Scattered Thoughts
Thoughts to myself21 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Another stunner Charity. So, are you a lead nurse in a medical hospital?
A couple of observations:
2nd Line: Change "doesn't" to "don't"
10th Line: Change "are" to "our"
Keep 'em coming. I love reading your stuff.
Good job
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Another stunner Charity. So, are you a lead nurse in a medical hospital?
A couple of observations:
2nd Line: Change "doesn't" to "don't"
10th Line: Change "are" to "our"
Keep 'em coming. I love reading your stuff.
Good job
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Yes I'm doing the job of a lead nurse at a clinic in Hawaii but fighting to get paid as one. I'm glad you are enjoying all my poems.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, another striking poem by a contemporary and passionate writer, buoyed and motivated by a resolute and relentless spirit - a heart full of understanding in tense and smooth verse and dramatic imagery...
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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In my opinion, another striking poem by a contemporary and passionate writer, buoyed and motivated by a resolute and relentless spirit - a heart full of understanding in tense and smooth verse and dramatic imagery...
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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You always loving my poems 💛. Thank you 😊 for your review once again.
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You are very welcome, Charity - I find your poetry starkly real and emotionally resilient. Your poems represent the struggles of life today and the personal rise above the mayhem. I wish my daughter had found her strength within to both cope and rise above the darkness...
Eve
Comment from Whitewave
Charity,
I love the picture you have chosen of crazy thoughts colliding in a mix of scattered colours. It is absolutely right, and proven so, that our thoughts create our reality, so yes, "Change your thoughts and you change your world!"
This is a skill we need to learn and practice. Mistakes are a natural part of the process.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Charity,
I love the picture you have chosen of crazy thoughts colliding in a mix of scattered colours. It is absolutely right, and proven so, that our thoughts create our reality, so yes, "Change your thoughts and you change your world!"
This is a skill we need to learn and practice. Mistakes are a natural part of the process.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Yes so true. It's definitely hard to do.
Comment from Carlos' girl
You are the master of the slant rhyme and i Love slant rhymes. Last stanza blows my mind. Great work here Charity. Really great. No errors of spelling syntax or grammar. Smart and sophisticated driving metre. Love the glimpse into your human vulnerability.
This is exemplary. Total six
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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You are the master of the slant rhyme and i Love slant rhymes. Last stanza blows my mind. Great work here Charity. Really great. No errors of spelling syntax or grammar. Smart and sophisticated driving metre. Love the glimpse into your human vulnerability.
This is exemplary. Total six
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Lol 😆 I just call myself the poetic voice of the streets. In my slams they agree. Going to start posting some of my slams on YouTube.
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YouTube is a great venue to reach alot of people. I hope you do.
Comment from nomi338
You keep it real and strong. Spitting truth is not always popular, especially if the rock hits the wrong persons upside their heads. The truth really hurts if it discloses that you are the one doing wrong. Throw bone in a pack of dogs and stand back to see them fight over it. Throw a rock in a pack of dogs, stand back to see which are the first to run away. That will or should tell you all that you need to know about that particular pack of dogs.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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You keep it real and strong. Spitting truth is not always popular, especially if the rock hits the wrong persons upside their heads. The truth really hurts if it discloses that you are the one doing wrong. Throw bone in a pack of dogs and stand back to see them fight over it. Throw a rock in a pack of dogs, stand back to see which are the first to run away. That will or should tell you all that you need to know about that particular pack of dogs.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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So true. I could care less of popularity. I'm just want to be the poetic voice of the streets. I appreciate your review and advice.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
The artwork grabbed me straight away and pulled me in. This is creatively written and presented. I appreciate the optimistic undertone that you have expressed. The quote is accurate and a perfectly chosen one.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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The artwork grabbed me straight away and pulled me in. This is creatively written and presented. I appreciate the optimistic undertone that you have expressed. The quote is accurate and a perfectly chosen one.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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You welcome. Thanks for stopping by and reading my poem.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Life challenges with the good, the bad and the ugly in a nutshell. I think we are going through similar events minus the second chance... I am still waiting for mine:). Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and be strong. God got you cover.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Life challenges with the good, the bad and the ugly in a nutshell. I think we are going through similar events minus the second chance... I am still waiting for mine:). Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and be strong. God got you cover.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from papa55mike
I've also worked for a few people that treated m like a garbage disposal. I love the flow of your writing and how your thoughts appear on the paper. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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I've also worked for a few people that treated m like a garbage disposal. I love the flow of your writing and how your thoughts appear on the paper. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2022
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I'm glad you can relate to some of my poem. Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Redemption is the way to go!
People should find tine to refresh what happens in their daily life.
Continue to do the good deeds and get rid of the bad ones.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Redemption is the way to go!
People should find tine to refresh what happens in their daily life.
Continue to do the good deeds and get rid of the bad ones.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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You welcome
Comment from royowen
God loves a cheerful giver, and who is pleased with someone who appreciates Him no matter what, a very interesting poem, which was a little all over the place dear girl, but well done, Charity, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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God loves a cheerful giver, and who is pleased with someone who appreciates Him no matter what, a very interesting poem, which was a little all over the place dear girl, but well done, Charity, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Lol I think I'm going to change the poem to scattered thoughts. That was the purpose. Thanks my friend.
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Good idea.
