Mystery in a Candy Dish.
I never imagined.......27 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Let me say, firstly, you haven't, either written too less, or what you have written is for "yours eye only" as most of what I reviewed. FS has been "recognized" or Best Awards. Congrats. Maybe... nah, I'll never be that good.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Let me say, firstly, you haven't, either written too less, or what you have written is for "yours eye only" as most of what I reviewed. FS has been "recognized" or Best Awards. Congrats. Maybe... nah, I'll never be that good.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Good grief--five red stars and a green cross! This is like winning the lottery. Thank you, thank you.
I'm not sure I know what you mean when you say I may have "written too less" or for my "eye only." And, I certainly don't know why you said you'd never be as good--look at all the awards and ribbons you have chalked up.
Best wishes, and always check the jelly beans before you grab one.
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What I meant was for being subscribe since 2011 the volume to view is rather small. Am I missing something? As for Your eyes only" I may have said my, was saying perhaps you wrote for yourself alone. Lastly, I am a big jelly bean fan, but the archaic one's , especially licorice.
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and by the way, it wasn't five but six stars. As i said, I love Jelly beans
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I know about the six stars, but they show it as five stars and a green cross--never could figure that out. LOL
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The + lights up when rating is above five. Why? It's not as if there was a seven.
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Now, I understand what you meant--I took about a ten-year break while teaching high school.
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Now, I understand what you meant--I took about a ten-year break while teaching high school.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This was fun to read. You did well with the word limit. You've created a good setting, set the plot and there is a strong depiction of the characters. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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This was fun to read. You did well with the word limit. You've created a good setting, set the plot and there is a strong depiction of the characters. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Thanks. Liz, for your review and all the stars. I appreciate your comments.
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***smile***
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, what a hoot! This should be on that TV show Life in Pieces, but it is a great entry for this contest, good luck. This story is literally out of the mouths of babes. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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LOL, what a hoot! This should be on that TV show Life in Pieces, but it is a great entry for this contest, good luck. This story is literally out of the mouths of babes. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Terry, for your review and all the stars. My son did this. I didn't laugh then, but I'm glad it brings so many smiles now.
Thank you for all the stars and good wishes.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Smart boy, your son. Who says children don't problem solve, they do it all the time and usually they have very creative ways of getting to the result they want. This piece made me laugh. Reminded me of the time my niece baked her first batch of brownies. She put the mix in a square cake pan and added an egg in the middle. The brownies came out of the oven as roasted brownie mix with a cooked egg in the center. When I told her the egg should have been stirred into the mix, she said, the instructions never said to mix in the egg, just to add it. :) Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Smart boy, your son. Who says children don't problem solve, they do it all the time and usually they have very creative ways of getting to the result they want. This piece made me laugh. Reminded me of the time my niece baked her first batch of brownies. She put the mix in a square cake pan and added an egg in the middle. The brownies came out of the oven as roasted brownie mix with a cooked egg in the center. When I told her the egg should have been stirred into the mix, she said, the instructions never said to mix in the egg, just to add it. :) Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Olivanne, for your review, all the stars, and the good wishes.
The story about your niece sounds like it is story-worthy, too. Kids!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Hahaha! This is a short, succinct, and humorous story. I wondered what happened to the jelly beans and thought the sun came in the window and melted them. I wasn't expecting the surprise ending. Boys will be boys. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Hahaha! This is a short, succinct, and humorous story. I wondered what happened to the jelly beans and thought the sun came in the window and melted them. I wasn't expecting the surprise ending. Boys will be boys. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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I'm glad you got a laugh from that little story. Thank you, also, for the many stars. Have a great day.
Comment from Wendy G
Typical boy, and very clever! And he's right - no/one else will want them. You wrote the humorous story very well, with skill and care. Best wishes for your entry in the 75 word contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Typical boy, and very clever! And he's right - no/one else will want them. You wrote the humorous story very well, with skill and care. Best wishes for your entry in the 75 word contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Wendy, for your review and all the stars. Also, for the good wishes.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Yep, that sounds about right. As long as went back and finished them later on, no worries! lol
The formatting here is a little off. Some sentences are double-spaced after the period and others not. Just for consistency, they should be the same.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Hi there,
Yep, that sounds about right. As long as went back and finished them later on, no worries! lol
The formatting here is a little off. Some sentences are double-spaced after the period and others not. Just for consistency, they should be the same.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review and suggestion. I went back and pushed all the words back to the periods and then put two spaces after all of them. However, two lines were then indented. I think part of the problem is the way the formatting is automatically changed to fit next to the illustration. I didn't write it next to the picture. At any rate, I fiddled around with the spaces and I think it's better now. Thank you for your observation.
Comment from LisaMay
This is a cute story, well told. What mischievous strategies kids get up to while trying to claim more than they should! Your son showed rather selfish initiative... no doubt he has been informed of his greed, but things like that do make us laugh.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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This is a cute story, well told. What mischievous strategies kids get up to while trying to claim more than they should! Your son showed rather selfish initiative... no doubt he has been informed of his greed, but things like that do make us laugh.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your review and all the stars. My son certainly was told a thing or two. He was an only child and had a selfish streak in him. He is now a firefighter and spends his time helping others.
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He has certainly mended his ways then!
Comment from Spitfire
LOL. This is hilarious. Thanks for a much needed laugh. I have to wonder if this is based on truth. I can imagine a child emptying the jar, licking each one and putting it back in the container. For sure, no one will eat them now!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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LOL. This is hilarious. Thanks for a much needed laugh. I have to wonder if this is based on truth. I can imagine a child emptying the jar, licking each one and putting it back in the container. For sure, no one will eat them now!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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It is based on truth. I just didn't want to say that since it is supposed to be a fiction contest. But yes, my young son did just that. He also protested once when I asked him to pass out a tray with an assortment of donuts on it. He kept holding back until I asked what the problem was. He said his favorite donuts were in the assortment and he didn't want anyone to eat them.
He's better now.
Thank you for your review and rating.
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I love how your son thinks.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
My kind of kid. Yay Bang!
Good story. And in seventy-five words!
Good work.
Some may say that you have a set up, conflict, and resolution (or whatever the terms of a story are called), but I'm still lacking real resolution (lol). Does the kid get his butt beat? Is the kid grounded from candy and TV or GameBoy? Does Mom never again buy candy? Does the kid have to sit and eat it all and then go to bed? Come on, Mom! Blister his little fanny - especially if he licked the black ones (my favorite).
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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My kind of kid. Yay Bang!
Good story. And in seventy-five words!
Good work.
Some may say that you have a set up, conflict, and resolution (or whatever the terms of a story are called), but I'm still lacking real resolution (lol). Does the kid get his butt beat? Is the kid grounded from candy and TV or GameBoy? Does Mom never again buy candy? Does the kid have to sit and eat it all and then go to bed? Come on, Mom! Blister his little fanny - especially if he licked the black ones (my favorite).
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks for the review and comments. I appreciate them.
Now to give you the resolution you are looking for, I would probably need to write the story in seventy-six words. That extra word, I think, would do it. Just joking.
Flash fiction is a challenge. The next contest allows 250 words!
Take care.
