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Buffalo

A haiku

6 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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Ed,
This is a well done haiku about the beauty of the mountains and the animal life in it. I think you could find some fitting artwork to illustrate it.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Joan

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022

Comment from Marienkiefer
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This is a very nice haiku, with colour and life, celebrating nature and landscape. There is flow, deliberate movement and imagery.

Sparkling in your poem: metaphor, nature and mountains shedding cool blue tears.

Congratulations on your third place finish in the haiku competition. It was wonderful to have participated in the same competition.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2022

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your haiku, Ed. Your words painted a
great image for readers, Your last line has 6 syllables
rather than 7.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
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 Comment Written 18-Jun-2022

Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
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This haiku has potential. However, the syllable count for the last line is 6. Buffalo alone has 3 syllables. I also do not understand the connection between the locations in the poem~a desert, mountains and the grassy plains where buffalo roam. The poem would also be enhanced with a visual. Click on the house icon at the top of the screen on the left. Go down to "Poetry Dances", and you can read the requirements for all poetry forms offered as prompts on this site.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2022

Comment from Scott Rhodie
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A lovely image of the mountains, the desert and their integration with the changing of the seasons. The haiku flows really well leading to the benefit of the natural world within the last line of the poem. Great.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2022

Comment from mermaids
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Your haiku form paints a clear picture of nature. I love your last line about the buffalo grazing green grass, it gives a sense of tranquility to your words. Excellent haiku form and use of words.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2022