Mulberry Jam
Memories from my childhood12 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
I don't think this is a haiku. Your syllable counts are wrong. Unless you are doing a modified form or something? I do like the poem, and it brings up a pretty mental image. Best wishes to you.
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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I don't think this is a haiku. Your syllable counts are wrong. Unless you are doing a modified form or something? I do like the poem, and it brings up a pretty mental image. Best wishes to you.
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Yes I think you are correct . However, it seems that this type of poem can take modifications. Will find out. Take care and have a good day.
Regards
Barry
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I hope your mom had better mulberry jam than I did on my one and only attempt. Very sweet poem with a berry that puckers the mouth. Haiku is usually 3 lines with 5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables, but I understand there are other forms. Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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I hope your mom had better mulberry jam than I did on my one and only attempt. Very sweet poem with a berry that puckers the mouth. Haiku is usually 3 lines with 5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables, but I understand there are other forms. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Carol,
Once again thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. Was not too certain how these go. The thing I love about this site is that you can give many different forms of writing a go. Have a good day and take care.
Barry Penfold.
