Guns At Birth
a 250-word story25 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
It's a mix of satire and horror, and cleverly written - but unfortunately kids are taught very young how to use guns in some countries. With predictable outcomes. You've written a clever twist (but again horror) in the ending.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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It's a mix of satire and horror, and cleverly written - but unfortunately kids are taught very young how to use guns in some countries. With predictable outcomes. You've written a clever twist (but again horror) in the ending.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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The issue is dicey and polarizing, which I feel satire brings into perspective.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ugh! I know you're being sarcastic, but in these days I can almost hear some idiot making this argument.
Well written, as always, but the story is an automatic turnoff for me personally.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Ugh! I know you're being sarcastic, but in these days I can almost hear some idiot making this argument.
Well written, as always, but the story is an automatic turnoff for me personally.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Satire works best with volatile issues.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, Yes, this is satire at its best. But as with all satire there's always an undertone of seriousness. A seriousness that is in much need to be addressed.
It's a great flash, funny and to the point. I loved the last line. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hi Bill, Yes, this is satire at its best. But as with all satire there's always an undertone of seriousness. A seriousness that is in much need to be addressed.
It's a great flash, funny and to the point. I loved the last line. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Ulla.
Comment from nomi338
Damn Ace, that is kind of harsh. If you do not want to become the preferred target of Junior, or junettea, You had better give some consideration of how you treat the young, budding marksperson. If they do not aim at you, the issue of missing or not missing does not come up.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Damn Ace, that is kind of harsh. If you do not want to become the preferred target of Junior, or junettea, You had better give some consideration of how you treat the young, budding marksperson. If they do not aim at you, the issue of missing or not missing does not come up.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Yeah, but we all know, they WILL be aiming. Not really. My kids love me to dea --
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Now I know you did not speak too soon, or did you? LOL.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Owning a gun alone is a hazard, its a bit light lighting a cigarette in a petrol station, you run the risk of death as bullets silence people, a poignant write and a clever last line, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Owning a gun alone is a hazard, its a bit light lighting a cigarette in a petrol station, you run the risk of death as bullets silence people, a poignant write and a clever last line, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Bill,
Great commentary - but you might get disqualified, because it's meant to be a fiction contest...
You are very good with dialogue at most times, and this is no exception. However 'unrealistic' the setting (we hope), the words flow, and it is all plausible and well paced.
A neat, well considered and provocative write: this might go down like a lead balloon with some readers - well done.
I wish you well with your continued, entertaining, writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hello Bill,
Great commentary - but you might get disqualified, because it's meant to be a fiction contest...
You are very good with dialogue at most times, and this is no exception. However 'unrealistic' the setting (we hope), the words flow, and it is all plausible and well paced.
A neat, well considered and provocative write: this might go down like a lead balloon with some readers - well done.
I wish you well with your continued, entertaining, writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Phill, for the great review. I imagine no one takes me seriously, and can see this as satire.
Comment from Cass Carlton
This piece shows how a ridiculous premise becomes more and more ridiculous when one attempts to make it sound sensible.No-one in their right mind would put a gun into the grasp of a baby.Now would they? It doesn't bear thinking about the ethical issues that would rise from such an act. Teach 'em young! teach them what? Fear and terror.The bigger the gun the safer you are? No thanks. cheers Cass
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This piece shows how a ridiculous premise becomes more and more ridiculous when one attempts to make it sound sensible.No-one in their right mind would put a gun into the grasp of a baby.Now would they? It doesn't bear thinking about the ethical issues that would rise from such an act. Teach 'em young! teach them what? Fear and terror.The bigger the gun the safer you are? No thanks. cheers Cass
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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If this is seen as anything but satire, the reader should seek counseling. : )
Comment from Dawn Munro
Okay, come on now -- give others a chance in this contest! (*grin*)
I LOVE THIS!!! What a title, what an argument, what a fun read! And that ending? Superb!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Okay, come on now -- give others a chance in this contest! (*grin*)
I LOVE THIS!!! What a title, what an argument, what a fun read! And that ending? Superb!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Dawn.
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It was my pleasure. :)
Comment from jessizero
This was a great piece of flash fiction. It was utterly ridiculous, as I'm sure was your intent. I did really enjoy reading this, especially the last line. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This was a great piece of flash fiction. It was utterly ridiculous, as I'm sure was your intent. I did really enjoy reading this, especially the last line. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Jessizero, for seeing the satire.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Bill Scott
GOOD for you got your way of saying that guns are not toys, besides who would ever give even a plastic gun with fake bullets to a baby.
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hi Bill Scott
GOOD for you got your way of saying that guns are not toys, besides who would ever give even a plastic gun with fake bullets to a baby.
Gert
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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No one, Gert. I hope.
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What makes me really upset is when I see a child with a toy plastic gun or even a water gun,
Gert
