own colourful language would help me fit right in.
Regarding the other 2 instructions, I think I have them back to front - I cherish my mind; my body has developed all by itself into something that might sink the sailor's dinghy.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Well, there is certainly much to swear about these days, and while I don't personally know any sailors I think my own colourful language would help me fit right in.
Regarding the other 2 instructions, I think I have them back to front - I cherish my mind; my body has developed all by itself into something that might sink the sailor's dinghy.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thank you, LisaMay, for giving this a look.
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Thank you, LisaMay, for giving this a look.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
If you are obliged to do all that all the time you would certainly need to swear a lot. In its succint form, it is a piece that makes a dlear statement. The illyustration is great, too.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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If you are obliged to do all that all the time you would certainly need to swear a lot. In its succint form, it is a piece that makes a dlear statement. The illyustration is great, too.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Nancy
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:-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is a lot of positivity and strength with your words as you suggest we look after our bodies and mind and swear like a sailor! You made me smile, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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There is a lot of positivity and strength with your words as you suggest we look after our bodies and mind and swear like a sailor! You made me smile, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Dolly.
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all! The author's words in the first two lines gave great advice, are descriptive,
and creative. The last line made me smile! The artwork is awesome
and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all! The author's words in the first two lines gave great advice, are descriptive,
and creative. The last line made me smile! The artwork is awesome
and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Harmony.
Comment from Julcia
Great poem with fantastic artwork . The title ties the poem together well.
This poem could be developed into a philosophy of life. This clever poem
made great use of its'three lines . Julcia
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Great poem with fantastic artwork . The title ties the poem together well.
This poem could be developed into a philosophy of life. This clever poem
made great use of its'three lines . Julcia
Comment Written 21-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Julcia.
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You are welcome. Julcia
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, I got one of those right, and it's neither of the first two! This is a fun piece, from the artwork to your clever words. I wish you much success with the contest. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Well, I got one of those right, and it's neither of the first two! This is a fun piece, from the artwork to your clever words. I wish you much success with the contest. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Thank you, John.
